2012届高考英语书面表达文字稿讲评1图画式作文

①有一天，我和父亲在湖边散步；
②一个女孩骑自行车路过（结合后面的图中所反映的内容可以推断女孩骑车的速度很快）。

我们要将第二、三两幅图连起来看，才容易提炼要点。

根据第三幅图可以看出是有人掉到湖里了。

根据第一幅图可以推测是骑自行车的女孩。

结合常识提炼出下列要点：
①听到人可怕的尖叫声和有什么掉到水里的声音；
②转过头看到女孩在水里挣扎，在喊“救命啊！”。

对这幅图我们要展开合理的想象。

根据图中“我”头脑中的问号，可以推断“我”感到非常困惑。

为什么？结合常识“得到了别人的帮助，理应表示感谢”。

再根据图中“女孩已经骑车离去”可以推断女孩连声“谢谢”恐怕都没有说。

这样推断才能为后面谈谈感想埋下伏笔。

遣词造句（注意多重表达）
One day Daddy and I were taking a walk by the lake .
A girl rode past at a very high speed.
We heard a frightened scream.
There was a big noise of something dropping into the water.
Something dropped into the water, making a big noise.
We turned and found the girl struggling in the lake.
The girl was crying for help.
We heard the girl crying for help.
Dad and I ran as possible as quickly towards her and pulled her out of the water.
Without hesitation, Dad and I ran quickly towards her and saved her.
We also managed to get her bike which fell into the lake.
We were also able to pull her bike out of the water.
The girl rode away even without saying＂Thanks＂.
I had thought the girl would say ＂Thank you＂to us before she left, but she said nothing and rode away.
I felt quite puzzled at her behavior.
I felt quite disappointed at her impoliteness.
连贯成篇
One day Daddy and I were taking a walk by the lake when a girl rode past at a very high speed. Then suddenly we heard a frightened scream, followed by a big noise of something dropping into the water. We turned and found the girl struggling in the lake, crying for help. Without hesitation, Dad and I ran quickly towards her and pulled her out of the water. We also managed to get her bike. Almost immediately, the girl rode away even without saying＂Thanks＂.
I felt quite puzzled at her impoliteness.
围绕女孩的无礼行为自拟感想
①对自己：为什么要帮助别人？
帮助别人是明德，不是图别人的感谢；
②对女孩的无礼进行评论：
许多年轻人不懂礼貌，这对建设和谐社会非常有害。

③自我劝慰
比起帮了别人反成被告的人来说，我们还算幸运。

毕竟我们没有被人冤枉。

遣词造句（注意多重表达）
Helping others is the traditional virtue.
We don’t help ot hers for “Thanks” .
We don’t help others because they thank us.
Many young people don’t know how to be polite .
Many people don’t know what being polite means.
It does much harm to the construction of Harmonious Society .
It is very harmful to constructing Harmonious Society .
Compared to the people who offered their hand but were later accused of causing the accidents, How lucky we were! After all, we were not done wrong to by others.
I remembered stories where people offered their hand but were later accused of causing the accidents. How lucky we were! After all, we escaped being included in such stories.
连贯成篇
As far as I’m concerned, helping others is the traditional virtue. We don’t help others for “Thanks”, b ut nowadays, many young people don’t know how to be polite, which does much harm to the construction of Harmonious Society. However, compared to the people who offered their hand but were later accused of causing the accidents, I felt how lucky we were! After all, we were not done wrong to by others.
【参考范文】一
One day Daddy and I were taking a walk by the lake when a girl rode past at a very high speed. Then suddenly we heard a frightened scream, followed by a big noise of something dropping into the water. We turned and found the girl struggling in the lake, crying for help. Without hesitation ,Dad and I ran quickly towards her and pulled her out of the water. We also managed to get her bike. Almost immediately, the girl rode away even without saying＂Thanks＂. I felt quite puzzled at her impoliteness.
As far as I am concerned, h elping others is the traditional virtue. We don’t help others for
“Thanks”, but nowadays, many young people don’t know how to be polite, which does much harm to the construction of Harmonious Society. However, compared to the people who offered their hand but were later accused of causing the accidents, I felt how lucky we were! After all, we were not done wrong to by others.
【参考范文】二
One day Daddy and I were taking a walk by the lake when a girl rode past at a very high speed. Then suddenly we heard a frightened scream, followed by a big noise of something dropping into the water. We turned and found the girl struggling in the lake, crying for help. Dad and I ran quickly towards her and pulled her out of the water. We also managed to get her bike. Almost immediately, the girl rode away even without saying＂Thanks＂. I felt quite disappointed at her behavior.
We don’t help others for＂Thanks＂, but nowadays many young people don’t know to be polite. What a pity it is for our society and for our civilization! At the same time, I remembered stories where people offered their hand but were later accused of causing the accidents. How lucky we were! After all, we escaped being included in such stories.
【2012届·四川省成都石室中学高三月考】
以下四辐图所反映的是你上周六在你家附近的公园里的一条湖里救起了一名落水儿童的经过。

请根据图画所反映的内容，写一篇英文周记，叙述事情发生的全过程并简要谈谈你的感受（至少两点）。

注意：
1.周记的开头已为写好（不计入总词数）；
2.词数：150左右。

3.参考词汇：pavilion（公园、花园中的）亭子
It was sunny last Saturday. I went to the park near my home to spend my weekend as usual. At about noon
I was enjoying my reading in a pavilion near a lake when suddenly I heard someone crying for help. I jumped up to see what was happening and was shocked by the scene. In the distance a little kid was seen struggling in the water, while many people standing by the lake took no measure to help the kid. Believe it or not, I even heard some persons say that it was none of their business and it was freezing cold after all. Without hesitation, I pushed through the crowd , rushing to the river as I took off my coat and jumped into the water quickly. Cold as the water was, I managed to reach him and held him back to the bank. To my relief, the kid was saved in time.
I was proud what I had done that day. I hope everyone can give a hand when others are in trouble. Only in this way can we build a harmonious society.。