高考英语作文提升训练课件：分类写作 5建议信

满分佳作（二）
Dear Editor-in-Chief, Congratulations on the 5th anniversary of Global Mirror! ①As a
loyal reader, I have learnt much from your newspaper, including reading daily news. ②It is obvious that Global Mirror enjoys high popularity for a series of advantages. ③First, it not only includes domestic and foreign news but also makes a detailed analysis full of remarkable insights. ④Besides, it introduces different celebrities’ success which motivates readers not to give up but to pursue their dreams whatever happens. Of course, they can avoid the detours in their progress.
④As a young student, I suggest that Global Mirror carry articles to guide us in our English learning, and I hope that it will become even more popular.
1. I’d like to give you some suggestions that may help you learn your math good.
1. good 改为well
2. If you will need to buy a good smart phone at a low price, I will suggest a Hongmi Mi3.
作文翻译
亲爱的李老师， 我非常高兴您当我们的英语老师。随着世界变成了地球村，
英语变得越来越重要，因此掌握好英语意味着我们可以通过一扇新 的窗户看世界。
10. 删掉to
【2011全国Ⅱ卷：读者给报刊建议】
假定你是李华，你所喜爱的Global Mirror周报正于创刊五周年之 际征集读者意见。请你依据以下内容给主编写封信，内容主要包括：
1. 说明你是该报的忠实读者； 2. 赞赏该报优点：
1) 兼顾国内外新闻 2) 介绍名人成功故事； 3. 提出建议：刊登指导英语学习的文章。
lift one’s spirits 振奋某人的精神 improve one’s reading ability 提高阅读能力 be alarmingly shocking 十分令人震惊的 ironically 讽刺地 get used to the phenomenon 习惯于这个现象 have a bad effect on 对……有坏影响 dustbin 垃圾箱 set up specific rules 制定具体的制度 develop good habits 培养好的习惯 with the joint efforts of sb. 有了某人的共同努力 cover a wide variety of 涵括各种各样的…… broaden our horizon 开阔我们的视野
5. Here are some suggestions which I hope will be of some help to you. 这里是一些建议，希望会对你有帮助。
6. I wonder if the school could place more dustbins around. 我想学校 是否能够在周围多放些垃圾桶。
2. 删掉第一个will
3. We all know that it is always very hard to starting in a new school. 3. starting改为start
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4. I found it difficult to express myself in English, and my English teacher advised me that I practiced more. 4. practiced改为practice
7. I believe that, with the joint efforts of both teachers and students, our school will become a more enjoyable place in the near future. 我 相信，有了老师和学生的共同努力，我们学校会在不久的将来成为 一个更令人快乐的地方。
Sincerely yours, Li Hua
满分赏析
①用到…mainly for the following two reasons解释原因的总起句，体 现了对写作句型的熟练掌握。 ②cover(覆盖……范围、包括……)一词用得地道；还用上了so that引 导的结果状语从句。 ③Equally attractive are…(同样吸引人的还有……)这是地道、不同于 一般模板的连接手段，表示与上面First…提到的内容并列；本句还 有which引导的定语从句和to make the world a better place这样地道 自然的表达；这样的句子是提分的句子。 ④用到suggest加宾语从句，从句动词用do或者should do。
3. And I’ve found that my problem lies chiefly in two aspects. For one thing, ... For another thing, ... 我发现我的问题主要在于两个方面。 一方面，…… 另一方面，……
4. Therefore, it’s my hope that you can give us some practical tips on how to ... 因此，我希望你能就……给我们一些实用的建议。
1. I like it very much mainly for the following two reasons. 我十分喜欢 它，主要有以下两个原因。
2. Almost perfect as it is, it should make more improvement in some area. 尽管它近乎完美，它在一些方面仍需要改进。
8. friend改为friends
9. Why not ask him to give a explanation for his being absent from the meeting yesterday？
9. a改为an 10. I think you should grasp the opportunity and go to abroad for further studies.
⑤Almost perfect as it is, it should make more improvement in some area. For example, considering many readers’ thirst for English study, it will be a good idea to publish some articles dealing with approaches to English learning.
【2012四川卷改编：告诉老师学习情况和建议】
作文原题 假如你是大学一年级新生李华。开学之初，你的英语老师 Ms Li希望了解每位同学的英语学习情况，并征求教学建 议。请按以下要点用英语给她写一封信。
1. 对英语学习的认识； 2. 自己目前的英语水平； 3. 自己英语学习存在的主要问题； 4. 对英语教学的两点建议。
7. Playing football not only make us grow tall and strong but also gives us a sense of team spirit.
7. make改为makes
8. I hope everything will be OK and you will soon make some friend in the new city.
Sincerely yours, Li Hua
满分赏析
①a loyal reader(一位忠实的读者)，这个短语体现了作者的词汇能力。 ② 用 到 It is obvious that... 加 主 语 从 句 的 句 型 ； enjoy high popularity(享有很高的声誉)，体现了作者平时的积累。 ③用到not only…but also…连接信息。 ④本句的精华之处也很多：有Besides的连接手段；有which引导的 定语从句的句法手段；有motivate sb. not to do sth.和pursue their dreams whatever happens(无论发生什么都要追求自己的梦想)这些 优美的词句。 ⑤Almost perfect as it is这是一个让步状语从句的倒装句，意为：尽 管它已经接近完美。 本篇句句高级、词词优美，怎能不给满分？
5. As for your future major, I think most suitable thing for you is teaching Chinese as a foreign language.
5. most前面加the
6. I sorry to learn that you haven’t adapted to the new life there. 6. 在I后加am
全国高考英语二轮突破
a global village 地球村 master English 掌握英语 be aware of 意识到 have a good command of sth. 某事掌握得很好 two aspects 两个方面 keep sth. in mind 记住 English composition 英语作文 memorize English words 记忆英语单词 control one’s temper 控制某人的脾气 let out one’s anger 释放怒气 an effective way 一个有效的方式 get rid of 摆脱 remain optimistic about sth. 保持乐观
满分佳作（一）
Dear Editor-in-Chief, Congratulations on the 5th anniversary of Global Mirror!
I’m a regular reader of your newspaper. ①I like it very much mainly for the following two reasons. ②First, it covers both national and international news so that, by simply turning the pages, I can learn all important things that have happened during the week. ③Equally attractive are the success stories of world-famous people, which help me understand how a person can work hard to make the world a better place.