雅思5.5分作文批改范例

一．The table shows the total length of high speed train track in three countries
The table presents the information about the total length of high speed train track in China,France and Japan in 1990,2010 and the projection for 2010.
It is clear that Japan had the longest high speed train track in1990,with 1200 kms,while France ranked second position with 700kmsand China had no high train track at this time .However, the next two decade experienced a sharp increase in high speed train tracks in China, reaching up to 5800kms in 2010, while the length of high speed train track was 2600kms and 2500kms in France and Japan respectively in the same year.
It is predicted that China will remain on the upward trend in the next decade . In 2020,the length of high train track in China is expected to reach 13400kms, which is over three times the length of the other countries’ .The length of total high train track in France is expected to increase gradually to 3900,while that in Japan, it is predicted to see a relatively slow increase ,reaching only 3600kms in 2020.
Overall,since China began the project of high speed train, the total length of high speed train track has increased dramatically in the past few years ,while the industry of high speed train in France and Japan rose relatively steadily.
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