高考英语作文优化
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We live in the moment to make tomorrow nice. Time passing by, it like the wind blow through the leaves. It doesn’t leave any signs.
We want our dreams to fly and let it go with the wind. Once time is losing, it will never be found again. By using time well, we can have a beautiful future.
条理性较差； ．语言运用较差，
错误较多， 但基本能表达观点。
重庆市高考英语书面表达评分标准
第三档（8—11分） 基本达到总体要求。 ．有效结合材料，
观点基本明确； ．内容基本连贯，
有一定的条理性； ．语言运用基本得体，
有少量错误， 但能表达观点。
第四档（12—15分） 很好地达到总体要求。 ．有效结合材料，
It is of great significance to take full advantage of today to change tomorrow into limitless possibilities.
A Composition from Another Student Yesterday is the best memory you have and present is the
我们要非常重视英语作文原因是英语作文对我们的考试成绩有着极大影响
高考英语作文优化
重庆市实验中学 刘志强
Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a
mystery. But today is a gift. That is why it is
called tod use of today. Let’s come true our dream.
小组活动
（四人一组，优化原作） Tomorrow will better? No one really knows. Yesterday brings us memories. We can only have today. We live in the moment to make tomorrow nice. Time passing by, it like the wind blow through the leaves. It doesn’t leave any signs. We want our dreams to fly and let it go with the wind. Once time is losing, it will never be found again. By using time well, we can have a beautiful future. Let’s make good use of today. Let’s come true our dream.
一. 活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。
1.Applying advanced vocabulary is very helpful to improving our English compositions. Applying advanced vocabulary _i_s_o_f_g_r_e_a_t _h_e_lp_ to improving our English compositions.
Let’s make good use of today. Let’s come true our dream.
重庆市高考英语书面表达评分标准
第一档（1—3分） 未达到总体要求。 ．未结合材料； ．内容混乱，
缺乏条理性； ．语言运用差，
错误很多， 严重影响观点表达。
第二档（4—7分） 未达到总体要求。 ．未有效结合材料； ．内容松散，
Tomorrow’ value consists in how we live in the moment. Time passes by like the wind blowing through the leaves,which doesn’t leave any traces. What we should do is to fly our dreams and let it soar with the wind. Time, once lost, never will it be found again.Only by cherishing the present,can we make a difference to the future.
2. Our efforts today lead to tomorrow’s success. Our efforts today _c_o_n_tr_i_b_u_te_t_o_ tomorrow’s success. Our efforts today ___re_s_u_lt_i_n___ tomorrow’s success
英语作文的常用优化技巧
二. 善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。
1. It is ＋ n. / adj. ＋ for/ of sb to do sth
2. There be 句型及其变体 There is no denying that… There seems to be… There exists…
人们对此问题观点各不相同。 People have different opinions on this issue.
It is… that/ who…
英语作文的常用优化技巧
三. 运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。
1.肯定用否定表达
I’m very tired.
I’m _n_o_t_a_l_it_tl_e_ tired.
2.否定用肯定表达
His performance is not satisfactory.
His performance is __fa_r_f_r_o_m_ satisfactory. 3.最高级用比较级表达
Health is the most important.
Nothing is more important than health.
找出错误，指出不足
Tomorrow will better? No one really knows. Yesterday brings us memories. We can only have today.
Presentation & Evaluation
Present & Evaluate the improved composition
展示并评价优化后的作文
The Improved Version of the Composition
Yesterday brings us after-taste. No one really knows whether tomorrow will be better. Consequently, what we can only confirm is today.
There _ex_i_s_t different opinions on this issue among people.
3. 祈使句 ＋ and/ or ＋ 一般将来时 4. 倒装句
By no means ＋ 部分倒装 Only by doing… ＋ 部分倒装
Only in this way ＋ 部分倒装 5. 强调句型
要求：⑴ 就此材料发表你的看法； ⑵ 紧扣材料，有明确的观点； ⑶ 词数不少于60。
学生原作：
Tomorrow will better? No one really knows. Yesterday brings us memories. We can only have today.
We live in the moment to make tomorrow nice. Time passing by, it like the wind blow through the leaves. It doesn’t leave any signs.We want our dreams to fly and let it go with the wind. Once time is losing, it will never be found again. By using time well, we can have a beautiful future.
3.单句提升
She is a famous singer. (Try to express its certainty.)
There’s no doubt that she is a famous singer. Undoubtedly, she is a famous singer. No one can deny the fact that she is a famous singer. There’s no denying that she is a famous singer. It goes without saying that she is a famous singer. It is universally acknowledged that she is a famous singer.
昨天已成追忆，明天还很神秘。 现在是个礼物，它称之为今天。
写作：请结合材料，按要求用英语写作（15分）
Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. But today is a gift. That is why it is called the present!
观点明确； ．内容连贯，
条理清晰； ．语言运用得体，
词汇丰富， 几乎没有语言错误。
英语作文的常用优化技巧
一. 活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。 二. 善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。 三. 运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。 四. 使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。 五. 妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。
英语作文的常用优化技巧
Learn from yesterday, live for today, hope for tomorrow, and you’ll lead a magic life you have never imagined.
英语作文的常用优化技巧
一. 活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。 二. 善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。 三. 使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。 四. 运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。 五. 妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。
英语作文的常用优化技巧
五. 妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。
将下列句子的状语从句改为非谓作状语：
best gift that God present to you. Tomorrow is a mystery,
which means that your future is unpredictable. As far as I’m
concerned, the only thing we can make good use of is present. A memorable yesterday always comes from a valuable
today. If you can take full advantage of your present to fight for your future, you will gain an enviable memory to recall in the rest of your life. Therefore, what we ought to bear in mind is that only by cherishing present are we able to create promising future.
