优化方案(江苏专用)高考英语总复习第三部分写作技能培优第四讲巧妙遣词造句,实现升级策略课件
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高考书面表达最高档次的评分标准中， 要求“词汇丰富， 有 修辞意识， 显示出较强的语言运用能力”。 因此要想在高考 英语写作中取得高分， 就必须使用一定的高级词汇及复杂句式， 为文章增加闪光点， 从而提高文章的档次。
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一、遣词方面 1．措辞要贴切具体 试比较下面句子：一个人正在街上闲逛。 A man is walking down the street. A man is wandering down the street. 通过比较可以看出， 前一句不如后一句表达得具体、生动。 一 个词如果内涵越具体， 那么在特定的场景中恰当地使用它， 就 会收到意想不到的效果。
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One possible version： When I Have a Different Opinion
We may have different opinions in organizing class activities. When I have a different opinion, I may choose to give it up and respect the opinion of _t_h_e_m__a_j_o_r_it_y__ (大多数)． The main reason for my choice is that being _b_r_o_u_g_h_t__u_p___ (抚 养) in a culture __e_m_p_h_a_s_i_z_in_g__ (强调) collectivism①， I _t_e_n_d__to____ (倾向于) __s_a_c_ri_f_ic_e__ (牺牲) my own interest for the group benefit. Once we were left to decide whether to have a picnic in a park or go to a museum. I would love to go to a museum, but most of my classmates wanted to go for a picnic
第标准中强调使用语法结构的数量和复杂性， 鼓励考生尽量 使用较复杂的结构， 并且对由此产生的错误采取了宽容的态度。 如果恰当运用各类从句， 就会增加文章的亮点。 Soon I became one of the top students in my class, which greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated.(定语从 句)
第三(dì sān)部分 第四讲
第四讲 巧妙(qiǎomiào)遣词造句， 实 现升级策略
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第三(dì sān)部分 第四讲
(2015·浙江高考书面表达)在班级活动中， 当你的想法与大多数 同学不一致时， 你是坚持自己的观点并说服别人， 还是尊重 大多数同学的意见？请你以“When I Have a Different Opinion” 为题， 用英语写一篇 100～120 个词的短文。 要求如下： 1．从以上两种做法中选择一种； 2．以具体事例阐述你选择的理由。 注意：短文中， 不得以任何形式透露地区、学校、同学姓名等 真实信息。 否则， 按考试作弊行为认定。
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二、造句方面 1．巧用非谓语动词 运用非谓语动词， 可使文句看起来更简洁， 使语言更加丰富 多彩， 重点更加突出， 增加文采。 I covered my ears, trying to keep the noise out, but failed.
第十页，共27页。
2．巧用 with 复合结构 “with 名词/代词 现在分词/过去分词/形容词/副词/介词”结 构， 常作伴随状语以增加被描绘内容的生动性和情感性， 使 文章读起来更简洁明了。 试比较： He slept all the night and the window was open.(一般) He slept all the night with the window open.(高级)
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4．巧用倒装句、感叹句、强调句、虚拟语气句等 使用这些句式可使文章化平淡为生动， 加强语气， 使评卷老 师感受到作者的强烈情感， 起到升级文章的作用。 Disappointed as I felt at the shabby campus and the poorly equipped classroom, I found the teachers patient and considerate.(倒装句)
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(1)巧用词汇：the majority; bring up; emphasize; tend to; sacrifice; without hesitation; have lots of fun; give up。 (2)①句中含有一个 that 引导的表语从句， 使得句式更加多样， 表达更加流畅。 ②句中有一个 but 连接的并列句， 避免了文章只是简单句的罗 列， 丰富了句式结构。
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5．巧用排比等句式 如能运用排比句、对偶句、不定式或短语， 可使文章增色不少， 给评卷老师眼前一亮的感觉。 The purpose of the program is to make our school more beautiful, to make the air cleaner and fresher, and to turn our school into a better place for us to study and live in.
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There is a lack of social experience among students and therefore learning how to protect ourselves is of great significance to us all. For one thing, security comes first. Without security, we can achieve nothing and can not live up to parents’ expectations. For another thing, protecting ourselves contributes to the healthy development of the students, which is associated with the happiness of every family. Meanwhile, it also helps to build a more harmonious society.
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Ⅰ 请写出下面作文的亮点词句 (2016·江苏四市调研)Recently, it has been a great public concern that the students lack self-protection awareness. As is vividly shown in the picture, society, schools, parents and especially students should work together to ensure students’ security.
