湖北省2018中考英语真题书面表达汇编(含参考答案及分析)

湖北省2018中考英语真题书面表达（含参考答案及分析）
目录
（一）湖北省随州市（二）湖北省咸宁市（三）湖北省恩施州（四）湖北省黄石市（五）湖北省黄冈市（六）湖北省宣昌市（七）湖北省荆州市（八）湖北省武汉市（九）湖北省孝感市（十）湖北省鄂州市（十一）湖北省襄阳市
（一）湖北省随州市
29．书面表达
目前，许多中学生利用周末和节假日上课外补习班，对此人们有不同的看法。

请根据下表内容写一篇短文。

注意：1．文章必须包括所有内容要点，要求语句通顺，意思连贯；
2．词数：80词左右：（文章的开头已给出，不计入总词数）
3．文中不得提及具体人名、校名及地名。

Nowadays, many middle school students are taking all kinds of after-school classes at
weekends or on holidays. There are two different opinions about it.
Some people think that
【答案】Nowadays, many middle school students are taking all kinds of after—school classes at weekends or on holidays. There are two different opinions about it.
Some people think that taking after—school classes can help students learn better and get into a good high school. What’s more, students can avoid spending too much time watching TV or playing computer games.
However, others think students need time to rest and relax. After—school classes can cause a lot of stress for students and it is not good for their development.
In my opinion, if necessary, we can take after—school classes, but it can’t take up too much time. We should first rest well at weekends and on holidays.
【解析】
【详解】
亮点说明：这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。

文中使用了非常好的短语，例如middle school students，all kinds of，after—school classes，at weekends，on holidays，get into，avoid doing，too much time，watching TV，play computer games，be good for，a lot of，in my opinion，last forever等。

而Some people think that taking after—school classes can help students learn better and get into a good high school./ However, others think students need time to rest and relax.等宾语从句结构的运用，丰富了习作内容，使表达多样，是本文的最大亮点。

【点睛】
书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。

它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。

所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。

（二）湖北省咸宁市
35．短文写作
78.“中国核潜艇之父”黄旭华院士，是央视王牌节目“开讲啦”开播以来最年长的演讲者。

上周五下午，全校师生观看完该视频后，都眼含热泪。

为了学习英雄的先进事迹，请你根据提示内容，以“Huang Xuhua — the Father of China’s Nukes”为题，写一篇人物介绍。

写作要点：
1. 他出生于富裕家庭，但为了祖国强盛，放弃成为一名医生的机会，学习建造核潜艇；
2. 在当时条件艰苦的环境下，他专心于核潜艇的研究和建造；
3. 为了保护国家安全，他曾隐姓埋名工作，30 年不为人所知，现虽年过90 仍奋斗不止；
4. 他的行为向我们诠释了什么是对国家和人民的热爱。

写作要求：
1. 文章不能出现真实的姓名和校名；
2. 文章必须包含所提供的主要信息，必要时可作适当发挥；
3. 词数80 个以上，文章的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总字数。

参考词汇：
核潜艇nuke; 国家安全national security; 隐姓埋名conceal one’s identity
Huang Xuhua —the Father of China’s Nukes
Last Friday afternoon, all the teachers and students in the school watched the video about Huang Xuhua –the father of China’s nukes.
We were all inspired by his heroic deeds.
【答案】Huang Xuhua —the Father of China’s Nukes
Last Friday afternoon, all the teachers and students in the school watched the video about Huang Xuhua –the father of China’s nukes.
He was born in a rich family. In order to make our country stronger, he gave up the chance to be a doctor, but tried to learn how to make/build the nukes. Although the conditions were very hard at that time., he concentrated on studying the knowledge of making/ building the nukes.
To protect the national security, he used to conceal/concealed his identity. For about 30 years, he was unknown for others. And now he still keeps working hard even if he is over 90 years old.(And now he doesn’t stop working/struggling even if he is over90 years old) His story explains to us what is the great love for the people and country.
We were all inspired by his heroic deeds
【解析】
【详解】
这是一篇给材料作文。

