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雅思写作大作文范文赏析

雅思写作大作文范文赏析题目：In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour.What do you think are the causes of this?What solutions can you suggest?话题和题型分类教育类，原因对策型题目分析许多国家的学校在管理学生表现方面存在严重问题思路提示原因:文化习俗，传统习惯欠缺正确的教育理论学校利益与学生追求不一致学生的叛逆心理对策:教育者对学生的心理能够科学掌握校方积极听取学生诉求通过社会和传统文化来约束Sample AnswerPoor student behaviour seems to be an increasingly widespread problem. Many experts insist that it is because of the students’individual qualities, but others advocate that it is not so simple like that. As I see it, domestic education, classmates in school and the whole education environment are factors that contribute to this problem.（首段摆明观点: 学生不良行为的原因包括家庭教育、学校同学以及整个教育制度的影响）One very strong argument is that domestic education is not enough to regulate student behaviour. Many people are convinced that family is the first teacher for a child. A person’s temperament forms when he or she is young and the families’behaviour can be learnt by children easily. Thus if their families behave horribly, they may do so. One of the solution to theproblem lies with the families, who need to be more aware of the future consequences of spoiling their children. Perhaps parenting classes are needed to help them to do raise their children to be considerate of others and responsible individuals.（文章第二段论述导致学生不良行为的第一个原因）Another factor which must be taken into consideration is that school is also an environment for students to learn from each other. If a student always communicates and studies with his classmates, he can learn others’behaviours in a short time, including bad performance. Consequently, school environment cannot be neglected. High quality elementary schools could be established that would support families more in terms of raising the next generation.（文章第三段论述导致学生不良行为的第二个原因）Last but not least, the whole education environment of a nation is also crucial for student behaviour. Some students under great pressure may behave terribly. If education department lays a too heavy burden on students, they may be stressed out, give up studying and thus do something harmful. To solve this problem, the government should publish some guidance for students’school work which specifies students’leaning objectives and make some changes to alleviate burdens on students.（文章第四段，论述导致学生不良行为的第三个原因）From the above views, I hold the opinion that the terrible behaviour of the students is not only the responsibility of themselves, but also of other factors including family, classmates and education environment.（全文总结再次重申观点）满分要素剖析：语言表达本文没有刻意用长难句，使用动词不定式等使得语言更简洁明了，客观清晰的地表达了作者的观点。

雅思写作必备：剑六a类写作第三套分析

雅思写作必备：剑六A类写作第三套分析A类第三套分析(一)小作文WRITING TASK 1题目You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.WRITING TASK 1分析第一部分：（图表作文解析）参考译文：这是由考官所给出的一篇范文。

但请注意，它只是许多范文中的一个范例。

第一副图展示了蚕的一生的四个主要阶段。

首先，蚕会产卵。

每个卵通过十天会变成以桑叶为食的幼蚕。

六周后，幼蚕会在其身体附近吐出蚕茧。

大约三周后，成年蚕从这些茧中脱出。

生命至此又开始新的循环。

这些茧就是生产丝绸衣服的原材料。

一旦被选中，这些茧会在水中被煮沸，在退绕的过程中蚕线便被分离出来了。

每股线长约300—900米。

在编绕时，它们可以被缠绕，染色然后用来生产衣服。

总之，这两幅图显示了用蚕茧去生产丝绸衣服是一个非常简单的过程。

(二)大作文WRITING TASK 2题目Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs. Others disagree and think that the local country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.WRITING TASK 2分析（1）参考译文：近年来，在不同国家之间，许多人喜欢造访他国。

雅思写作8.5分：范文及案例分析

【雅思写作分：范文及案例分析】雅思写作除段落外，前后句子方面也会出现不连贯的地方。

下面咱们举一个关于男女在不同的家务活上所花费时间对比的统计图为例来讲明：Men spent most time (79 minutes per week) on gardening, but the largest part of women time was taken by caring babies. In contrast, men only took 4 minutes to look after the family elderly.上例中的第一句因为没有上文，所以咱们可以看出是比较男女在做家务方面的极值(最大值);在句式上第一句是进程，第二句是评价，句式不单调，而且中间有转折关系的连词but，逻辑关系明确;整个句子也比较长，一个大的并列句其中还有动名词的运用，所以写得很成功。

但第二句话虽然有in contrast 和前面相呼应，主语又转回men，这样这组句子是以写男性做家务的时间安排为主要内容，仍是以最大项或最小项等各个项目为线索来展开就混为一体，造成最终出现分析混乱、层次不清的问题：从学生的回访情况看，图表作文写成这样，即便单词和句法都没问题总分也会低于6分。

这也可能是很多考生反映的写作感觉不错但分数压得很低的原因之一。

解决办法一般建议把要比较的类别先写出来，如as to the item of.../ in 1995…/ for men…/ concerning the care of family old…等，然后再写某几项的类比或反比。

在比较时切忌不要把某一项目和年限或性别等的比较纵横交织在一路。

另外图表作文中还有这种情况：两个原始数据都写出来了，而且也用了转折或排序如but, next等信号词，但缺少对这两个数据的主观评价，读起来就显得凌乱，没有线索。

如：Cleaning cost women 70 minutes, but men only spent 50 minutes.这两个数据都是原始数据，没有对其评价的表达。