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When I Have a Different Opinion ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ __________________________________
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Personally, in order to protect us students, above all, we should strengthen our security awareness. Besides, when accidents occur, we should calm down and turn to teachers or parents for help. The government also plays a leading role in protecting students. In a word, only by the combined efforts of every side involved can we live and study in harmony.
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2．要善于运用短语 短语用得好， 会给评卷老师留下深刻印象。 例如： When he was a child, he wanted to learn everything.(普通) When he was a child, he had a strong appetite( 胃 口 )for knowledge.(高级)
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②. __W__it_h_o_u_t_h_e_s_i_ta_t_i_o_n_____ (毫不犹豫), I decided to follow them and we did _h_a_v_e_l_o_t_s_o_f_f_u_n_____________ (有很多乐趣) that day. Sometimes _g_i_v_in_g__u_p______ (放弃) a little can mean getting more.
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亮点词句： _vi_v_i_d_ly_;_e_n_s_u_r_e_;_a__la_c_k__o_f;__h_o_w__to_._.._;_b_e__o_f _g_r_ea_t__si_g_n_i_fi_c_a_n_c_e_; _fo_r_ _on__e_t_h_in_g_;__li_v_e_u_p__t_o_; _e_x_p_e_ct_a_t_io_n_;__fo_r__a_n_o_th_e_r__th__in_g_;_c_o_n_t_r_ib__u_te_ _to_;_w__h_ic_h__;_b_e__a_ss_o_c_i_a_te_d__w_i_th__; _m_e_a_n_w__h_i_le_;_p_e_r_s_o_n_a_ll_y_;_a_b_o_v_e__a_ll; _st_r_e_n_g_t_h_en__; _b_e_s_id_e_s_;_p_l_a_y_a__r_o_le_i_n_;_i_n_a__w_o_r_d_;__o_n_ly__倒__装__句__。_
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Ⅱ 巧妙遣词造句， 升级下面文章 (2016·盐城模拟)A set of textbook designed to help high school students learn about Chinese traditional culture is to be published soon, Beijing Times reported on Monday. The books are the first nationallevel works of their kind and have been developed by a working group that promotes traditional culture. They will be used by students from autumn this year, the report said.
高考书面表达最高档次的评分标准中， 要求“词汇丰富， 有 修辞意识， 显示出较强的语言运用能力”。 因此要想在高考 英语写作中取得高分， 就必须使用一定的高级词汇及复杂句式， 为文章增加闪光点， 从而提高文章的档次。
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一、遣词方面 1．措辞要贴切具体 试比较下面句子：一个人正在街上闲逛。 A man is walking down the street. A man is wandering down the street. 通过比较可以看出， 前一句不如后一句表达得具体、生动。 一 个词如果内涵越具体， 那么在特定的场景中恰当地使用它， 就 会收到意想不到的效果。
第三页，共27页。
One possible version： When I Have a Different Opinion
We may have different opinions in organizing class activities. When I have a different opinion, I may choose to give it up and respect the opinion of _t_h_e_m__a_j_o_r_it_y__ (大多数)． The main reason for my choice is that being _b_r_o_u_g_h_t__u_p___ (抚 养) in a culture __e_m_p_h_a_s_i_z_in_g__ (强调) collectivism①， I _t_e_n_d__to____ (倾向于) __s_a_c_ri_f_ic_e__ (牺牲) my own interest for the group benefit. Once we were left to decide whether to have a picnic in a park or go to a museum. I would love to go to a museum, but most of my classmates wanted to go for a picnic
第标准中强调使用语法结构的数量和复杂性， 鼓励考生尽量 使用较复杂的结构， 并且对由此产生的错误采取了宽容的态度。 如果恰当运用各类从句， 就会增加文章的亮点。 Soon I became one of the top students in my class, which greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated.(定语从 句)
第三(dì sān)部分 第四讲
第四讲 巧妙(qiǎomiào)遣词造句， 实 现升级策略
第一页，共27页。
第三(dì sān)部分 第四讲
(2015·浙江高考书面表达)在班级活动中， 当你的想法与大多数 同学不一致时， 你是坚持自己的观点并说服别人， 还是尊重 大多数同学的意见？请你以“When I Have a Different Opinion” 为题， 用英语写一篇 100～120 个词的短文。 要求如下： 1．从以上两种做法中选择一种； 2．以具体事例阐述你选择的理由。 注意：短文中， 不得以任何形式透露地区、学校、同学姓名等 真实信息。 否则， 按考试作弊行为认定。
第九页，共27页。
二、造句方面 1．巧用非谓语动词 运用非谓语动词， 可使文句看起来更简洁， 使语言更加丰富 多彩， 重点更加突出， 增加文采。 I covered my ears, trying to keep the noise out, but failed.
