高考英语读后续写难点突破——读后续写制高点
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Usually, I am the calm one in the relationship, but my husband surprised me with his calmness. This did not comfort me; in fact, it heightened my fear. As we walked, I asked my husband to call for help, but there was no cell-phone signal in this isolated (偏僻 的) area.
潍坊市高中英语优Βιβλιοθήκη 优培之高难点突破讲座执教（按出场顺序） 张勇辉老师、何 昆老师（潍坊一中） 代玉萍老师（昌邑文山中学） 孙晓璇老师（寿光一中） 展素华老师（高密一中） 李 杰老师（青州一中） 胡俊玲老师、张峭林老师（潍坊一中）
讲座指导 任 伟老师（潍坊市教科院） 齐爱美老师（昌邑市教研中心）
总策划 潍坊市教育科学研究院
------读后续写提升特训小专题
时间：2020年4月
潍坊市高中英语优生优培之高难点突破
------读后写提升特训小专题
Contents
Part I General remarks：读后续写制高点 Part II Useful guidelines：读后续写语言提升的方法和技巧
一. 如何使语言生动形象，具有画面感？（词汇篇） 二. 如何避免刻意使用高级复杂句式？（句式篇） 三. 如何衔接？（衔接篇） 四. 如何结尾？（结尾篇）
第七档 （22-25分）
— 创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高； — 使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解； — 自然有效地使用了段落间，语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。
读后续写“制高点”
1.紧扣“一件事、文中人”
Part III Bonus tips：续写高分的诀窍
Part I General remarks
读后续写“制高点”
高考读后续写评分标准
评分时应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体为：
（1）续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度； （2）所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性； （3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
“How can I help you, little lady?” Robin's voice was joyful. “Hello, sir.” The little girl spoke almost in a whisper. She looked at Robin with her big brown eyes, and then slowly scanned the room in search of something special. Shyly she told him, “I'd like to buy a present, sir.” “Well, let's see,” Robin said. “who is this present for?” “My grandpa. It's for my grandpa. But I don't know what to get.” Robin began to make suggestions. “How about a pocket watch? It's in good condition.” The little girl didn't answer. She walked to the doorway and put her small hand on the door. She shook the door gently to ring the bell. Robin's face seemed to glow as he saw her smiling with excitement. “This is just right,” the little girl said. “Momma says my grandpa loves music.” Just then, Robin's expression changed. Fearful of breaking the little girl's heart, he told her, “I'm sorry, missy. That's not for sale. Maybe your grandpa would like this little radio.” The girl looked at the radio, bowed her head, and sadly sighed, “No, I don't think so.” In an effort to help her understand, Robin told her that the bell had been his only companion, for the rest of his family were all gone now, except for his estranged (疏远的) daughter whom he had not seen for nearly a decade.
Paragraph 1: With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him. Paragraph 2: Later that evening when Robin was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ring
The trail was marked as an easy one-kilometer hike, yet we were already walking a long distance. Our lightheartedness stopped when we came out into a clearing and saw a parking lot without our rental car in it. As my eyes scanned the surroundings, nothing looked familiar. My heart raced. I realized we were lost in a national park that did not officially open for another week.
二 “宜”
2.前呼后应，不留“遗憾”
1. 絮絮叨叨，记流水账
三 “忌”
2. 堆砌辞藻，狂显摆
3. 空发议论，无病呻吟
Example 1: A Christmas gift
It was Christmas Day. Robin was working alone fixing an old lantern in the back room when he heard the ringing of his bell on the shop door. The bell, which produced a uniquely pleasant sound, had been in Robin's family for over a hundred years. He valued it dearly and enjoyed sharing its song with all who came to his shop. Although the bell was hung on the inside of the main door, Robin had tied a wire to the screen door so that it would ring whether the inner door was open or not. Hearing the bell ring, he left the back room to greet his customer.
It was awfully quiet except for our footsteps hitting the road, and my heavy breathing. My husband suggested we conserve energy and walk slower. With each step on the road, my feet and thighs hurt while my mind raced with thoughts about people who got lost in the Canadian woods for days.
Example 2: 2020年4月高三一模
Deep in the forest, my husband and I had fun climbing over and crawling under the downed trees that blocked the dirt path before us. It was May, yet we walked up a snow-covered hill. When we noticed our jeans were wet up to our knees, it did not dampen our spirits. Not once did we say, “Let’s turn around.” This was our vacation, and we were on an adventure. Little did we know this was the beginning of many more surprises.
Paragraph 1： My husband suddenly spotted a small building on a hill in the distance.
Paragraph 2： Just then, a friendly woman appeared, saying, “Hello.”
二“宜”
1 紧扣“一件事、文中人” ；
A Christmas gift
Robin treasured the bell.
Why did the little girl use “Momma says”? Where was her grandpa?
When a little girl wanted to buy the bell for her grandpa (because “Momma says my
My vision sharpened. I noticed everything around me: the trees, rocks and snow. I thought we could eat the snow on the ground in case we needed water. For the first time in my life, I was ready and willing to get a ride, but we did not meet with a single car on the road. Silently, I prayed multiple times. We focused on each other, made joint decisions and connected through gratitude. We managed to stay on the main road and walked straight on.
grandpa loves music.”), Robin shared the reason for his love/ affection for the bell.