We want our dreams to fly and let it go with the wind. Once time is losing, it will never be found again. By using time well, we can have a beautiful future.
条理性较差； ．语言运用较差，
错误较多， 但基本能表达观点。
重庆市高考英语书面表达评分标准
第三档（8—11分） 基本达到总体要求。 ．有效结合材料，
观点基本明确； ．内容基本连贯，
有一定的条理性； ．语言运用基本得体，
有少量错误， 但能表达观点。
第四档（12—15分） 很好地达到总体要求。 ．有效结合材料，
It is of great significance to take full advantage of today to change tomorrow into limitless possibilities.
A Composition from Another Student Yesterday is the best memory you have and present is the
我们要非常重视英语作文原因是英语作文对我们的考试成绩有着极大影响
高考英语作文优化
重庆市实验中学 刘志强
Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a
mystery. But today is a gift. That is why it is
called tod use of today. Let’s come true our dream.
小组活动
（四人一组，优化原作） Tomorrow will better? No one really knows. Yesterday brings us memories. We can only have today. We live in the moment to make tomorrow nice. Time passing by, it like the wind blow through the leaves. It doesn’t leave any signs. We want our dreams to fly and let it go with the wind. Once time is losing, it will never be found again. By using time well, we can have a beautiful future. Let’s make good use of today. Let’s come true our dream.
一. 活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。
1.Applying advanced vocabulary is very helpful to improving our English compositions. Applying advanced vocabulary _i_s_o_f_g_r_e_a_t _h_e_lp_ to improving our English compositions.
Let’s make good use of today. Let’s come true our dream.
重庆市高考英语书面表达评分标准
第一档（1—3分） 未达到总体要求。 ．未结合材料； ．内容混乱，
缺乏条理性； ．语言运用差，
错误很多， 严重影响观点表达。
第二档（4—7分） 未达到总体要求。 ．未有效结合材料； ．内容松散，
Tomorrow’ value consists in how we live in the moment. Time passes by like the wind blowing through the leaves,which doesn’t leave any traces. What we should do is to fly our dreams and let it soar with the wind. Time, once lost, never will it be found again.Only by cherishing the present,can we make a difference to the future.
2. Our efforts today lead to tomorrow’s success. Our efforts today _c_o_n_tr_i_b_u_te_t_o_ tomorrow’s success. Our efforts today ___re_s_u_lt_i_n___ tomorrow’s success
英语作文的常用优化技巧
二. 善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。
1. It is ＋ n. / adj. ＋ for/ of sb to do sth
2. There be 句型及其变体 There is no denying that… There seems to be… There exists…
人们对此问题观点各不相同。 People have different opinions on this issue.
It is… that/ who…
英语作文的常用优化技巧
三. 运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。
1.肯定用否定表达
I’m very tired.
I’m _n_o_t_a_l_it_tl_e_ tired.
2.否定用肯定表达
His performance is not satisfactory.
His performance is __fa_r_f_r_o_m_ satisfactory. 3.最高级用比较级表达
Health is the most important.
Nothing is more important than health.
找出错误，指出不足
Tomorrow will better? No one really knows. Yesterday brings us memories. We can only have today.
Presentation & Evaluation
Present & Evaluate the improved composition
展示并评价优化后的作文
The Improved Version of the Composition
Yesterday brings us after-taste. No one really knows whether tomorrow will be better. Consequently, what we can only confirm is today.
There _ex_i_s_t different opinions on this issue among people.
3. 祈使句 ＋ and/ or ＋ 一般将来时 4. 倒装句
By no means ＋ 部分倒装 Only by doing… ＋ 部分倒装
Only in this way ＋ 部分倒装 5. 强调句型
要求：⑴ 就此材料发表你的看法； ⑵ 紧扣材料，有明确的观点； ⑶ 词数不少于60。
学生原作：
Tomorrow will better? No one really knows. Yesterday brings us memories. We can only have today.
We live in the moment to make tomorrow nice. Time passing by, it like the wind blow through the leaves. It doesn’t leave any signs.We want our dreams to fly and let it go with the wind. Once time is losing, it will never be found again. By using time well, we can have a beautiful future.
3.单句提升
She is a famous singer. (Try to express its certainty.)
There’s no doubt that she is a famous singer. Undoubtedly, she is a famous singer. No one can deny the fact that she is a famous singer. There’s no denying that she is a famous singer. It goes without saying that she is a famous singer. It is universally acknowledged that she is a famous singer.
昨天已成追忆，明天还很神秘。 现在是个礼物，它称之为今天。
写作：请结合材料，按要求用英语写作（15分）
Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. But today is a gift. That is why it is called the present!
观点明确； ．内容连贯，
条理清晰； ．语言运用得体，
词汇丰富， 几乎没有语言错误。
英语作文的常用优化技巧
一. 活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。 二. 善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。 三. 运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。 四. 使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。 五. 妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。
英语作文的常用优化技巧
Learn from yesterday, live for today, hope for tomorrow, and you’ll lead a magic life you have never imagined.
英语作文的常用优化技巧
一. 活用高级词汇，注重单句提升。 二. 善用经典句型，避免单调沉闷。 三. 使用三大从句，突显逻辑层次。 四. 运用稀有表达，深化句式变化。 五. 妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。
英语作文的常用优化技巧
五. 妙用非谓动词，提升句子形象。
将下列句子的状语从句改为非谓作状语：
best gift that God present to you. Tomorrow is a mystery,
which means that your future is unpredictable. As far as I’m
concerned, the only thing we can make good use of is present. A memorable yesterday always comes from a valuable
today. If you can take full advantage of your present to fight for your future, you will gain an enviable memory to recall in the rest of your life. Therefore, what we ought to bear in mind is that only by cherishing present are we able to create promising future.