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Step 1 Thorough Reading
One Christmas Day
In Pappy's shop
A litthristmas gift
a bell
valued
excited sad
joyful embarrassed
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Step 2 Drafting-Creative Plotting
Para 2
Para 1
Problems:Later that Possible results/solution evening when pappy
Problems: With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him.
Results:
Step 3 Polishing
1. vivid verbs
2. inner thoughts
With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked (looks,surroundings,
up at him. She forced a smile, murmuring“Thank dialogues)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 It was Christmas Day. Pappy was working alone fixing an old lantern in the backroom when he heard the ringing
of his bell on the shop door. The bell, which produced a uniquely pleasant sound, had been in Pappy's family for over a hundred years. He valued it dearly and enjoyed sharing its song with all who came to his shop. Although the bell hung on the inside of the main door, Pappy had tied a wire to the screen door so that it would ring whether the inner door was open or not. Hearing the bell, he left the backroom to greet his customer.
全不影响意义表达。 • 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
记叙文书面表达能力
读后续写过程中存在的问题：
续写内容与所给短文在叙述意图上不一致 续写内容与所给短文在相关细节上相矛盾 续写内容与所给短文在语篇结构上不连贯
Step3
polish
（润色）
Step 2
draft
（拟稿）
• * use different structures（结构） • * use transitional words （过渡） • * add some details （细节）
Pappy may feel a sense of sympathy and went to comfort the little girl.
Solutions:
Pappy had a deal with the girl. The girl got her dreamed bell.
Underlined words: 8 When: Christmas Day
“It's not worth seeing.”
“I don't think much of it, either.” The husband said, “Wake the child up and__l_e_t _h_im__c_r_y_______.”
Requirements
1 续写部分分为两段，开头已经为你写好; 2 续写的短文字数为150左右； 3 应使用短文中5个以上标有下划线的关键词语； 4 续写完成后，请用下划线标注你所使用的关键词语。
Continuation Writing
新题型探究-读后续写
The parents with their three-year-old son went to see a film. When they walked into the cinema, the attendant said to them: “ You'll have to go out if your son cries. But we'll refund(退款) you the tickets.”
bell to Pappy.
Solutions:
Pappy's estranged (疏远的) daughter came back home. The whole family got tegether again !
Step 3 Polishing
Think about two questions: 1. What details can be added to enrich the outline? 2. What's improved in the second edition?
评分细则 Logical reasonable consistent
与原文剧情融洽， 逻辑合理 续写内容丰富有 看点，用了关键 词 语法结构和词汇 多样准确
语句间衔接自然， 结构紧凑
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记叙文阅读理解能力
• 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。 • 内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。 • 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富，准确，可能有些许错误，但完
(Para.1Edition 2)With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him.
She forced a smile, murmuring“Thank you”and made her way to the door. There was a dead silence in the shop. Suddenly Pappy thought of his daughter. Driven by a sense of sympathy, Pappy called out, “How much have you got to spend?”Hearing this, the little girl counted money in her purse---two dollars altogether. After thinking for what seems like a few seconds, Pappy announced,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day. It is two dollars that the bell costs exactly.”The child danced out with great joy, the special bell held in her hand.
“And how can I help you, little lady?” Pappy's voice was joyful. “Hello, sir.” The little girl spoke almost in a whisper. She looked at Pappy with her big brown eyes, and then slowly scanned the room in search of something special. Shyly she told him, “I'd like to buy a present, sir.” “Well, let's see,” Pappy said, “who is this present for?” “My grandpa. It's for my grandpa. But I don't know what to get.” Pappy began to make suggestions. “How about a pocket watch? It's in good condition.” The little girl didn't answer. She had walked to the doorway and put her small hand on the door. She shook the door gently to ring the bell. Pappy's face seemed to glow as he saw her smiling with excitement. “This is just right,” the little girl said. “Momma says grandpa loves music.” Just then, Pappy's expression changed. Fearful of breaking the little girl's heart, he told her, “I'm sorry, Missy. That's not for sale. Maybe your grandpa would like this little radio.” The girl looked at the radio, bowed her head, and sadly sighed, “No, I don't think so.” In an effort to help her understand, Pappy told her that the bell had been his only companion, for the rest of his family were all gone now, except for his estranged (疏远的) daughter whom he had not seen for nearly a decade. With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him.___________________________________ Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ringing. __________________________
Who:
pappy, the little girl, grandpa,momma, daughter
What： present
How: sigh,special
was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ringing. Results: The girl give the
• * Predict all the possbile plot • * with the help of “PRS”strategy
Step 1
read
(阅读）
* given two sentences（段首语） * main plots of the passage（故事情节）
“PRS”
Strategy Problem--Result--Solution