英语作文评讲1

Is Writing Better than Calling
作文评讲
四六级作文评分标准
• 14分……切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性好。基本 分 切题 表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性好。 切题。 上无语言错误，仅有个别小错误。 上无语言错误，仅有个别小错误。 • 11分……切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错 分 切题 表达思想清楚，文字连贯， 切题。 误。 • 8分……基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连 分 基本切题 有些地方表达思想不够清楚， 基本切题。 语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。 贯；语言错误相当多，其中有一些是严重错误。 • 5分……基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严 分 基本切题 表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。 基本切题。 重语言错误。 重语言错误。 • 2分 ……条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或在部分句子 分 条理不清， 条理不清 思路紊乱， 均有错误，且多数为严重错误。 均有错误，且多数为严重错误。
常见语法错误分析
句意含糊不清,逻辑混乱 句意含糊不清 逻辑混乱 • Although it is more convenient and it can save much time than writing, we can’t deny that always we pay little attention to what we said and heard. • We use telephone to talk with each other from distance. But I the past, people from long distance get in touch with letters. So I think calling is better than writing.
常见语法错误分析
断句错误,非完整句 断句错误 非完整句 • As the technology develops. Telephone is widely used, of course it is more convenient. • So, to conclude, I choose to write a letter. • In my opinion, the answer is easy to see, a note is much more inspiring. • Most times we make phone calls to others, we say a lot, but after a while, we’ll forget what we have said.
Is Writing Better than Calling?
Writing letters is a very ancient means of communication which still plays an important role in today’s social life, but with the development of telecommunication industry, many people prefer picking up the telephone. So writing or calling, which one is better? My answer is calling. Calling is much more convenient than writing. Making a phone call takes only several minutes while writing apparently demands much longer time. In fact, nowadays many people are living a busy life and they have little spare time, in that case calling is their first choice. Actually, most of us make phone calls everyday and some of us cannot live a normal life without calling!
常见语法错误分析
重复啰嗦 • Once you have made up your mind, the rest thing you have to do is do your best to fulfill your dream. • I’m in my last year at the junior school a month before the exam for the entrance of the later school. • Calling is convenient, fast and efficient. • We can response quickly by calling, and don’t need to wait for along time.
解决问题式结构开头 • Nowadays, the rhythm of people’s life is speeding up and a lot of changes have taken place in our lives. An increasing number of people have begun to challenge against the existing practice of ______. They argue that _____. There is no denying that there is some truth in their point. In my opinion, ____.
注意：1）先写不赞成的观点，再写赞成的观点； 2） 最后一段不能太短 3）写不赞成的观点时，尽量用 些不确定的词。
对称式结构开头 • Along with the development of ____, more and more problems are brought to our attention, one of which is that ____. It has caused a heated public debate. Some people think ____, while others claim ____. Both sides have their merits. Before giving my opinion, I think it is important to look at the argument on both sides.
常见语法错误分析
其他语法错误 • Writing likes well cooked Chinese dishes while calling likes fast food. • Sometimes we write a letter is better. • In fact that is my father told me. • Writing is available for its keeping longer. • Did writing is really better than calling • Meantime, letters can be taken long time for repeated reading and savoring, while calling doesn’t.
常见语法错误分析
用词错误 word choice • I have never gone to their home. • Our teacher contributed two classes and asked us to write a letter. • Writing can have a better express. • Writing is a formal way to link up with the others. • It avoid you to say something inappropriate. • Writing can give inspiring more efficiently.
五段式结构开头 • With the development of ____, more people began to use ____. As we know, every coin has two sides, _____ is of no exception. As far as I am concerned, its advantages outweigh its disadvantages. There are numerous reasons why I hold this opinion, and I would explore a few of the most important ones here.
常见语法错误分析
句意含糊不清 • But when you are talking on the phone, sometimes you say something unconsciously that you may regret, or you may make a comment that is misunderstood or that hurt you friend. • Less time taking appeals to the busy people in the society of high speed. • Making a habit of writing can make your world colorful and full up with emotions which can be touched and kept forever.
解决问题式结构
• 1 . Introduction （开 引题） 头，引题） • 2. Reasons （原因，可 原因， 以一个或是多个） 以一个或是多个） • 3. Solution （解决措施， 解决措施， 一个或是多个） 一个或是多个） • 4. 结尾 (详述） 详述） 详述 • 1 . Introduction （开 引题） 头，引题） • 2. Reason 1 ， solution1 • 3. Reason 2, solution2 • 4. 结尾 (详述） 详述） 详述