CWSwr_9E_Chap_005
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The library was very quiet. I couldn’t concentrate.
Although the library was very quiet, I couldn’t concentrate.
5 - 12
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
5-7
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use Active Verbs
Prefer the active voice.
When the subject receives the action, the verb is in the passive voice. The netbook was bought by Hakim.
Chapter Five
The Fourth Step in Essay Writing
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
John Langan
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
unnecessarily.
Ex.: One of the fringe benefits of my job is that you I can use a company credit card for gasoline.
5-5
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
Chapter 5
Step 4 Revise and Edit Your Work
Strategies for revising sentences::
• • • • • • Use parallelism. Use a consistent point of view. Use specific words. Use active verbs. Use concise words. Use varied sentences.
5-2
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use Parallelism
By balancing the items in a sentence, you will make the sentence clearer and easier to read.
5 - 14
Chapter 5
Editing Sentences
After revising, check for mistakes in grammar, punctuation, mechanics, usage, and spelling.
Edit according to the conventions of written English, aka sentence skills.
into varied sentences:
The truck bounced off a guardrail, sideswiped a tree, and plunged into the ditch.
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
5-4
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use a Consistent Point of View:
Pronouns
Do not shift point of view
5 - 15
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Proofreading
Check the edited draft of your paper for typos and other careless errors.
When the subject of a sentence performs the action of the verb, the verb is in the active voice. Hakim bought the netbook.
5-8
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
Ex.: My job includes checking inventory, initialing orders, and to call the suppliers. calling
5-3
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Beginning with an Opening Word or Phrase
...transforms simple sentences (which can be monotonous) -Paul was concerned about his daughter’s fever. Paul called a doctor.
Adding a second complete thought. Adding a dependent thought. Beginning with an opening word or phrase. Placing adjectives or verbs in a series.
5 - 10
into varied sentences:
Concerned about his daughter’s fever, Paul called a doctor.
5 - 13
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
5-9
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Vary Your Sentences
Effective writing is writing that is varied and interesting.
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use Specific Words
To be an effective writer, you must use specific words rather than general words.
General: The dog ran down the street. Specific: The mangy stray loped down Broadway, dodging cars and startled pedestrians.
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use Concise Words
Prefer concision.
Wordiness -- using more words than necessary -- is often a sign of lazy or careless writing. Too Wordy: In this paper, I am planning to describe the hobby that I enjoy of collecting old comic books. Revision: I enjoy collecting old comic books.
Chapter 5
Use a Consistent Point of View: Do not shift verb tenses
Verbs
unnecessarily.
Ex.: Jean punched down the risen dough. dumped Then she dumps it onto the worktable.
Chapter 5
Placing Adjectives or Verbs in a Series
...transforms simple sentences (which can be monotonous) -The truck bounced off a guardrail. It sideswiped a tree. It plunged into the ditch.
5 - 11
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Adding a Dependent Thought
Transform simple sentences (which can be monotonous) -into complex sentences:
5 - 16
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
5-6
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Specific Sentences
1: Use exact names. (Not “the boy,” but “Vince.”) 2: Use lively verbs. (Not “ate,” but “slurped.”) 3: Use descriptive words. (ety old Buick.”) 4: Use sense descriptions. (“Vince slurped his ice-cold chocolate milkshake while sitting on the squeaking front seat of his rickety old Buick.”)
Vary your sentences by:
1: 2: 3: 4:
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Adding a Second Complete Thought
Transform simple sentences (which can be monotonous) -into compound sentences:
Greg worked on the engine. The car still wouldn’t start.
Greg worked on the engine, but the car still wouldn’t start.
Although the library was very quiet, I couldn’t concentrate.
5 - 12
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
5-7
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use Active Verbs
Prefer the active voice.
When the subject receives the action, the verb is in the passive voice. The netbook was bought by Hakim.
Chapter Five
The Fourth Step in Essay Writing
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
John Langan
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
unnecessarily.
Ex.: One of the fringe benefits of my job is that you I can use a company credit card for gasoline.
5-5
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
Chapter 5
Step 4 Revise and Edit Your Work
Strategies for revising sentences::
• • • • • • Use parallelism. Use a consistent point of view. Use specific words. Use active verbs. Use concise words. Use varied sentences.
5-2
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use Parallelism
By balancing the items in a sentence, you will make the sentence clearer and easier to read.
5 - 14
Chapter 5
Editing Sentences
After revising, check for mistakes in grammar, punctuation, mechanics, usage, and spelling.
Edit according to the conventions of written English, aka sentence skills.
into varied sentences:
The truck bounced off a guardrail, sideswiped a tree, and plunged into the ditch.
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
5-4
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use a Consistent Point of View:
Pronouns
Do not shift point of view
5 - 15
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Proofreading
Check the edited draft of your paper for typos and other careless errors.
When the subject of a sentence performs the action of the verb, the verb is in the active voice. Hakim bought the netbook.
5-8
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
Ex.: My job includes checking inventory, initialing orders, and to call the suppliers. calling
5-3
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Beginning with an Opening Word or Phrase
...transforms simple sentences (which can be monotonous) -Paul was concerned about his daughter’s fever. Paul called a doctor.
Adding a second complete thought. Adding a dependent thought. Beginning with an opening word or phrase. Placing adjectives or verbs in a series.
5 - 10
into varied sentences:
Concerned about his daughter’s fever, Paul called a doctor.
5 - 13
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
5-9
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Vary Your Sentences
Effective writing is writing that is varied and interesting.
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use Specific Words
To be an effective writer, you must use specific words rather than general words.
General: The dog ran down the street. Specific: The mangy stray loped down Broadway, dodging cars and startled pedestrians.
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Use Concise Words
Prefer concision.
Wordiness -- using more words than necessary -- is often a sign of lazy or careless writing. Too Wordy: In this paper, I am planning to describe the hobby that I enjoy of collecting old comic books. Revision: I enjoy collecting old comic books.
Chapter 5
Use a Consistent Point of View: Do not shift verb tenses
Verbs
unnecessarily.
Ex.: Jean punched down the risen dough. dumped Then she dumps it onto the worktable.
Chapter 5
Placing Adjectives or Verbs in a Series
...transforms simple sentences (which can be monotonous) -The truck bounced off a guardrail. It sideswiped a tree. It plunged into the ditch.
5 - 11
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Adding a Dependent Thought
Transform simple sentences (which can be monotonous) -into complex sentences:
5 - 16
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
5-6
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Specific Sentences
1: Use exact names. (Not “the boy,” but “Vince.”) 2: Use lively verbs. (Not “ate,” but “slurped.”) 3: Use descriptive words. (ety old Buick.”) 4: Use sense descriptions. (“Vince slurped his ice-cold chocolate milkshake while sitting on the squeaking front seat of his rickety old Buick.”)
Vary your sentences by:
1: 2: 3: 4:
College Writing Skills with Readings, 9/e
©2014 The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc.
Chapter 5
Adding a Second Complete Thought
Transform simple sentences (which can be monotonous) -into compound sentences:
Greg worked on the engine. The car still wouldn’t start.
Greg worked on the engine, but the car still wouldn’t start.