根据要点提示，写一篇人物介绍。

根据材料内容可知本文主要是用一般过去时态来写，人称为第三人称。

所给出的写作要点比较具体，并给出了作文的开头和结尾，我们要做的就是用正确的英语把要点表达出来。

动笔前要认真阅读材料，不要遗漏要点，并适当发挥写作中要适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

写作中要用到的重点词组有：in order to为了, give up放弃, try to do sth.设法做某事, concentrate on doing sth.专心做某事used to do sth过去常常做某事, be unknown for不为人所知。

（三）湖北省恩施州
38．书面表达
2009年3月至今,北京八达岭野生动物园发生了多起游客违反入园规则而导致的人员伤亡事件,这些悲剧发人深省。

俗话说“没有规矩,不成方圆”,作为中学生,我们应该遵守哪些规则,请结合下图和要点提示,写一篇英语短文。

要点提示：
1.遵守交通规则;
2.不插队;
3.遵守入园规则;
4.补充两点其他的规则。

要求：
1.文中必须包含所有提示要点,可适当发挥使行文连贯;
2.条理清晰,字迹工整,词数不少于80；
3.文中不得出现真实人名和校名等相关信息。

提示词汇: jump the queue (插队); fence (围栏)
【答案】As students, what can we do to keep our daily life m order. In my opinion, we should behave as follows:
First, while walking or driving on the road, we should obey the traffic rules. Besides, do remember not to carve or draw anywhere during visiting places of interest. What's more, making a loud noise in public is also a kind of pollution. It is as harmful as littering and spitting everywhere. Last but not least, when we go to the zoo or other public places, we should do as we are required, for example, "Don't jump the queue".
Only when we behave well, can we live in a well-ordered society.
【解析】写作分析：本文需要先仔细阅读背景材料，知道写作的目的，目的是要知道“没有规矩,不成方圆”，要懂得遵守规则，围绕这个目的，结合写作的要求发现本文需要正确写出中学生需要遵守的几条规则即可，在描述规则的时候可以恰当地使用祈使句，或者结合情态动词来实现想表达的效果，总体来说写作难度不大，最后要注意文章要得体连贯，注意句式的变化。

写作亮点：首先，可以用一两句话陈述清楚写作的目的（keep our daily life in order），然后可以逐条写出需要遵守的规则。

在一条一条罗列的时候，可以恰当地借助一下词来表达逻辑关系，比如first，besides，what’s more，last but not least等，具体在写规则的时候要注意短语运用准确，例如obey the traffic rules 遵守交通规则，visiting places of interest 参观名胜古迹，making a loud noise in public 在公共场合大声喧哗。

此外，句式的灵活运用也是亮点，例如用到了as…as..同级比较的结构，在末段用到了only+从句，主句倒装的结构，这
些结构的使用使得文章语言更加鲜活。

最后，文章用一句话结尾，总结了全文，完成了写作任务。

（四）湖北省黄石市
41．假设你是李华，你的朋友刘明在学习、生活等方面遇到了一些问题和困难，所以他经常感到焦虑和郁闷。

请你根据以下内容给他发一封电子邮件，帮助他克服焦虑情绪，轻松、快乐地学习和生活。

内容包括：1. 每个人都会有苦恼、焦虑的时候；
2. 一定要告诉别人你的烦恼；
3. 遇到任何困难时，与同学交流和老师、家长及时沟通；
4. 可就如何轻松、快乐地学习和生活等适当发挥。

