重庆市高2022届学业质量调研抽测(第一次)读后续写试题讲解

“Oh, Daddy,” I said, “isn’t it beautiful? Do you think some warm-hearted man will bring it to me?”
Dad looked at the $100 price tag, silent—that’s a rather big figure in those days. “I think even the warm-hearted man couldn’t afford this house,” he joked, lifting up his belt as he often does when he’s nervous. “Maybe one day, sweetheart.”
One day we walked by a toy store window. Sitting in the corner was the most unusual dollhouse I’d ever seen. It was shaped liked an upturned log (原木). Little oval windows decorated with nice curtains and framed by tiny balconies were cut into it.
On the New Year’s morning, I awoke early and raced downstairs. In the dim light, I made out a lot of wrapped boxes—but none large enough to contain my dollhouse. Dad could see my disappointment. He pulled me onto his lap and gently told me how, as a boy, he had wanted a red wagon, but his father couldn’t afford one. He said he made his own from wood and old wheels he found. “I’ll make one for you,” Dad assured me.
5.语言
人物
角色1：父亲
性格：聪明，努力，心灵手巧的，关心家人
行为：上夜校、努力工作、制作玩具屋
心理：diligent→practical→ determined →caring
角色2：“我”
性格：天真、懂事
行为：看中玩具屋、买不起时的失望、看到父亲做玩具屋时的反思
心理：confused →expecting→disappointed→hesitant→satisfied、proud
Little oval windowsdecorated with nice curtains and framed by tiny balconieswere cut into it.过去分词短语作后置定语。句意：玩具屋有小阳台围成了椭圆形的小窗户，还有漂亮的窗帘装饰着。
Para3
warm-hearted热心肠的，好心的
进展
本文的进展是父亲买不起昂贵的玩具屋，我感到失望，后来父亲决定做个玩具屋给我。
结果/结局
结局部分是需要学生续写的，通过前面的情节走向，知道做这个玩具屋有一定的难度，但父亲一直挤时间做这个玩具屋。根据续写第一段“I hesitated, wondering if I should help my father.”可知，作者经过心理挣扎后决定帮助父亲做这个玩具屋。根据第二段“In all, it took us one month of hard work.”的提示语可知，结局是父子俩花了一个月的时间终于成功完成了玩具屋，作者看到这个自己和父亲亲手做的玩具屋后的喜悦及得到的启示。
practical心灵手巧的，善于制作的
pressure压力
architect建筑师,设计师
sustain支撑，维持
electrician电工
mechanic机械师
Para 2
Sitting in the cornerwas the most unusual dollhouse I’d ever seen.倒装句式。句意：角落里是一个我见过的最不寻常的玩具屋。
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
Paragraph 1: I hesitated, wondering if I should help my father.
Paragraph 2: In all, it took us one month of hard work.
In all, it took us one month of hard work.The finished result proved astunningsurprise(令人震惊的);. It’s a realtokenof love and dedication(象征). I learned a lot of skills that I wouldn’t have before. I couldn’t help crying and hugged my father tightly. Touched by the warm atmosphere, my father smiled with pleasure,knowing his son had grown up and grown reliable enough(现在分词短语作状语). Wealth isn’t alwayswhere happiness comes from, and love is something that really makes a great difference(表语从句).
【试题信息】
试卷名称
体裁
主题语境
词数
重庆市高2022届学业质量调研抽测（第一次）
记叙文
人与自我
正文英文词数342，三个词给了中文提示，续写第一段首句9个单词，续写第二段首句10个单词。
【语分析】
1.what（前文主旨）
作者和父亲逛街买新年礼物的时候，作者看上了100美元的不寻常的玩具屋。作者的父亲买不起这个玩具屋，作者有点失望。父亲决定自己加班给作者做一个玩具屋。
重庆市高2022届学业质量调研抽测（第一次）
英语读后续写试题
第二节读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
My father is a practical man. He can’t explain calculus (微积分), but he can tell you how much pressure a boiler needs. He can’t draw an architect’s plan, but he can tell you if the pipes and wiring will sustain the structure. He put himself through night school to become an engineer, but that was only after he worked a slumber, an electrician, and a mechanic.
评议
本文的第一段和最后一段都是评议的内容。作者向读者分析了父亲是一个怎样的实践、动手型的人，告诉了读者父亲制作玩具屋的过程。尽管父亲下班回来疲惫不堪，尽管玩具屋耗时耗力，但父亲仍然坚持制作，因此作者受到了感动想要加入制作。
回应
原文中提到了父亲是一个动手能力强，从小就会自己制作自己想要的玩具，说明父亲是有制作玩具屋的可能性的。又提到了玩具屋的精美，所以制作过程不容易也是合理的。因此第一段的续写中作者受到父亲的影响和感动，从之前的失望转变成想帮助父亲完成制作就顺利成章了。第二段续写中要联系到前文提到玩具屋非常昂贵，但和家人一起亲手完成的玩具屋意义更加重大。
场景
玩具店、家
语言风格
语言风格很平实
6.情节
冲突
父亲决定自己动手做玩具屋，但过程太长太难。
行动
在父亲的影响下，我决定也加入帮助父亲一起完成。（续写第一段）
解决
经过共同的努力，成功制作好玩具屋。（续写第二段）
伏笔
前文提到父亲的动手能力和吃苦耐劳，为后文续写最终完成玩具屋的制作埋下了伏笔。
【素材积累】
Para 1
He said he made his own from wood and old wheelshe found.定语从句
assure确保,向...保证
Para6
despite即使;尽管
considerably很;相当多地
Complex复杂的;难懂的
anticipate预期;期待
night after night夜复一夜
And right after the New Year, despite all the unfinished projects at home, he started it. I naively (幼稚地) thought it was an easy toy to make, but every step of the long process was considerably more complex than I had anticipated. Night after night, Dad would come home from his job dead tired, yet he’d always find time to work on the log house. In the dark yellow electric light, Dad was always busy creating my dollhouse.
Para4
price tag价标a rather big figure一大笔钱
He joked,lifting up his belt as he often does when he’s nervous.伴随状语
Para5
dim暗淡的,昏暗的
make out（勉强地）辩认
wrap包裹
disappointment失望
【参考范文】
I hesitated, wondering if I should help my father.Ideas had been flashing through my mind andhardly could I make a perfect decision(倒装句). After much thought, I decided to work with my father to complete my dream dollhouse. I had strong beliefthat we would do well in making it(同位语从句). Rushing home after school, I did it at once.Seeing me joining in it, my father was touched.(现在分词短语作时间状语) Every night after that, we worked together under a dark yellow electric light,tired but happy(形容词短语作伴随状语).
2.why（故事主题）
亲情篇，为亲人付出。
3.how（写作技巧）
第一人称、记叙、描写
4.具体内容（利用拉波夫叙事模式进行分析）
点题
这篇文章没有标题，作者将文章的信息浓缩在了第一段中。通过阅读第一段可知，本章讲述的是my practical father。
指向
本篇文章的指向就是第二三段，时间是新年前的某一天，地点是玩具店门口，作者看上了100美元的不寻常的玩具屋。主要人物是父亲和“我”。