2017英语专四作文讲评及写作指导

TEM4 新题型写作

题型变化：

Previously：陈述观点——论证观点——得出结论

Now：概括材料——提出观点并论证观点——得出结论（重申观点或提出建议）

材料作文Tactics：

1.仔细审题，分析材料（2-3mins）

2.列出提纲，确定布局（3-4mins）

Para. 1. 引出话题，概括材料（summarize，paraphrase）

Para. 2. 提出自身观点，列出理由论证

Para. 3. 重申观点或提出建议

3.正式写作（30-35mins）

4.检查并优化（2-3mins）

评分标准如何总结材料

第一段：Describe the phenomenon/introduce the discussed topic + opinions from both sides/summarize or paraphrase the topic sentences in the excerpt.

参考范文

With Intelligent Machines to Do the Thinking, Will Our Brains Get Lazy?

Nowadays, many aspects of people’s daily life have undergone considerable changes because of the recent development in artificial intelligence. Obviously, artificial intelligence has already completely renovated people’s lifestyle. On the one hand, the contribution of artificial i ntelligence to the society is prominent and people’s dependence on it is an irreversible trend. People enjoy the benefits and convenience brought by intelligent machines. On the other hand, people are still concerned about its negative impact, for example, whether our brains will regress with intelligent machines to do the thinking.

第二段：先表明自己观点

Stance: as far as I’m concerned, as to me, from my perspective, in my view, personally speaking, from my point of view

再分条论证（灵活运用连接词）

1.First and foremost, besides, last but not least

2.First, second, third

3.In the first place, in the second place, last but not least

4.Initially, besides, furthermore, last but not least

范文：In my opinion, artificial intelligence will enable our brains to get more creative. Admittedly, a lot of work has been done by intelligent machines. It seems that the function of people has been weakened and people‘s brains have been replaced. As a matter of fact, thanks to intelligent machines, people can expand their creative energy and add new varieties. Simply speaking, when people are free from tedious, repetitive, sometimes even dangerous work, work efficiency will undoubtedly be improved. As a result, people can spare more time to do what they want and pursue what they dream of, which is the premise of creativity. Moreover, creativity stems primarily from knowledge and thinking. Once people have the opportunity to do more thinking and learning, their intelligence would be enhanced rather than weakened.

第三段：enrich your restatement/express your hopes/give suggestions All in all, in a nutshell, to sum up, in brief, in short, in summary, in conclusion…

Based on the above exhaustive elaboration, it’s quite natural to come to the conclusion that…

范文：Although artificial intelligence is the exhibition of people’s high degree of creative power, it should be noted that it is like a double-edged sword. The sensible choice is to embrace its advantages and cope with the problems it has aroused. This is what an advanced and rational society should be like.