作文要求：1. 不得照抄原文，不得在作文中出现学校的真实名称和学生的真实姓名；
2. 语句连贯，计数80个左右。

作文开头已经给出，不计入总词数。

参考词汇：焦虑的anxious 与……沟通communicate with 变得轻松get relaxed
解决问题solve problems
Dear Liu Ming,
Everyone may feel worried or sad sometimes._______________
___________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ ___
Yours
Li Hua 【答案】Dear Liu Ming,
Everyone may feel worried or sad sometimes. It’s all right to tell others when you are anxious. It’s good to communicate with your classmates, teachers or parents when you are in trouble. Thus, you can solve the problems from study or life easily.
Listening to music or taking part in outdoor activities is another way to help you get relaxed.
Try to smile at yourself and never keep silent about your problems.
Please do remember: you’re not alone. No matter how many difficulties w e have, I believe all of them can be overcome in the end.
Yours
Li Hua
【解析】
【详解】
亮点说明：这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。

文中使用了非常好的短语，例如feel worried or sad，all right，It’s good to do，communicate with，in trouble，solve the problems，listen to，take part in，outdoor activities，try to do，no matter，in the end等。

而It’s good to communicate with your classmates, teachers or parents when you are in trouble./ No matter how many difficulties we have, I believe all of them can be overcome in the end.等多种复杂从句结构和Listening to music or taking part in outdoor activities is another way to help you get relaxed.
/Try to smile at yourself and never keep silent about your problems.等非谓语动词结构的综合运用，丰富了习作内容，使表达多样化，是本文的最大亮点。

【点睛】
书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。

它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。

所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。

（五）湖北省黄冈市
42．书面表达
美丽中国,美丽长江。

黄冈是长江边一座美丽的城市。

假如你是黄冈某中学的一名中学生李明,请你以“美丽的黄冈”为话題,向你的英国笔友Tom介绍一下你美丽的家乡——黄冈。

要点提示：1.黄冈位于长江之边,大别山之南；
2.黄冈历史悠久,名人辈出；
3.黄冈风景迷人,乡村秀美;
4.人人参与,从小事做起,黄冈人正在努力地保护黄冈的自然环境;
5.邀请Tom来中国,欣赏黄冈更美好的绿水青山、蓝天白云。

写作要求：1.词数90左右(短文的开头已经给出,不计入总词数);
2.根据要点提示,可以适当发挥;
3.短文中不得出现真实的姓名及校名。

参考词汇:lie(位于); Dabie mountains; plant; clean up; clear river and green mountains
Dear Tom,
Thanks for your last letter. You asked me about my hometown, now let me tell you. ___________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Ming 【答案】Dear Tom,
Thanks for your last letter. You asked me about my hometown. now let me tell you.
My hometown is Huanggang. It lies by the Yangtze River and at the southern foot of Dabie Mountains.
It's a beautiful city with a long history. A number of famous people come from our city, such as Li siguang, Li shizhen, Wen Yiduo and so on. There are lots of beautiful mountains, rivers and lakes. They are so fascinating that thousands of tourists come to visit Huanggang every year. You can also see beautiful villages everywhere. We are proud of our hometown.
Now the people in Huanggang are trying to protect the natural environment. We plant trees as many as possible every year. We stop factories from throwing rubbish into the rivers. V olunteers go to the mountains, forests, parks and streets to clean them up on the weekends. Everyone is playing a role in making our city more and more beautiful. We are taking action!
Tom, would you like to come to Huanggang? You can see clear rivers and green mountains as well as blue skies and white cloud. I believe you will fall in love with our city and have a wonderful time. Looking forward to your visit!
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Ming
【解析】这是一篇给材料作文，以“美丽的黄冈”为话題,向我的英国笔友Tom介绍一下我美丽的家乡——黄冈。

结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时，人称为第一，二，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：My hometown is……，It lies……，There are……，We are proud of……，Would you like to……？You can……，I believe……等句式的应用。

写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。

写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系。

点睛：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。

开头介绍了黄冈的地理位置，接下来介绍黄冈的历史、风景和环保情况，最后邀请Tom来中国,欣赏黄冈更美好的绿水青山、蓝天白云。

此处ask sb about sth, a number of, be proud of, as…as possible, play a role in doing sth, fall in love with, have a wonderful time等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。

