读后续写新题05：个人成长类：艺术夏令营(2024广州二模英语)-【冲刺2024高考】

【冲刺2024高考】高中英语读后续写
（创新话题命题类）新题速递05
原文解读+情节构建+范文及解读+语言赏析总结
2024年4月广州二模高三英语读后续写
创新点：个人成长类、社恐女孩蜕变、艺术夏令营
阅读下面材料，依据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

This Friday brought a mix of emotions— both excitement and disappointment— all because of a flyer from school.
When I got home, Mum saw the flyer in my hand and asked, “What's this?”
“A flyer for a five-day art camp,” I explained. “But Emily can't go.”
“Would you like to attend?”Mum asked. “You've always loved art.” Her words reminded me of what Emily had said earlier: “Tessa, you're the real artist. My brother thought the roses I painted were rocket ships.”I sighed. Mum patted my back. She knew I had a hard time jumping into something with no familiar faces around. “Maybe next year.”
“Maybe,” I echoed. Then I told Mum I wanted to go outside to draw the Westons' pine tree( 松树). She nodded with an encouraging smile.
As I walked into the bright sunshine, I couldn't help but think about the art camp.
I wished I felt a little bit braver.Emily could make friends with a whole bus of kids in ten minutes, but my stomach felt like a little boat tossed in a heavy storm when I was surrounded by strangers... By the time I started drawing, I had made up my mind to forget about the art camp.
I began by drawing the pine tree's strong and straight trunk, and then added the beautiful branches, making sure the upper ones lifted gently towards the sun. Lost in my work, I jumped when I heard Mr. Weston speak up, “You’ve done a great job
showing the strength of that tree on paper.”
“Thanks,” I smiled, glancing up.
As I drew the needles to the branches, Mr. Weston told me something I never knew about pines: If you plant the root ball too deep, the tree dies. Their roots grow out, not down—to get enough water and grow tall.
“You have a good eye, Tessa.”With these words, Mr. Weston nodded goodbye.
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Paragraph 1:His words made me pause and think.
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第一部分原文解读
1.主要人物:
I(Tessa) 宠爱艺术但不擅长社交，可怕处于生疏人身边
Emily 我的伴侣，擅长社交
Mum 支持鼓舞我
Mr. Weston我的邻历，对我的画作赐予了表扬
2.原文情节:
我想要参与一个美术夏令营，但是我的伴侣Emily不去，而我不擅长于处在没有生疏的人的环境，内心绝望。

妈妈劝慰我后，我去外面画Weston家的松树。

在外面我想起了美术夏令营，我期望自己能再英勇一点。

Emily擅长社交，而我可怕处于生疏人身边。

我开头画画，下定决心忘掉艺术夏令营。

邻居Mr.Weston 到来，表扬了我，说我表现出了树的力气。

我很快活。

然后Mr.Weston告知了我一些我从来不知道的关于松树的学问并再次表扬了我，然后点头道别。

3.主题
原文的主题是关于仆人公面对挑战和恐惊，通过艺术和他人的鼓舞找到自信的故事。

4.情感
原文中仆人公的情感经受了从绝望、迟疑到接受鼓舞、自我反思的过程。

其次部分情节构建
第一段: His words made me pause and think.
由第一段首句内容“他的话让我思考。

”可知第一段中确定需要写到“我思考的内容是什么，思考之后悟出了什么道理”，再依据正能量原则和其次段首句内容“其次周星期一，我报名参与美术夏令营”可知，在第一段中“我”通过思考，打算了要去参与美术夏令营。

