读后续写开课课件 高三英语一轮复习
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The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it.〞 he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay?〞 His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.〞
look at：看着〔过程〕 notice：注意 glance：扫一眼 spot：远远看见 catch sight of / at the sight〔thought〕 of sth came into my sight映入眼帘
介词修饰：活用with和in + n
生气地看 失望地看 绝望地看 快乐地看
r us in such 名a da词rk s化ituation. Just as we were at
从
the point of de表spe达ration, wwe hietahrd结a faint voice from the distance. “It must be Uncle Paul,〞 I said. So we cried back 构
Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.
Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it got dark.
兔子的意外出现吓到了马，马开始疯狂地跑。我试图尽最大努力控制它，但是徒劳。 我虽然很害怕，但是还是尽最大努力保持平衡，以防从马上摔下来。幸运的是，几分钟 后，马在河前方停了下来，穿着粗气。就在那时，父亲追上来了。看到我没事，他也松了 口气。但是很明显我们迷路了。 我们不知道农场在哪个方向。我们能做的就是沿着原路返回。天黑咕隆咚的，确实很难。 就在我们要绝望的时候，我们听到一个微弱的声音从远处传来。“一定是Paul 叔叔〞。 所以我们兴奋地喊回去。最终，Paul叔叔把我们平安带回了家。多奇妙的旅程！
adj/adv= in/with + n.
看到叔叔从远处走来，他和父亲终于松了一口气
Seeing/noticing/spotting uncle Paul come over from the distance, he and his father fewltarseliinevreedli.ef.
句式复杂多样 词汇准确丰富 内容充实合理 结构紧凑连贯
内容充实合理
结论一：原文的内容要理解透彻 结论二：续写的内容要安排合理 结论三：原文与续写的内容最好有照应
清明
清明时节雨纷纷
环境描写
少
路上行人欲断魂
心理描写
多
借问酒家何处有
语言描写
少
牧童遥指杏花村
动作描写
பைடு நூலகம்
多
环境描写 心理描写 对话描写 动作描写
clear that we got lost.
Paragraph 2:
We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We didn‘t know where the farm house was. What we could do was时to 间go b状ack along the previous track slowly. But it was really difficult fo
In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn‘t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed sl owly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,〞 Uncle Paul cried, “ and keep to the track so that you don‘t get lost! 〞 “OK!〞 my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet a nd the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looke d like a beautiful woven(编织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. 注意: 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右; 2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3.续写局部分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
确定故事背景 确定情感变化 确定语言表述 确定动作开展〔时间线〕
4确定
when
what
故事背 景
where
who
消极
• 担心/害怕/失望/吃惊/后悔/恼怒/生气/绝 望/意外/疲劳/困惑/窘迫/
积极
• 高兴/感动/满意/骄傲/渴望/忍耐/放松/坚 定/感激/奉献/激动/迷人
语言表述
少而精
多用转述
Writing 1(2021.6浙江) 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos. His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,〞 he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草).I w as impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
One possible version:
名词化
Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little
rabbit
jum非pe限d out
in
front
of
my
horse.
This
unexpected
appearance
frightened
表达
my
倒装
horse, which made it run wildly. I tried my best to control it, but in vain. Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off. Fortunately, minutes later, the
horse stopped before a river, out of
非谓语
breath, and so did I. At that moment, my dad also came up. Seeing I was OK, he was quite relieved. But it was
名从
with excitement. Finally, Uncle Paul safely brought us back home. What an amazing ride!
感慨句
外部刺 激
主观感 受
内部动 作
看 听
感 说
做
看 有哪些“看”
时间修饰 介词修饰
花式玩转“看〞
see：看到〔结果〕 watch：注视 observe：观察 stare：盯着 glare：怒视
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
2021.1
第二节 读后续写〔总分值25分〕
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,〞 said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.