（六）湖北省宣昌市
47．书面表达：
为了更好地开展八年级学生的研学旅行( study travel)，学校现面向全年级征集活动意向。

假如你是李华，请谈谈你建议的时间和地点并陈述理由，简要介绍打算开展的活动。

要求：
（1）文中不得出现真实的人名和校名；
（2）词数80左右。

开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear leaders,
I am Li Hua from Class, Grade 8. __________________________
___________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ ____
We can discuss the details(细节)later.
Yours,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear leaders,
I am Li Hua from Class 3, Grade 8. Here is my advice about our study travel.
I suggest going to Wufeng Houhe Forest Park. It is a beautiful park with green water and
mountains. There are many different kinds of plants, birds and other animals. We can get closer to the nature. I think June is the best time to get there. Because there is not too much rain at this time of year and the weather in the forest park is much cooler.
We will have lots of activities, such as climbing the mountains and studying about plants. I'm sure the travel will be both pleasant and educational
We can discuss the details(细节) later.
Yours
Li Hua
【解析】亮点说明：这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。

文中使用了非常好的短语，例如from Class 3, Grade 8，suggest doing，Wufeng Houhe Forest Park，with green water and
mountains，different kinds of，get closer to the nature，too much，at this time，in the forest park，lots of，such as等。

而There are many different kinds of plants, birds and other animals./ Because there is not too much rain at this time of year and the weather in the forest park is much cooler.等there be句式和从句结构的运用，既使短文内容丰富，又使表达多样，是本文的最大亮点。

点睛：书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。

它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。

所以，考生不能遗漏要
点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。

（七）湖北省荆州市
14．请以“My ho b by”为题写一篇短文，必须包含以下要点和词语提示信息。

1. What is your hobby?
2. How do you develop your hobby?
3.Share your happiness you get from your bobby. Give at least one example.
提示词语：practice，different，forget，no longer
要求：
l、可以适当发挥，文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
2、语言通顺，意思连贯，条理清楚，书写规范；
3、词数：80词左右。

短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。

My Hobby
Everyone has his or her own hobby and so do I.
【答案】My Hobby
Everyone has his or her own hobby and so do I.
It may give him lots of happiness. My hobby is listening to music. When I was a child I enjoy listening to music especially the cartoon music, though I'm not good at it, I often lose myself in it. When I am in trouble, music can make me calm down. When I am very tired, it can make me
comfortable. When I am angry with something, it also can make me happy again. Listening to music keeps me in a good mood and it's good for my health.
Do you like listening to music? If not, I hope you can have a try, you will find it beneficial.
【解析】
【详解】
这篇作文要求我们以My Hobby为题，介绍一下自己的爱好。

通过审题可知，短文中应包括以下内容：首先点明自己的爱好是什么；然后说明自己是如何培养了这个爱好的；最后分享一下你从这一爱好中得到的快乐。

写作时，应根据这一提纲，组织语言，连贯成文。

整篇文章应以一般现在时态或一般过去时态为主，第一人称来叙述。

注意英语表达习惯和汉语是不同的，不能逐词翻译，应从句子的整体考虑，使用恰当的词汇、短语和句型。

句子结构以主谓宾或主系表为主，穿插使用并列句和复合句，使文章富有节奏，提升文章档次。

同时注意语句之间使用恰当的连接成分，使整篇文章意思连贯，语句通顺。

（八）湖北省武汉市
63．书面表达
假如你是李明,本周日由你组织国际交换生去the Dream city 游玩。

请用英语拟一份口头通知.
内容要点如下:
1.集合时间和地点:上午九点, the Dream city入口处;
2.观看楚剧,学习剪纸,制作陶土作品;
3.自由活动一小时, 可游玩、拍照等,五点乘地铁返校;
4.天气炎热,着轻便装;
5.请补充一-至两点个人的想法或建议.
注意:
1.文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称;
2.词数: 60-80;
3.内容连贯,不要逐条翻译
4-开头已给出,不计入总词数。

