高考英语通用版二轮专题复习三维课件：题型六+书面表达+第2讲+力避高级表达中的“低级错误”别“伤了大雅”

transportation rather than cars whenever it possible. 去掉 whenever 后的 it 或 possible 前加 is
6．It was in the park where I came across my previous
English teacher.
二、易错练通——典题精选，练中品悟
Ⅰ.单句改错
1．I have a good command of English, it is an advantage when
applying for a job like this.
it→which 或 it 前加 and
2．No one can deny the fact the environment is getting polluted
判为四档作文，得分18分
阅卷人升格作文
Dear Lucy， I’m writing to tell you that we’ll go to the local nursing home
next Saturday for the Double Ninth Festival, which is the day for us to show respect for the elderly.I’m wondering whether or not you would like to go with us.
much for me.
if 前加 it
9．Only in this way people from all over the world
communicate easily and effectively.
way 后加 can
10．With the College Entrance Examination comes near,
I’m worried about what my life will be like as we may go to different universities.comes→coming 或 With→As
Ⅱ.习作纠错 下面三篇学生习作中都运用了一些高级句式，而且都
出现了一些错误，请找出其中的错误并加以改正。
注意：1．词数 100 左右；开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Wang Hui， I was sorry to hear that you had trouble in your studies.
Yours， Li Hua
[学生习作] Dear Wang Hui，
Thank you very much for your attention!
[学生习作] Good morning, everyone! Recently a survey has been
done in our school about whether it is necessary to set aside a period in each school day for individual study.
1．(2017·淄博市模拟)假定你是李华。你的好朋友王辉本学期去了 加拿大留学，在给你的信中倾诉了他遇到的困难：上课听不懂 老师英语授课、没有朋友、压力大等，你决定给他一些建议。 请根据以下要点提示写一封回信。 要点提示：1．多记词汇，多阅读当地报纸等； 2．多参加活动，与同学们交朋友； 3．积极乐观，多加强体育锻炼等有助于缓解压力。
As you know it, warmth and care is elderly people need.So besides tasty dumplings and cakes, we decide to organize some wonderful singing and dancing programs for them, I believe it will make them happy.We should be back around 4 o’clock in the afternoon.
only exercise build up our body, but also it provides time for us to refresh our mind.Lastly, you can listen to some smoothing music, that will be a good way to improve your current depressed mood.
If you are able to join us, please let us know and we’ll wait for you at the school gate at 9 in the morning.
Looking forward to your reply. Yours， Li Hua
where→that
7．It is high time that both children and parents take action
to make small changes. take→took 或 take 前加 should
8．I would appreciate if you could take the trouble to do so
more and more seriously.
fact 后加 that
3．The reason is why smartphones nowadays can be used to
play mobile games and keep in touch with friends through
QQ and WeChat.
As you know, warmth and care is what elderly people need.So besides tasty dumplings and cakes, we decide to organize some wonderful singing and dancing programs for them, which I believe will make them happy.We should be back around 4 o’clock in the afternoon.
why→that
4．Every time when I see someone in need, I will spare no
effort to help him.
去掉 when
5．Firstly, it’s good to take buses or other means of public
第2讲
力避高级表达中的“低级错误”，别“伤了大雅”
在阅卷中，阅卷老师常为这样一类卷摇头叹息，无论是 从要点的呈现、表达的优美还是衔接的顺畅等方面来看该类 卷都近乎完美，应该给高分甚至满分，但偏偏有几处瑕疵给 本应完美的习作陡添了些许不和谐的音符，甚至有点刺眼， 从而影响了阅卷老师的好心情。阅卷老师为了稳妥起见，在 阅卷中尽量避免有争议卷的出现，会“惋惜”地扣掉一些分 数。因“低级错误”而影响高级得分，岂不遗憾！
判为五档作文，得分24分
阅卷人说：左栏文章应用了很多高级句式，如定语从 句、名词性从句和状语从句，应该算是一篇相当不错 的文章，但文章中出现的几处错误难免会让阅卷人略 生厌恶之感，因而评分也就会低一个档次。而右栏的 文章只改掉了左栏文章中的一些表达错误，其他未做 任何修饰，评分就由18分增加到24分，在1分压倒万 人的高考中，可谓字字千金。
According to the survey, more than half of the students feel beneficial to do so and 15 percent hold an opposite view.In addition, the rest seem to care little about it.
I hope all this information can benefit you. Yours， Li Hua
[我来纠错] 第六句： make→making 第八句： exercise 前加 does 第九句： that→which
2．(2017·合肥市质检)假定你是李华。你们学校准备在下学期 每天安排一节自习课。学校英语社团就此在学生中做了一 项调查。请你根据以下调查结果用英语写一篇发言稿。
内容包括：1．陈述调查结果； 2．谈谈你个人的观点及理由。
注意：1．词数 100 左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3．开头和结束语已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Good morning, everyone! Recently a survey has been done in our school about whether it is necessary to set aside a period in each school day for individual study.
I was sorry to hear that you had trouble in your studies.I would like to share some advice with you on how to study efficiently.
Firstly, you can talk with some close friends about your problems and ask for their help.This is an important way to deal with your problems directly.Secondly, try to study in a positive way.This will decrease your study pressure, make studying an easy job.Thirdly, spend time doing exercise.Not
If you will be able to join us, please let us know and we’ll wait for you at the school gate at 9 in the morning.
Looking forward toLeabharlann Baiduyour reply. Yours， Li Hua
As for me, the time for individual study helps us students in many ways.Firstly, the period will serve as an open opportunity to review that we’ve learned previously. Also, we can use this period to do our homework so that we have more time to preview the lessons.Moreover, we can turn to the teachers or classmates immediately when we encounter any problems of learning.Only by using our time more efficiently we become a better learner.
一、阅卷实录——他人之失，引以为戒
考生问题作文(选自2015年全国卷Ⅱ)
Dear Lucy， I’m writing to tell you that we’ll go to the local nursing home next
Saturday for the Double Ninth Festival, that is the day for us to show respect for the elderly.I’m wondering if or not you would like to go with us.