①我一边看着我的画，一边思考Mr. Weston所说的话。

(心理，神态)
②看到画里的树向上的树干和向外生长的根，我悟了。

(动作)
③我原来的绝望难过消逝了，内心布满了士气。

(心理)
④这时，我下定决心要自己去参与夏令营。

(心理，神态)
⑤我回到家告知妈妈我的打算，妈妈傲慢，欣慰。

(动作，神态)
其次段: The next Monday, I signed up for the camp.
表明仆人公最终打算参与夏令营。

这里可以描写仆人公参与夏令营的过程，包括与其他孩子的互动、艺术创作的挑战以及个人成长的经受。

①到了夏令营开头的这一天，身边都是生疏的面孔。

(动作，心理)
②我鼓起士气与大家沟通。

(心理，动作）
③我为自己转变感到快活。

(心理)
④这5天的美术夏令营我学到了很多绘画的技术，而且我还克服了自己的恐惊，和大家和谐相处。

⑤主题升华。

(应当提到pine tree)
第三部分范文
参考范文1
His words made me pause and think. As I looked at the drawing of the pine tree, I realized that I had captured its strength and beauty just as Mr. Weston had described. It made me wonder if I could do the same with my art at the camp. I thought about how I had always admired Emily's ability to make friends easily, but maybe it was time for me to step out of my comfort zone and try something new. I decided to take a chance and sign up for the art camp, even if it meant facing my fears of being around strangers.
The next Monday, I signed up for the camp. I was nervous but excited at the same time. As I walked into the camp on the first day, I was greeted by a group of friendly faces who were eager to learn and create. Over the next five days, I was amazed at how much I learned and how much my art improved. I also made some new friends who shared my passion for art. It was a challenging but rewarding experience, and I was grateful for Mr. Weston's encouragement that had inspired me to take this step.By the end of the camp, I felt more confident in my abilities and excited to continue pursuing my love for art.
参考范文2
His words made me pause and think. As I reflected on Mr. Weston's words, the analogy of pine roots growing out, not down, struck a chord with me deeply. Perhaps I could learn something valuable from stepping beyond my comfort zone, just like the tree's need to spread its roots to grow tall. Surprisingly, even in the absence of my best friend, the idea of the art camp now seemed so appealing. Fueled by this newfound understanding, I eagerly shared my insights with Mum, who listened attentively as I
poured out my thoughts. With her approving nod and encouraging gaze, I felt a surge of determination and confidence to embrace the camp as an opportunity for artistic exploration and growth.
The next Monday, I signed up for the camp. As I handed in my registration form, the initial disappointment I felt gradually gave way to a thrilling sense of anticipation, fueled by the countless possibilities awaiting me. Throughout the camp, I immersed myself in interactive workshops, eagerly absorbing new techniques and connecting with fellow art enthusiasts like me. It turned out that the strangers I was initially afraid of were already my friends. From this experience, I realized that embracing unfamiliarity and conquering fears can pave the way for remarkable personal growth and opportunities. The towering pine tree in the Westons’ yard serves as a constant reminder that the strongest growth often springs from venturing into the unknown world.
第四部分语言赏析总结
主题升华
结尾主旨升华：我的成长和蜕变
1.写法一:场景复现，对比突出个人转变
After the camp ended, I returned to Mr. Weston's yard again, to visit my old friend - the pine tree. There it stood, tall and straight, just as strong and green as ever. But I had changed, from a timid person to a more confident and braver one. Once again, I felt a deep resonance with the pine tree - growing out, not down, to flourish beautifully.
2.写法二:假如不是，排比写个人蜕变
Had it not been for this experience, I would never have known that I was capable of pursuing my artistic dream independently, integrating myself into an unfamiliar group, and forging meaningful connections with strangers. It was nothing short of a miracle! And of course, it was Mr. Weston's guidance, Emily's and Mom's encouragement, and more significantly, the pine tree's illumination that brought this miracle in my life.
3.写法三，拉长时间线，回忆当时vs现在的蜕变
Many years later, my thoughts still frequently drift back to the afternoon when I sat in Mr.Weston's yard, thoroughly observing his strong pine tree. Now, as a professional painter, I find myself fluent and confident when presenting my artwork and introducing myself, effortlessly forming connections wherever I go. And it all traces back to that life-changing experience, where I learned the power of growing out to embrace the world, not down, from the pine tree.。