名师解读考研大作文到底要comment什么

名师解读考研大作文到底要comment什么?

从2000年以来，考研人作文的命题形式逐步固定，即要求考生根据一幅漫画（或照片）写一篇160-200字的议论文。题目的Directions经常要求考生give your comment。一般而言，这个comment就是这篇作文的重点，也是主体段的主要内容。但问题在于：到底要comment 什么？遍观坊间的考研作文辅导书，几乎无一例外地都是就图论图，用大量笔墨把图画描述和解释一番。对于这种写法，笔者不敢苟同。

我们认为：第一，考研作文漫画（或照片）的寓意一目了然，主体段根本没有必要长篇大论地解释图I田i （在首段屮简洁地描述图画、点明寓意即可），这种解释只能使作文的内容流于肤浅。第二，这种解释往往天马行空，漫无边际，毫无规律可循。因此，学生看了这样的范文还是不得写作要领。

我们认为，考研作文主体段的comment应当向深处挖掘：或者深入分析漫画中所揭示的现象的社会影响，或者分析该现彖背后的原因。这种写法有两个优点：一是能够写岀思想深度，不至于就图论图；更重要的是，无论是分析原因还是分析影响，都可以用分类列举的方法展开主体段。这样就简化了主体段的写作，条理清晰，具有很强的可操作性，考生很容易上手。以2009年考研大作文题目为例：

Directions: Write an essay of 160 ― 200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should:

1） describe the drawing briefly,

2） explain its intended meaning, and then

3） give your comments

You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

（漫画）

这幅漫画的寓意一目了然：网络改变了人们的交际方式。所以，本文的主体段无需再解释图小的蜘蛛网代表什么，小房间代表什么，也无需描述图小人物的情态。本文的主体段宜往深处开掘，从正、反两个方面comment网络对人们的交往能力的影响。如下例：

In ternet, the most wonderful inve ntion of the 20th century, separates us as well as brings us together. As is vividly depicted in the cartoon, a group of netizens are busy socializing online. But in the real world, they are separated from each other by in surmountable walls.

As is often remarked, online socialization has been a double-edged sword for people's social skills. On the one hand, Internet is an effective tool for enhancing people's already existing social skills. Internet links people as never before. Thanks to social networking websites, people scattered all over the globe can get in touch instantly. All they need to do is a few keystrokes. On the other hand, Internet dependency has exerted a negative influence on users9 social skills・ A recent study conducted by Fudan University finds that freshmen of the university are not as quick to befriend their peers as they used to be. The culprit, it finds, is the Internet. Many students, who can chat for hours on instant messenger, can barely forni a coherent sentence in the face-to-face setting, the study finds.

As I view the matter, Internet helps us to socialize with others・ But it shouldn't be used to the exclusion of other ways of socialization. In order for us to be skilled communicators, there should be a balance of online and face-to-face interaction.

本文首段的第一句揭示漫画寓意，第二、三句简要地描述漫画内容。主体段从积极和消极两个方面分析了网络交流对人们的交际能力的影响（暗合题目中的“近"与“远”）。结尾段简洁地提出了解决这一问题的建议，属于建议型结尾。

除了分析影响，本文的主体段还对以从分析网络交际流行的原因的角度进行comment, 如下例：

Internet, the most wonderful invention of the 20th century, has revolutionized the way we communicate with others. As is vividly depicted in the cartoon, a group of netizens are busy socializing on line ・ But in real world, they are separated from each other by insurmountable walls.

The present popularity of online socialization can be accounted for by its speed and convenienee. First, Internet enables people who are geographically distant from each other to get in touch instantly. Thanks to E-mail, MSN or ICQ, talking to a friend is only a click away. We used to have to spend hours writing our loved ones letters with a pen and paper・ Now we can hop on the Internet and email in 5 minutes or less. Second, Internet proves to be a convenient way to socialize・For example, many, who cannot express themselves verbally, turn online to show how they feel towards their loved ones・ The sweet nothings can make their loved ones smile, because they know that they are cared for.

As I see it, there is no need to panic over the popularity of online socializing. Since the dawn of civilization, humans have been embracing new socitilization methods・ Just like letters, telephones, telegrams have not diminished real-life socialization, email, MSN or ICQ will only complement face-to-face interaction, rather than damage it.