参考词汇: entrance n.入口处Chu Opera楚剧clay piece陶土作品
Hello, everyone! We are going to the Dream City this Sunday
【答案】Hello, everyone! We are going to the Dream City this Saturday. Here are our plans that everyone needs to know. First, we will meet at the entrance of the Dream City at 9:00 a.m. Then, we are going to appreciate Chu Opera, learn paper-cutting and make clay piece. After that, you will be free for your own activities, such as playing around and taking photos. Remember that you’re supposed to return to school at 5:00p.m.By the way, you’d better wear light clothes because of the hot weather. Hope you can enjoy yourselves.
【解析】
写作分析：这篇作文需要写一份通知，要求是写出去游玩的集合时间和地点，写主要活动：观看楚剧,学习剪纸,制作陶土作品，自由活动一小时, 可游玩、拍照等,五点乘地铁返校。

还需要简单描写天气，天气炎热，着轻便装，为了使行文连贯需要增添适当的细节。

写作亮点：首先开门见山要说明这是一则通知，是人人需要了解的，写出了写作的目的（Here are our plans that everyone needs to know.），然后运用了一些词语使得文章逻辑性很强，如First, then, after that。

在描述活动的时候短语运用准确，appreciate Chu Opera（欣赏楚剧），learn paper-cutting（学习剪纸），make clay piece（制作陶土作品），be supposed to（应该做…），By the way（顺便说一下）。

句式的使用也有多样性，例如用到了祈使句Remember that…，最后有简单的祝福语，使得这则通知更加完整，完成了题目要求的写作任务。

（九）湖北省孝感市
82．书面表达
本周一是端午节，你校外教Tony对中国文化很感兴趣，你陪他去槐荫公园观看了龙舟比赛。

请根据以下提示写一篇日记。

写作要点：
1.现场情况。

人多拥挤，16支龙舟队竞争激烈，人们欢呼，队员们闭队合作，最终“勇气队”获胜。

2.赛后活动：我给Tony介绍端午节，下午带他参加有关端午节的其它活动，如……
3.感想：Tony……，我……
写作要求：
1.短文内容必须包括所有要点、语句通顺，条理清晰；
2.省略号处须作适当发挥(1-2句即可)；
3.100词左右，短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数。

June 18th
Today is the Dragon Boat Festival.
【答案】Today is the Dragon Boat Festival For the reason that Tony has a strong interest in Chinese traditional culture. I invited him to come to watch the dragon boat races which was held in Huaiyin Park this morning When we arrived, it was crowded. There were 16 colorful dragon boats floating in the river. During the race, the dragon boat teams competed with each other, while people on each bank cheered up. Both Tony and I felt the exciting atmosphere. At last, the Courage Team won.
After the competition, I introduced the Dragon Boat Festival to Tony and welcomed him to
many other activities about the festival. We went to learn how to make zongzi and admire a picture exhibition.
At the end of the day, tired as we were, we felt excited. Tony though our traditional Chinese culture was so amazing and I am proud of my great motherland.
【解析】
【详解】
试题分析：本书面表达以“端午节”为话题的日记。

根据内容提示可知本文会使用到一般过去时态，用第一人称来表达。

注意一些常见句式的应用。

写作中注意连词、固定短语的交替使用，使文意连接紧密，还要注意使用丰富的语句，注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系，最后最好要表达出人物的感想和看法。

写作亮点：本文结构紧凑，语言简练、要点齐全。

文中invite sb. to do, during the race, compete with, cheer up, at last, both…and…; at the end of the da y, be proud of等词汇的恰当使用，使上下文意连接紧密；本文还采用了丰富的句型，比如：运用了there be句型；定语从句、宾语从句、时间状语从句等复合句，大大增加了信息的容量，使文章增色不少，这是一篇不错的范文。

