高中英语书面表达 咨询信

The ad reads that there are certain places to visit and I wonder if some time is set aside for shopping between the gaps of the destinations. What I want to figure out more clearly is the price issue. Since 45 pounds is sort of expensive for us students. I am wondering if the entrance fees and lunch are included or there is a special offer for the students . On top of that, I would be grateful if you could tell me the time we possibly return so that I can schedule my time more properly.
I am concerned ____________________________________.
改错：
1. Is the entrance fees and lunch contained?
2. I am Li Hua, who are having a language course in Oxford.
I am Li Hua, a student having a language training course in Oxford. (巧用非谓语)
词汇表达
1) Your advertisement about a tour to London catches my eye.
2) I’m writing to make an enquiry about some information concerning the time and the price.
Here are my questions. First of all, I wonder if the entrance fees and lunch are included in the price. Also, I’d like to know if there is shopping time set aside because I want to buy some gifts for m friends. In addition, could you please tell me the time to return? It can help me plan my schedule properly. Since the price is a great deal to a student like me, I will appreciate it if you can offer a discount for students.
Your prompt reply at your earliest convenience will be highly appreciated.
I am Li Hua. Taking part in the short-term language learning in Oxford. I am planning to pay a visit to London on Sunday. It is your advertisement that appeals to me. With interest, I would appreciate it if I could get further information about it.
改错：
10. I’d like to know when is the shopping time during the tour.
My name is Li Hua and I am doing a short-term language training in Oxford. Your ad online is such an appeal to me that I am writing to see if it is possible for you to provide me with more information concerning the day tour to London.
3) I would like to know about such information as the time and the price.
4) I’m afraid some information is not explicit enough for me/ is ambiguous.
5) Is there any chance that we could do some shopping during the trip?
1）写信的原因：想知道更多去伦敦旅游的信息 2）对箭头所指内容进行提问 3）表达感谢
应注意的问题：
1.写咨询信的语气和措辞。 （如：just tell me…, you say that …,类似表达不礼貌） 2. 不要简单地提完问题就算了，可根据内容要点适当增加细节； 3. 注意问题和从句的语序不一样。 When will we leave? I wonder when we will leave.
lunch is included. (巧用复合句) 2. I would like to know the time to return.
What I would like to know is the time to return. (巧用复合句) 3. I am Li Hua. I am having a language training course in Oxford.
注意：1．词数100左右，信的格式已为你写好。
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2．可根据内容要点适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 3．参考词汇：牛津--Oxford 费用—fee
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一、审题
1. 文体：咨询信 2. 主要时态：一般时，将来时 3. 主要人称：第一人称 （ I ） 和第二人称（ you ） 4. 写作要点 （分成三段）：
二、语言表达
1. 参加课程
take / attend a language training course. 2. 计划去伦敦旅游
I’m planning a tour to London. 3. 是否有购物时间
Is there any time for shopping during the trip? 4. 费用是否包括入场费和午餐
What I want to know is _____________________________. 3. Does the price include lunch?
Could you tell me __________________________________？ 4. When can we return?
3. During the visiting, if we have time for shopping?
4. The ad is appeal to me.
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5. The price is too expensive for me. 6. I’d like to know do we have shopping time. 7. I really wander about the time to return in order to make a better plan for Sunday. 8. Have the entrance fees included in the price already? 9. I want to know whether it has a prize for students and how much do the entrance fees cost?
Is it a package tour including lunch and all the entrance
fees? 5. 学生是否有折扣
I wonder whether students can have a discount / enjoy a
lower price.
润色句子：
1. I want to know whether lunch is included One thing that I’m confused about is whether
6) While planning the tour, I need to take into account the time to return, which is not mentioned in the ad.
问句和从句： 1. Do we have time for shopping?
I wonder _________________________________. 2. Is it the price for students?
Your prompt attention to this letter will be highly appreciated.
Yours sincerely,
XXX
假设你是李华，正在英国牛津参加短期语言培训，计划 星期天去伦敦旅游。互联网上的一则广告引起了你的注意， 但一些具体信息不明确（箭头所指内容）。以下是该则广告 的信息。 请给该旅行社发一封电子邮件，询问有关情况。
Your prompt attention will be highly appreciated. I am looking forward to your reply.
I am Li Hua, a student in the short-term language training class in Oxford. Luckily enough I am taking a trip to London this Sunday while your ad on the Internet hold quite an appeal for me. So I am writing to ask for further information about the tour.
First, since I have a thirst for shopping for some antiques, I would like to know whether there is a shopping time for us. In addition, are the entrance fees and lunch included in the 45 pounds? Apart from these, it is of great help to inform me of the time to return, so that I can plan my schedule well. After all, not having too much money as a student I wonder if there is a discount for students.
咨询信
咨询信结构：
Dear ______ , I am ______（自我介绍）. I am writing to see if it is
possible for you to provide me with information regarding ______（要询问的内容）.
First of all, ______（第一个问题）? Secondly, ______ （第二个问题）? Thirdly, ______（第三个问题）? I would also like to inquire ______（其他问题）.