读后续写开课
评分标准
第一档〔22—25分〕 ——创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高。 ——使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解。 ——自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后照应，意义连贯。 第二档〔18—21分〕 ——创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高。 ——使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达比较流畅，有个别错误，但不影响理解。 ——比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。 第三档〔15—17分〕 ——创造了根本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续写根本完整，与原文情境相关。 ——使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达方式不够多样性，表达有些许错误，但根本不影响理解。 ——使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
look at：看着〔过程〕 notice：注意 glance：扫一眼 spot：远远看见 catch sight of / at the sight〔thought〕 of sth came into my sight映入眼帘
介词修饰：活用with和in + n
生气地看 失望地看 绝望地看 快乐地看
r us in such 名a da词rk s化ituation. Just as we were at
从
the point of de表spe达ration, wwe hietahrd结a faint voice from the distance. “It must be Uncle Paul,〞 I said. So we cried back 构
Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.
Paragraph 2: We had no idea where we were and it got dark.
兔子的意外出现吓到了马，马开始疯狂地跑。我试图尽最大努力控制它，但是徒劳。 我虽然很害怕，但是还是尽最大努力保持平衡，以防从马上摔下来。幸运的是，几分钟 后，马在河前方停了下来，穿着粗气。就在那时，父亲追上来了。看到我没事，他也松了 口气。但是很明显我们迷路了。 我们不知道农场在哪个方向。我们能做的就是沿着原路返回。天黑咕隆咚的，确实很难。 就在我们要绝望的时候，我们听到一个微弱的声音从远处传来。“一定是Paul 叔叔〞。 所以我们兴奋地喊回去。最终，Paul叔叔把我们平安带回了家。多奇妙的旅程！
adj/adv= in/with + n.
看到叔叔从远处走来，他和父亲终于松了一口气
Seeing/noticing/spotting uncle Paul come over from the distance, he and his father fewltarseliinevreedli.ef.
句式复杂多样 词汇准确丰富 内容充实合理 结构紧凑连贯
内容充实合理
结论一：原文的内容要理解透彻 结论二：续写的内容要安排合理 结论三：原文与续写的内容最好有照应
清明
清明时节雨纷纷
环境描写
少
路上行人欲断魂
心理描写
多
借问酒家何处有
语言描写
少
牧童遥指杏花村
动作描写
பைடு நூலகம்
多
环境描写 心理描写 对话描写 动作描写
clear that we got lost.
Paragraph 2:
We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We didn‘t know where the farm house was. What we could do was时to 间go b状ack along the previous track slowly. But it was really difficult fo
In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn‘t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed sl owly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,〞 Uncle Paul cried, “ and keep to the track so that you don‘t get lost! 〞 “OK!〞 my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet a nd the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looke d like a beautiful woven(编织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. 注意: 1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右; 2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3.续写局部分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
确定故事背景 确定情感变化 确定语言表述 确定动作开展〔时间线〕
4确定
when
what
故事背 景
where
who
消极
• 担心/害怕/失望/吃惊/后悔/恼怒/生气/绝 望/意外/疲劳/困惑/窘迫/
积极
• 高兴/感动/满意/骄傲/渴望/忍耐/放松/坚 定/感激/奉献/激动/迷人
语言表述
少而精
多用转述
Writing 1(2021.6浙江) 阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。 It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos. His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,〞 he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze(吃草).I w as impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
One possible version:
名词化
Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little
rabbit
jum非pe限d out
in
front
of
my
horse.
This
unexpected
appearance
frightened
表达
my
倒装
horse, which made it run wildly. I tried my best to control it, but in vain. Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off. Fortunately, minutes later, the
horse stopped before a river, out of
非谓语
breath, and so did I. At that moment, my dad also came up. Seeing I was OK, he was quite relieved. But it was
名从
with excitement. Finally, Uncle Paul safely brought us back home. What an amazing ride!
感慨句
外部刺 激
主观感 受
内部动 作
看 听
感 说
做
看 有哪些“看”
时间修饰 介词修饰
花式玩转“看〞
see：看到〔结果〕 watch：注视 observe：观察 stare：盯着 glare：怒视
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
2021.1
第二节 读后续写〔总分值25分〕
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,〞 said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.
读后续写开课
评分标准
第一档〔22—25分〕 ——创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高。 ——使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解。 ——自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后照应，意义连贯。 第二档〔18—21分〕 ——创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高。 ——使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达比较流畅，有个别错误，但不影响理解。 ——比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。 第三档〔15—17分〕 ——创造了根本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续写根本完整，与原文情境相关。 ——使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达方式不够多样性，表达有些许错误，但根本不影响理解。 ——使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。