第十页，共27页。
2．巧用 with 复合结构 “with 名词/代词 现在分词/过去分词/形容词/副词/介词”结 构， 常作伴随状语以增加被描绘内容的生动性和情感性， 使 文章读起来更简洁明了。 试比较： He slept all the night and the window was open.(一般) He slept all the night with the window open.(高级)
第十二页，共27页。
4．巧用倒装句、感叹句、强调句、虚拟语气句等 使用这些句式可使文章化平淡为生动， 加强语气， 使评卷老 师感受到作者的强烈情感， 起到升级文章的作用。 Disappointed as I felt at the shabby campus and the poorly equipped classroom, I found the teachers patient and considerate.(倒装句)
第五页，共27页。
(1)巧用词汇：the majority; bring up; emphasize; tend to; sacrifice; without hesitation; have lots of fun; give up。 (2)①句中含有一个 that 引导的表语从句， 使得句式更加多样， 表达更加流畅。 ②句中有一个 but 连接的并列句， 避免了文章只是简单句的罗 列， 丰富了句式结构。
第十三页，共27页。
5．巧用排比等句式 如能运用排比句、对偶句、不定式或短语， 可使文章增色不少， 给评卷老师眼前一亮的感觉。 The purpose of the program is to make our school more beautiful, to make the air cleaner and fresher, and to turn our school into a better place for us to study and live in.
第十五页，共27页。
There is a lack of social experience among students and therefore learning how to protect ourselves is of great significance to us all. For one thing, security comes first. Without security, we can achieve nothing and can not live up to parents’ expectations. For another thing, protecting ourselves contributes to the healthy development of the students, which is associated with the happiness of every family. Meanwhile, it also helps to build a more harmonious society.
第十四页，共27页。
Ⅰ 请写出下面作文的亮点词句 (2016·江苏四市调研)Recently, it has been a great public concern that the students lack self-protection awareness. As is vividly shown in the picture, society, schools, parents and especially students should work together to ensure students’ security.
第二页，共27页。
When I Have a Different Opinion ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ ______________________________________________________ __________________________________
第十六页，共27页。
Personally, in order to protect us students, above all, we should strengthen our security awareness. Besides, when accidents occur, we should calm down and turn to teachers or parents for help. The government also plays a leading role in protecting students. In a word, only by the combined efforts of every side involved can we live and study in harmony.
第八页，共27页。
2．要善于运用短语 短语用得好， 会给评卷老师留下深刻印象。 例如： When he was a child, he wanted to learn everything.(普通) When he was a child, he had a strong appetite( 胃 口 )for knowledge.(高级)
第四页，共27页。
②. __W__it_h_o_u_t_h_e_s_i_ta_t_i_o_n_____ (毫不犹豫), I decided to follow them and we did _h_a_v_e_l_o_t_s_o_f_f_u_n_____________ (有很多乐趣) that day. Sometimes _g_i_v_in_g__u_p______ (放弃) a little can mean getting more.
第十七页，共27页。
亮点词句： _vi_v_i_d_ly_;_e_n_s_u_r_e_;_a__la_c_k__o_f;__h_o_w__to_._.._;_b_e__o_f _g_r_ea_t__si_g_n_i_fi_c_a_n_c_e_; _fo_r_ _on__e_t_h_in_g_;__li_v_e_u_p__t_o_; _e_x_p_e_ct_a_t_io_n_;__fo_r__a_n_o_th_e_r__th__in_g_;_c_o_n_t_r_ib__u_te_ _to_;_w__h_ic_h__;_b_e__a_ss_o_c_i_a_te_d__w_i_th__; _m_e_a_n_w__h_i_le_;_p_e_r_s_o_n_a_ll_y_;_a_b_o_v_e__a_ll; _st_r_e_n_g_t_h_en__; _b_e_s_id_e_s_;_p_l_a_y_a__r_o_le_i_n_;_i_n_a__w_o_r_d_;__o_n_ly__倒__装__句__。_
第十八页，共27页。
Ⅱ 巧妙遣词造句， 升级下面文章 (2016·盐城模拟)A set of textbook designed to help high school students learn about Chinese traditional culture is to be published soon, Beijing Times reported on Monday. The books are the first nationallevel works of their kind and have been developed by a working group that promotes traditional culture. They will be used by students from autumn this year, the report said.