（十）湖北省鄂州市
Ⅶ.书面表达(满分15分)
即将步入高中的你们马上要面对近几年热门讨论的“3+X”高考模式的选择(3即语文，数学，英语。

X即物理，化学，历史，政治，生物等等科目)。

对此，有人赞同，有人反对。

请你根据以下提示内容，就”3+X”考试这一话题，谈谈你自己的看法。

注意：1.请根据表格内容，写出语法正确，语言优美的短文，可适当发挥。

2. 文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称及其它相关的信息，否则不予评分。

3.词数：80字左右（提示词不算字数）
We’re going to enter the senior high school this September.Nowadays,more and more people do pay attention to the 3+X Examination for College Entrance Examination(3+X高考).Some people think__________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________________
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In my opinion,________________________________________________________________
【分析】重点词句：
pay attention to：注意．
be good at：擅长．
They can choose subjects that they are good at or interested in：他们可以选择他们擅长或感兴趣的科目．这是一个定语从句．先行词是subjects科目．表示事物，用that引导．be good at擅长．be interested in对…感兴趣．
In fact，it is more difficult for students to choose subjects：事实上，学生更难选
择科目．In fact事实上．固定搭配．it is+形容词+for sb to do sth对某人来说，
做某事是…more difficult更难的．
【解答】We're going to enter the senior high school this September．Nowadays，more and more people do pay attention to the 3+X Examination for College Entrance Examination（3+X高考）．Some people think 3+X Examination is very suitable for students（赞同关点）．They can choose subjects that they are good at or interested in 【高分句型一】．They can get good marks in exam（原因）．Some people think it has disadvantages（反对观点）．In fact，it is more difficult for students to choose subjects【高分句型二】．Some subjects have more competitors，and some students are difficult to choose suitable teachers or subjects（原因）．In my opinion，learning well is the most important thing（我的观点）．
【点评】写作时要明确要点，做到思路清晰，句式灵活，表达流畅，语法正确，结合要求，注意作文题材，不要写跑题．日常积累一些短语和词句．
（十一）湖北省襄阳市
七、书面表达(本大题满分15分
人非圣贤，孰能无过？作为一名学生，在学习或生活中你是否也曾犯过错误、做过傻事？在认识到自己所犯错误或明白所做的傻事后，你又是如何改止的呢？请根据写作要点提示，以“The Mistake Made Me Grow Up”为题，用英语写一篇短文。

1.写作要点提示
1)简述你犯过的一次错误或做过的一件傻事；
2)谈谈你是如何在他人的帮助下或在自己的努力下改正的；
3)你从中吸取了哪些教训或收获了哪些成长的经验。

2.注意事项：
1)字数：90词左右；
2)短文内容应包含提示的要点,可适当增加情节,以使行文连贯；
3)文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
4)已给标题不计入总字数,也不得抄入答题卡。

The Mistake Made Me grow Up
【分析】【高分句型一】
If we learn from our mistakes，we will have learnt another secret to success．如果我们从错误中吸取教训，我们将会学到成功的另一个秘诀．
if引导条件状语从句用一般现在时表将来，主句用will+动词原形【高分句型二】
When I was depressed，it was my math who gave me a hand and told me that mistakes could also teach us a lesson．当我沮丧的时候，是我的数学老师帮助了我，告诉我错误也可以给我们一个教训．when引导时间状语从句；that引导定语从句，修饰teacher
【解答】The Mistake Made Me grow Up
Everyone may make mistakes．Mistakes make us grow．If we
learn from our mistakes，we will have learnt another secret to success．【高分句型一】Although mistakes are annoying，as long as we face it bravely，we will succeed sooner or later．（引起下文）There was once a time when I made a mistakes in math．Because of carelessness，I failed the exam．When I was depressed，it was my math teacher who gave me a hand and told me that mistakes could also teach us a lesson．【高分句型二】What she told me encouraged me to face with my math problem bravely．Finally，my math grades improved．（我的经历）Taking my experience into conclusion，everyone can conquer the unavoidable mistakes in our life so long as we have faith in ourselves．Treasure the mistakes，and you will win the treasure．（吸取的经验）
【点评】能够根据提示进行书面表达，能够围绕主题准确使用一定的语法、词汇、短语和句型等，清楚连贯地表达自己的思想，进而完成写作任务．。