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In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
题目翻译
在当今世界，快速工作并且愿意冒犯错的风险比慢速工作且确信一切正确更加重要。

审题关键词
Work quickly, Risk making mistakes, Work slowly, Everything is correct
论证分析
正: Working slowly and carefully is a requisite part of life, especially when one's decisions can impact one's own life and the lives of others in a significant way.
反： At the same time, working quickly is necessary on the way to success.
范文
Modern technological development has made our lives faster than ever before. Under this circumstance, people nowadays tend to live with a faster pace, and are now more concerned about efficiency. As a result, doing things slowly and making almost everything correctly seems to be sort of out of date. In a modern society, people should work at a higher speed and risk taking mistakes.
As I have mentioned in the first paragraph, the development of modern technology has made our life faster than ever before. With the assistance of modern techniques, we consequently should work faster than ever before. For instance, in the old days, people made their own clothes by hand. But now, machines in factories have made sewing and weaving quite speedy and of great quality. We do not have to waste any time doing cumbersome works because of modern technology. Therefore, why should we insist on working at a slow pace instead of enjoying the convenience that is brought by technology?
Another important aspect is that now we are living in a society that is developing rapidly. To meet the rapid change and improvement, all of us need to improve our own efficiency. Almost every factory wants to increase its productivity and almost all employers want employees to generate greater value within the time limit. Nobody wants to be a loser in the society, so the only way to keep pace with the whole society is to accelerate, which is, working faster.
That said, some people may counter that people may face greater risks of making mistakes. Admittedly, it is highly possible for us to make mistakes when working at a high speed. But in fact, we human beings always make mistakes, so even if we work as slowly and carefully as possible, we still risk making errors. However, by taking the advantage of modern technology and high self-efficiency, we can do our work more precisely than ever before.
All in all, in today’s world, people should work at a higher speed. It is so important that everyone in this modern society should embrace it. It is a general tendency of our world.
满分要素剖析
语言表达
本文的句式结构多样，富于变化。

既有传统的陈述句，也有反问句和设问句。

用多种方式证明观点，增强了文章的语气。

而用词方面，作者没有刻意追求高难的词汇，力求准确。

Therefore, why should we insist on working at a slow pace instead of enjoying the convenience that is brought by technology? 本句的亮点在于使用了反问的句式。

Why开头的反问句让读者印象更深刻，气势更强烈。

Admittedly, it is highly possible for us to make mistakes when working at a high speed. Admittedly表示“诚然”，是让步的经典词语。

也可以在段首使用，从侧面证明自己的观点。

It is highly possible that是表示可能性的句式。

相似的有it is probable that…/maybe…/there is a possibility that…等等。

逻辑结构
本文总体采取了总分总的结构。

首段提出观点，我们应该注重效率。

中间两段并列，即人们生活节奏快和社会发展很快的角度，分别证明了观点。

亮点在于第三个中间段。

这一段没有和前两段进行并列，而是形成了对比，从相反的角度侧面证明了总论点。

最后进行总结。