读后续写范文20篇点评

读后续写练习（一）

A farmer grew some vegetables in his garden. One day his wife was ill and he had no money. He had to sell some cabbages and carrots in the market. The next morning he took two baskets of vegetables to town. But it was raining heavily that afternoon and there were few people in the street. When his vegetables were sold out, it was dark. He bought some medicine and hurried to his village.

On his way home he saw a person lying on the snow. He placed his baskets on the ground and was going to help the person to stand up. At that time, he found it was a dead man and there was much blood on his body. He was so afraid that he ran away quickly, without taking the baskets with him.

The next afternoon the farmer was sent to the police station. Having shown the baskets, an officer asked, “Are these yours?”

“Yes, sir.” the farmer answered timidly(胆怯地).

“Have you killed the man?”

“No, no, sir.” the farmer said in a hurry.

“When did you see the dead man?”

“At about seven last night.”

“Did you see who killed the man?”

“No, sir.”

The officer brought out a knife and asked, “Have you seen it yet?”

“No, sir.”

The officer became angry and told the policemen to beat(打) him up and sent him into prison. the officer wanted to trap(设陷阱) the farmer into the confession(供认), but the farmer didn’t admit he was the murderer(谋杀犯).

注意：

1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右；

2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为二段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph 1:

The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again.

Possible answer:

Paragraph 1

The officer was so angry that he asked the policeman to beat him up again. The farmer was very afraid, and he thought he would be sentenced to death by killing people, but he was innocent. He must tell people the truth, but no one could hear his voice. He hoped that someone could come and save him.

Paragraph 2

The farmer was lucky .A few days later, a young man came to the police station with a lot of journalists, saying that he saw the murderer. It was the police officer who killed the man on the snow! He saw the police office used a knife killing the man late in the evening. He was so frightened and ran away. But the young man thought the farmer was innocent. So he took the great courage to expose the real criminal. After the investigation, the young man was right. The police officer was sent into prison and the policeman who beat up the farmer was fired, and the brave young man was regarded as the hero by the villagers.

简评：

1.The farmer was very afraid, and he thought he would be sentenced to death by killing people.这一句可以改为形容词作状语的悬垂结构：Afraid / Frightened, the farmer thought he would be sentenced to death by killing people.

2.He hoped that someone could come and save him.可改成感叹句，语气更加强烈：How he hoped that someone could come and save him!

3....a young man came to the police station with a lot of journalists, saying that he saw the murderer. 后半部分词作状语，构成悬垂结构。saying可以换成declaring 宣布; saw可换成witnessed,目击。

4.It was the police officer who killed the man on the snow! 强调句，高级。强调部分还可以加上否定内容使语意更加完整。此处可以用到It was not... but... that ...或者It was ... rather than...that ...即：It was not the farmer but the police officer that killed the man on the snow! 或者It was the police officer rather than the farmer that killed the man on the snow!

5.So he took the great courage to expose the real criminal. 中took the great courage to 鼓起极大勇气做某事。

6.After the investigation, the young man was right. 建议改为：After investigation,the police found what the young man had said was the truth.

7.The police officer was sent into prison and the policeman who beat up the farmer was fired, and the brave young man was regarded as the hero by the villagers.最后一句可以适当加上副词。Immediately, the police officer was sent into prison and the policeman who beat up the farmer was fired. Eventually,the poor farmer was released and the brave young man was regarded as the hero