蜜谱市嫩翠学校高考英语 书面表达及参考范文_421

赛察州蜜谱市嫩翠学校2014高考英语书面表达系列
系列（68）及参考范文
第一节：基础写作（共1小题；满分15分）
哈尔滨第六制药厂研制了一种新药，药品已经被外商定购。

请你根据提示为该厂产品写一份使用说明书：
1 本药品为中药（traditional Chinese medicine），对心脏病疗效显著。

2 常量：每天三次，一次三粒，根据情况可以加服1－2粒。

3 服药后身体不适要停服，小孩和老人禁服。

4 本药品应存放在阴凉干燥处。

5 使用本药品要严格遵从医嘱。

【写作内容】
1药品名称及产地；2药用范围；3服药常量；4使用说明；5存放地点
【写作要求】
1.只能使用5个句子表达全部内容；
［评分］
句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。

注意：写作时要包括要点，但不要逐条翻译。

只能使用5个句子。

【参考范文】基础写作：
A Possible version
The Sixth Medicine-making Factory has developed a traditional Chinese medicine, which has a good effect on curing heart diseases. Three pills should be taken every time, three times a day. One or two more pills can be added if necessary. Anyone who feels sick after taking them should stop and children and the old are forbidden to take the medicine. The medicine should be
kept in cool and dry places and the doctor’s advice must be followed.
第四部分写作 (共两节，满分35分)
第二节书面表达（满分25分）
广东佛山的“小悦悦”事件引发广泛热议, 请根据以下的图表, 用英语写一篇短文, 简单描述事件
的经过并谈谈你的看法。

时间2011年10月13日
地点广东佛山
人物2岁的王悦
事件经过 1. 相继被两车碾压；
2. 18名路人路过但都视而不见；
3. 最后一名拾荒阿姨上前施以援手。

4. 八天后, 王悦去世
你的看法。

注意：1.不能逐条翻译, 可适当发挥。

2.词数120左右（开头已经写好, 不计人总词数）。

3.参考词汇：小货车small van; 拾荒collect scraps
On October 13, 2011, two-year-old Wang Yue was playing on the street. _______________【参考范文】.书面表达25%
One possible version:
On October 13, 2011, two-year old Wang Yue was playing on the street. Unfortunately, a small van rushed by and ran over the young girl. But with brief stopping, the van continued driving. Then a second vehicle struck the girl again and rushed by without stopping. At least 18 people passed the seriously injured girl before finally an old woman who was later discovered to be making a living by collecting scraps came to her rescue. After 8 days of struggle in hospital, Wang Yue
died and left us forever. The incident has stirred heated discussions both in and outside China.
Most people can't believe this incident should have happened in Guaiigdong, a place where China's economic reforms first began and a place which has powered the country's remarkable growth. People have focused much on economic development, but they haven't paid enough attention to the promotion of morality. While we can't ignore the development of economy, we should offer a hand to those in need as well.
We should concentrate more on the education of morality and enforce laws to prevent similar incidents from happening again.
第四部分：写作（共两节，满分40分）
第二节书面表达（满分25分）
最近，校车的安全引起了社会的关注。

政府在征集校车安全的条例，请你用英语写一篇短文，提出
合理建议并向《英语周报》投稿。

要点如下：
1．严期格限制乘坐人数；
2．定期进行安全教育；
3．设置专门停靠站点；
4．严格挑选合格司机。

5．注意，词数：100左右；可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

书面表达：
第三节书面表达（满分30分）
假定你是中学生李华, 在搜狐微博上看到一位名叫Worryguy的中学生发布的博文。

请你根据博文内容、写
作要点和要求发布自己的观点。

表情 @ 点名 图片 视频
写作要点： 1. 表明自己的看法；
2. 陈述自己的理由（可举例说明）；
3. 提出至少两条建议。

要求：
1. 短文须写在答题卡的指定区域。

2. 短文词数不少于100（不含已写好的部分）。

3. 内容充实，结构完整，语意连贯。

4. 书写需清晰、工整。

Dear Worryguy,
This is really a tough problem to deal with. In my opinion,_________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
页 册 客 发布 Worryguy: A parents ’meeting is always meaning a complaints
meeting to a slow student. My parents will scold me whenever
they come back from it. Now the mid-term exam is over and
LiHua
【参考范文】作文：
Dear Worryguy,
This is really a tough problem to deal with. In my opinion, you should not be afraid of a parents’ meeting. Instead, you’d better take a proper attitude to it.
In fact, a parents’ meeting is for the most part a communication meeting, where teachers and parents exchange information and opinions about students’ situations at schoo l and home, which is beneficial to improving teaching quality.
As for your problem, it’s advisable to have a good talk with your parents and teachers. While talking with your parents, you can focus on how hard you study (if it is the case) and why you failed this time or even ask them to help analyze your failure. When talking with your teachers, better ask them for the law of each subject and effective methods of learning them. Anyhow, improving your grades is the key to solving the problem.
Yours,
Li Hua
第三节书面表达（满分30分）
近年来尽管政府在改善居住上花了大量资金，但是住房问题仍然是中国许多大城市所面临的最严重问题之一。

