读后续写写作分析海边的神奇贝壳讲义云南省昆明市高二下学期期末统测英语试题

2024年7月5日昆明市高二期末
统测读后续写
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Caitlyn stepped into the warm and wet sands. The white waves raced over her feet and up her legs and then pulled back again. Caitlyn was on vacation with her family in a nearby coastal town, and she loved playing in the ocean water.
"Ouch!" cried the girl, as her foot stepped on something hard. She looked down and it was a large shell (贝壳). Caitlyn bent down to pick it up. It was a pretty pink shell with points and an opening that looked like a horn (号). She held it up to her ear, hoping to hear the whooshing sound (呼啸声). Instead, she heard something quite different.
"Hey kid! Want to hear a joke?"
Caitlyn nearly dropped the shell. Holding it back up to her ear, she tried again.
"Why don't fish play basketball?" the shell asked.
"I... I don't know," Caitlyn whispered.
"Because they are afraid of the net! Ha, ha!" laughed the shell. Caitlyn looked around to see if anyone was looking at her. Nobody was.
"That's, uh, funny," she replied. She didn't really know what was going on.
"Why don't oysters (牡蛎) share their pearls?" It seemed to be waiting for a reply.
"Uh, I'm not sure." Caitlyn said. Was she dreaming?
The shell answered its own joke. "Because they're 'shellfish'! Ha, ha!"
The girl laughed. On and on the shell went, being silly and making jokes. Caitlyn sat in the shallow water and listened for an hour. When her mother called to her, saying it was time to go, the girl laid the shell gently on the sands. She promised to e back the next day. And she did.
On the last day of her vacation, Caitlyn decided she couldn't leave the shell behind.
"You're ing home with me," she said to the pretty shell. She thought it would be happy.
"My home is in the ocean," it replied, without any laughter in its voice. But Caitlyn couldn't bear to go home without it.
Paragraph 1: Arriving home, she held the shell to her ear — silence.
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Paragraph 2: Back at the beach, she took the shell down to the ocean waves.
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中文故事梗概
Caitlyn在海滩度假时，踩到一个大贝壳shell。

她捡起贝壳放到耳边，期待听到海浪的声音，却听到了贝壳讲的笑话。

贝壳问她为什么鱼不打篮球，并自问自答说因为它们怕网；还问为什么牡蛎不分享珍珠，回答是因为它们很“自私”（shellfish）。

Caitlyn被逗得哈哈大笑，坐在浅水区听了一个小时的笑话。

海边度假的几天里，她每天都回到海滩听贝壳讲笑话，度过了愉快的假期。

假期结束时，凯特琳舍不得离开这个会说话的贝壳，尽管贝壳告诉她它的家在海里，她还是决定把贝壳带回家…
主要人物: Caitlyn 会说话的贝壳shell
叙事视角：第三人称视角
文本主题分类：人与自然和谐共生
续写思路建议
第一段，从题目给出的续写首句看，Caitlyn应该是不顾贝壳的意愿，自私地把它带回了家，但贝壳不再说话了。

一种合理的续写内容创设是：Caitlyn 反复尝试让贝壳说话但都没有成功，于是决定还是把贝壳送回它原本的自然环境中。

第二段，应该主要写Caitlyn把贝壳送回到海里之后的情况。

一种合理的续写方式是：回到自己的家园的贝壳重新开始讲话了。

文末主题升华方面，考生可以紧扣“人与自然”这个主题，把准备好的升华句自然地用起来。

写作示范
Arriving home, she held the shell to her ear — silence. Caitlyn felt a pang of disappointment. She shook the shell gently, hoping to hear even a whisper, but there was nothing. Determined not to give up, she placed the shell on her bedside table, thinking it might need time to adjust. Days turned into weeks, and still, the shell remained silent. Missing the jokes and laughter, she reflected on how happy the shell
had sounded by the ocean. Realizing the shell needed to be near the sea to regain its voice, Caitlyn knew she had to take it back to its true home. (93 words)
Back at the beach, she took the shell down to the ocean waves. She knelt by the
water's edge and gently placed the shell in the shallow waves. "I'm sorry for taking you away," she whispered. As the waves lapped over the shell, Caitlyn heard a faint giggle. She leaned in closer. "Hey kid! Why did the crab never share?" The shell had started talking again. "Because he's shellfish too!" Caitlyn answered, feeling great joy. In that moment, she finally understood that some things are meant to be free and belong in their natural place. As she stood to leave, she felt a connection with the ocean, knowing she had learned a lesson about respect and harmony with nature. (106 words)
01写作细节分析
Arriving home, she held the shell to her ear — silence. Caitlyn felt a pang of disappointment.（恰当的情绪描写：失望）She shook the shell gently, hoping to hear even a whisper, but there was nothing.（合理的而且必要的动作描写）Determined not to give up, she placed the shell on her bedside table, thinking it might need time to adjust. Days turned into weeks, and still, the shell remained silent.（合理的内容创设：反复尝试）Missing the jokes and laughter, she reflected on how happy the shell had sounded by the ocean. Realizing the shell needed to be near the sea to regain its voice, Caitlyn knew she had to take it back to its true home.（和下文给出的第一句合理衔接：决定把贝壳送回大海）
Back at the beach, she took the shell down to the ocean waves. She knelt by the
you away," she whispered.
"Hey kid! Why did the crab never share?" The shell had started talking again. "Because he's shellfish too!"（shellfish和原文重要概念互动）Caitlyn answered（合理改编创设：这次是Caitlyn自己说出的答案）, feeling great joy. In that moment, she finally understood that some things are meant to be free and belong in their natural place. As she stood to leave, she felt a connection with the ocean, knowing she had learned a lesson about respect and harmony with nature.（升华句的恰当自然使用）
02词汇和表达积累
a pang of disappointment 一阵失望
reflect on 反思，回想
kneel (kneltknelt) 跪下
lap over 拍打，轻轻覆盖
a faint giggle 微弱的笑声
lean in 靠近
respect and harmony 尊重与和谐
下水文
Arriving home, she held the shell to her ear — silence. Caitlyn's heart sank. The lively jokes and laughter that once filled her ears were now replaced by an eerie quiet. She had grown so fond of the shell's pany during her vacation, and its sudden silence made her feel a strange sense of loss. She tried different tricks, shaking it gently, tapping it, but nothing brought back the jokester voice. It was as if the magic of the ocean had been left behind with the retreating waves. Back at the beach, she took the shell down to the ocean waves. Caitlyn walked slowly, her heart heavy with the decision she had to make. As the cool water lapped at her feet, she held the shell close, feeling its smooth surface under her fingers. She placed it carefully back into the water, watching as it sank beneath the surface, a small part of her wanting to believe it would call out one last joke. But the shell remained silent, and Caitlyn understood. It was a part of the ocean, and taking it away had stolen its voice. With a final, loving glance at the spot where it had disappeared, she waded back to the shore, a little wiser and a lot more respectful of the magic that lived beneath the waves.。