潍坊市高中英语优Βιβλιοθήκη 优培之高难点突破讲座执教（按出场顺序） 张勇辉老师、何 昆老师（潍坊一中） 代玉萍老师（昌邑文山中学） 孙晓璇老师（寿光一中） 展素华老师（高密一中） 李 杰老师（青州一中） 胡俊玲老师、张峭林老师（潍坊一中）
讲座指导 任 伟老师（潍坊市教科院） 齐爱美老师（昌邑市教研中心）
总策划 潍坊市教育科学研究院
------读后续写提升特训小专题
时间：2020年4月
潍坊市高中英语优生优培之高难点突破
------读后写提升特训小专题
Contents
Part I General remarks：读后续写制高点 Part II Useful guidelines：读后续写语言提升的方法和技巧
一. 如何使语言生动形象，具有画面感？（词汇篇） 二. 如何避免刻意使用高级复杂句式？（句式篇） 三. 如何衔接？（衔接篇） 四. 如何结尾？（结尾篇）
第七档 （22-25分）
— 创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高； — 使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解； — 自然有效地使用了段落间，语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。
读后续写“制高点”
1.紧扣“一件事、文中人”
Part III Bonus tips：续写高分的诀窍
Part I General remarks
读后续写“制高点”
高考读后续写评分标准
评分时应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体为：
（1）续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度； （2）所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性； （3）上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
“How can I help you, little lady?” Robin's voice was joyful. “Hello, sir.” The little girl spoke almost in a whisper. She looked at Robin with her big brown eyes, and then slowly scanned the room in search of something special. Shyly she told him, “I'd like to buy a present, sir.” “Well, let's see,” Robin said. “who is this present for?” “My grandpa. It's for my grandpa. But I don't know what to get.” Robin began to make suggestions. “How about a pocket watch? It's in good condition.” The little girl didn't answer. She walked to the doorway and put her small hand on the door. She shook the door gently to ring the bell. Robin's face seemed to glow as he saw her smiling with excitement. “This is just right,” the little girl said. “Momma says my grandpa loves music.” Just then, Robin's expression changed. Fearful of breaking the little girl's heart, he told her, “I'm sorry, missy. That's not for sale. Maybe your grandpa would like this little radio.” The girl looked at the radio, bowed her head, and sadly sighed, “No, I don't think so.” In an effort to help her understand, Robin told her that the bell had been his only companion, for the rest of his family were all gone now, except for his estranged (疏远的) daughter whom he had not seen for nearly a decade.
Paragraph 1: With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him. Paragraph 2: Later that evening when Robin was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ring
The trail was marked as an easy one-kilometer hike, yet we were already walking a long distance. Our lightheartedness stopped when we came out into a clearing and saw a parking lot without our rental car in it. As my eyes scanned the surroundings, nothing looked familiar. My heart raced. I realized we were lost in a national park that did not officially open for another week.
二 “宜”
2.前呼后应，不留“遗憾”
1. 絮絮叨叨，记流水账
三 “忌”
2. 堆砌辞藻，狂显摆
3. 空发议论，无病呻吟
Example 1: A Christmas gift
It was Christmas Day. Robin was working alone fixing an old lantern in the back room when he heard the ringing of his bell on the shop door. The bell, which produced a uniquely pleasant sound, had been in Robin's family for over a hundred years. He valued it dearly and enjoyed sharing its song with all who came to his shop. Although the bell was hung on the inside of the main door, Robin had tied a wire to the screen door so that it would ring whether the inner door was open or not. Hearing the bell ring, he left the back room to greet his customer.
It was awfully quiet except for our footsteps hitting the road, and my heavy breathing. My husband suggested we conserve energy and walk slower. With each step on the road, my feet and thighs hurt while my mind raced with thoughts about people who got lost in the Canadian woods for days.
Example 2: 2020年4月高三一模
Deep in the forest, my husband and I had fun climbing over and crawling under the downed trees that blocked the dirt path before us. It was May, yet we walked up a snow-covered hill. When we noticed our jeans were wet up to our knees, it did not dampen our spirits. Not once did we say, “Let’s turn around.” This was our vacation, and we were on an adventure. Little did we know this was the beginning of many more surprises.
Paragraph 1： My husband suddenly spotted a small building on a hill in the distance.
Paragraph 2： Just then, a friendly woman appeared, saying, “Hello.”
二“宜”
1 紧扣“一件事、文中人” ；
A Christmas gift
Robin treasured the bell.
Why did the little girl use “Momma says”? Where was her grandpa?
When a little girl wanted to buy the bell for her grandpa (because “Momma says my
My vision sharpened. I noticed everything around me: the trees, rocks and snow. I thought we could eat the snow on the ground in case we needed water. For the first time in my life, I was ready and willing to get a ride, but we did not meet with a single car on the road. Silently, I prayed multiple times. We focused on each other, made joint decisions and connected through gratitude. We managed to stay on the main road and walked straight on.
grandpa loves music.”), Robin shared the reason for his love/ affection for the bell.