对此话题你班举行了热烈的讨论。

一部分人建议：多造高层建筑(high-rise apartments)，一部分人认为：向地下发展。

而你赞成前一种观点。

你的理由： 1.建筑费用便宜；
2.久住地下对身体不利；
3.地上阳光充足，地下只有人造光源
你的结论：……
提示：人造光源（artificial lighting）
现请你以How to Solve the Housing Problem in Big Cities为题写120字以上的短文。

In recent years the government has spent a large sum of money in improving housing but the
shortage of housing is one of the most serious problems facing many big cities in China. We’ve discussed heatedly the topic “How to Solve the Housing Problem in Big Cities.”
Some of us suggest building more high-rise apartments while others believe to develop underground housing areas. I am in favor of the former opinion. For one thing, it is cheaper to build above ground than below. For another, living underground for a long time will do harm to people's health. Above all, people are unwilling to live underground with artificial lighting and they prefer to live above ground to enjoy the sunshine.
Although there may be some other ways to solve the housing shortage problem, I believe to build more high-rise apartments is one of the promising solutions to the housing problem.
一、评分原则
1、本题总分为30分，按5个档次给分。

2、评分时，应根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

3、词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分。

4、评分时，应注意的主要内容：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文连贯性及语言的得体性。

5、拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。

英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

6、如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。

二、内容要点：(略)
三、各档次的给分范围和要求：
第五档次（很好）：（25-30分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。

-覆盖所有内容要点。

-应用较多的语法结构和词汇。

-语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。

-有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。

完全达到了预期的写作目的。

第四档（好）（19-24分）
完全完成了试题规定的任务。

-虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。

-应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

-语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试复杂语法结构或词汇所致。

-应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。

达到了预期的写作目的。

第三档（适当）：（13-18）
基本完成了试题规定的任务。

-虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。

-应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。

-有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。

-应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。

整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。

第二档（较差）：（7—12分）
未恰当完成试题规定的任务。

-漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。

-语法结构单调，词汇知识有限。

-有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。

-较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。

信息未能清楚地传达给读者。

第一档（差）：（1-6分）
未完成试题规定的任务。

-明显遗漏主要内容，写一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。

-语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。

-较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。

-缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。

信息未能传达给读者。

0分
未能传达给读者任何信息；内容太少、无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。

四、说明
1. 内容要点可用不同方式表达
2. 对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分
第二节：读写任务（共1小题，满分 20 分）
阅读下面短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

High school students are overweight, out of shape and not interested in sports. And according to high school officials across the country, the situation is not getting better, based on a recent study claiming that high school student fitness has declined steadily for the last twenty-five years. This has put many high schools in a dilemma: they want students to become more fit, but
they also fear that strenuous(剧烈的) exercise may harm their unfit students.
As a result, a number of high schools have cancelled long-distance running as part of their sports meetings, saying the races were cancelled because of lack of interest, but in the back of their minds, they must have also been thinking of the forty students in China between 2002 and 2010 who died suddenly after running long-distance races.
Long-distance running is not for the casual jogger. It is a sport that requires strength and endurance and a great deal of training. Most high school students have trouble running 1000 meters without huffing and puffing (气喘吁吁). Five thousand meters, for them, is just a race too far. But by cancelling the race, high schools are sending mixed signals about fitness to their students: get fit, but don’t sweat.
Some people show their understanding towards the cancellation of long distance running but more people criticize these schools, saying they try to run away from the problem instead of solving it.
【写作内容】
1)以约30个词概括短文的要点；
2)然后以约120个词写一篇议论文，谈谈你对中学生体质下降及各中学运动会纷纷取消中长跑的看法，并包括如下的要点：
a)你读完文章的感受；
b)你认为中学运动会应该取消中长跑吗，为什么？可结合自身或他人经历展开；
c)你的建议。

【写作要求】
可以使用实例或其它论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
【评分】
概括准确、语言规范、内容合适，篇章连贯。

【参考范文】读写任务
A suggested version：
(Summary)
In the past 25 years, the fitness of high school students has been declining. So many schools cancelled long distance running, worrying about the harmful effects of strenuous(剧烈的) exercise.
After reading the story, I was totally shocked. I think it unwise for high schools to cancel long distance running at their sports meets, which won’t help prevent the decline of students’fitness but worsen it.
As far as I am concerned, there is no fitness without sweat. Students can’t get fit sitting in front of a computer or chatting in the dining hall. They have to get up and move. They’re going to have to use their muscles, hearts and lungs to make their body stronger. Any sport will help them do this, including long distance race. Actually, long distance running is a quite good sport for keeping fit as long as it is done regularly and scientifically. Take my friend, John for example. He used to be over-weight but running regularly burns his fat, builds his muscles and strengthens his heart and lung. Besides, he stays more focused and learns more effectively.
To improve students’fitness, I strongly recommend high schools assign less homework to offer students more time to do exercise. In addition, not only are students encouraged to take various sports but also given appropriate instructions to avoid sports injuries. In short, playing enough sports is the only way to improve students’ health and we should never refuse to do so for fear
of running a risk.。