全国高考英语满分作文赏析.doc

一. 用词准确 ;表达地道

【北京卷】 【试题回放】 第一节情景作文 (20 分)

美国中学生 jeff 将要来你所在的红星中学学习中文,

经磋商安排住在你家。 假设你是李 华,请给 Jeff 写一封信,按照下图顺序介绍他来中国后的生活安排。 注意： 1. 信的开头已为你写好。

2.词数不少于 60。 Dear Jeff,

I ’m Hua from Beijing Hongxing Middle School. I stay with my family while you ’re in Beijing.

While you are here, we ’ll provide you with a room of your own with a bed, a desk,of chairs and a TV. You

’ll also have your own bathroom. Our school is quite close t we could go to school t ogether by bike. At noon we ’ll eat at the school dining ha ’m very happy to learn that you like the delicious Chinese food there, and enjoy talking with friends over lunch. Classe school usually finish at 4 in the afternoon. You can then join other students in playing ball g

or swimming. It ’ll be a lot of fun. If you have any questions or requests, please let me know. We

’ll try our best to

stay here in Beijing a pleasant experience.

Best wishes,

Li Hua

[名师点评 ]

这篇文章的特点还是比较清晰的,

第一, 作者根据图画将文章的要点概括完整, 内容充 实而丰富,结构紧凑,有层次感

过渡自然,令人耳目一新。 ;第二,本文没有采用华丽的辞藻,但用词十分恰当,段落 【安徽卷】 【试题回放】

假如你是李华, 美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校配合创办一份中学生英文刊物,

该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。 请你给她写封回信, 假如你是李华, 美国一所友好学校准备与 你们学校配合创办一份中学生英文刊物,

该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。 请你给她写封回 信,主要内容如下：

l 表示赞成。

l 提出你喜欢的栏目。 1. 词数 100 左右。 3. 适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。

Dear Mr. Green,

l 简要说明理由。 注意： 2. 新的开头和结尾已为你写好。

4. 参考栏目：栏目 —column I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds

And I definitely agree with you on that. Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of “culture express

” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from di the world have different values, it

’s necessary to learn from each other. This wil chance. Apart from that , “blurt out ” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn En and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment is s ”o cool! The popular actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely can just fond of the trendy things. Teenagers a Well, I can ’t list more. I really can ’t wait to read that magazine! Yours faithfully,

Li Hua 第 1 页 共 5 页

2 【名师点评】

这是一篇满分作文。 由于这篇作文的出现, 导致了安徽省该年的英语作文分数普遍偏低。 仔细分析了这篇文章,写的的确是好,很地道的美式英语,一些词语的大胆使用,

让人不得不猜测此人或者是家人可能有过国外生活的经历,

否则这么地道标准的英语, 可不是一朝一 夕所能写出来的。比如说： my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not celebrities, catchy 和 trendy 的大胆运用, list, can't wait to 简直是 perfect! 况且文章中没有个错误,不管是书写还是语法。英语能够学到这种程度,不可谓不让人佩服。

二. 非谓语动词为作文添彩

【北京卷】 【试题回放】情景作文

假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,

为响应绿化祖国的号召, 你班四月十二日去郊 区植树,请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,介绍植树活动的全过程,给某英文杂志的

“绿色行

动”专栏写一篇以 “Green Action in Our Class 为题”的英文稿件。

注意：词数不少于 60 提示词：郊区 suburbs April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon a we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding peo protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing th of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it ’o s u r duty to protect and beau environment.

【名师点评】

本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文,

与环保结合, 立意较好。 文章思路清晰, 要点连贯, 在语言的表达上选词新颖,同时运用了

分词短语作状语 等较好的句式表达。 【北京卷】 【试题回放】开放作文

请根据下面提示,写一篇短文,词数不少于

50 In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are ask describe the picture and explain how you understand it.

What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a b noodles. He is holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying s hard to pick up the noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it ’Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the tools for eating noodles. The man in the pic trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the hard way. Maybe using one fork will do a bett In my opinion, we don

’t need to copy others ’ ways of thinking. Sometimes a si things may be a better way. 【名师点评】

本文是开放性作文, 要求考生把握好图画内容, 发散表达。 考生重点要看出这个人是卷 发高鼻的外国人, 要体会到西式刀叉对中式食物的矛盾性。

行文结构十分明晰, 同时句式使 用得熟练而准确。 三. 复合句为写作增色

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