大连朗阁雅思培训— 雅思写作实例分析--拒绝跑题提高审题能力

大连朗阁雅思培训—雅思写作实例分析--拒绝跑题提高审题能力雅思写作考试时间紧迫，让每一位烤鸭神经紧绷，会发生很多受迫性失误。

这其中有单词拼写错误，单词用法错误，各种语法格式错误。

这些错误都很可怕而且致命，但是，在考官严重，最最严重的失误，就是动笔之初的跑题。

如果一旦被认定跑题，写作分手基本会被定义在6分一下。

所以，一起看看如果在实例中掌握正确的审题方法。

实例1Air transport is increasingly being used to export many types of fruits and vegetables to countries where those plants can’t grow or are out of season. Some say that it is a good thing,but others consider that such use of air transport can’t be justified. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 空运蔬菜和水果到不能生产此类蔬菜水果的国家或者到这些农产品已过季了的国家越来越司空见惯，有人赞同，有人反对，请评价双方论点并给出自己的看法。

题目分析：这道雅思真题表面是谈论蔬菜水果和空运的话题，实际上考生需要明白蔬菜、水果作为食品属于商品，商品的一个特点就是要满足不同层次的消费需要。

作为一种高成本的服务方式，空运满足的是高消费水平人群，而其他低成本运输服务方式满足的是普通消费水平人群。

明白了这一点，就很容易分别解释、评价两种对立论点，最后进行总结，提出自己看法。

常见跑题：很多经验不足的考生审题时思路往往不清楚，抓不住问题的主要和本质方面。

针对本题的飞机和蔬菜，有的考生可能会描写飞机运输的便利性，然后联想到飞机的发明、对人类的贡献等等和题目关联性很小的话题上，也可能会有考生花费很多篇幅讨论蔬菜和水果对人体健康的重要性，诸如此类的论点都属于严重跑题。

雅思写作之7分句段示例解析

雅思写作之7分句段示例解析Detailed description of crimes in newspaper and on television may have negative consequences and therefore should be restrictedTo what extent do you agree or disagree?【句子示例】With the aim of capturing public attention to boost circulation and viewer numbers, the media may sensationalize stories, such as providing graphic details about the brutality of a serial killer.【解析】1. 内容维度（Task Response）这个句子分析了媒体渲染新闻内容，增加细节犯罪描述的动机。

2. 文脉逻辑维度（Coherence and Cohesion）在这个句子之后，写作者可以进一步分析这个现象对于读者和观众的影响，比如引发公众恐慌。

写作者也可以分析报道犯罪细节的其它后果，比如增加受害者的痛苦，或者增加追捕困难。

3. 词汇维度（Lexical Resource）“capture”是动词，表示“引起（注意、想象、兴趣）”。

1“boost”是动词，表示“增强，提高”。

“circulation”是名词，表示“发行量”。

“sensationalize”是动词，表示“使……耸人听闻”。

“graphic”是形容词，表示“图片的”。

“brutality”是名词，表示“残暴”。

“serial”是形容词，表示“连续的”。

4. 语法和句型维度（Grammatical Range and Accuracy）本句的开始是一个目的状语with the aim of……，句子的主语是the media，谓语是may sensationalize，接着是宾语stories。

雅思写作高分范文和详解

雅思写作高分范文和详解为了让大家更好的备考雅思写作，今天和大家分享雅思写作高分范文和详解，希望能够帮助到大家，下面就和大家分享，来欣赏一下吧。

雅思写作高分范文和详解：旅游便利产生的利与弊雅思写作题目：Nowadays it is more convenient and easier for people to travel to other countries. Do you think the positive effects exceed the negative effects?雅思写作题目讲解：考生可以从两个方面进行讨论关于旅游便利产生的利与弊，段落布置可以按照4段分布。

第一部分介绍现在旅游便利的状况。

然后介绍旅游的好处。

例如丰富了人们的生活，扩大人的交际圈，刺激当地经济的发展等。

第三段可以说坏处。

可以说带来文化的冲突，使得不同民族，种族的人的偏见更激化。

最后结尾即可。

雅思写作范文：Never before was travelling to alien countries so convenient and popular as in this century. This phenomenon is partiallyattributed to improved technology and cheap flight tickets. Facing this travel frenzy, some are concerned that it will bring about too many side effects whilst others insist that is should be supported and maintained.以前从未到那样方便和受欢迎去国外。

这种现象部分归因于改进的技术和廉价的机票。

面对这种旅游热潮，一些人担心它会带来太多的副作用，而另一些人则坚持认为应该支持和维持这种趋势。

雅思考试写作作文主体段写法实例详解

雅思考试写作作文主体段写法实例详解雅思大作文一般分为开头段、主体段和论证段。

其中，开头段和论证段所占字数较少，而且写起来相对容易。

而主体段字数较多，写起来浮渣的多。

下面就来看下关于雅思写作的主体部分的详解，希望对大家有所帮助。

主体段写法实例详解我们以之前雅思考试的题为例子Some people believe that the country would benefit a lot from more young people entering into university; however, others think that the large number of people receiving college education only leads to graduate unemployment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.一些人认为，有很高比例的年轻人能上大学让国家收益巨大，而另一些人认为，这样只会导致毕业即失业。

讨论两种观点并给出你的观点。

STEP1 明确论点论点永远是支撑作文的灵魂所在，所以拿到作文之后，立刻让自己“站队”，挑选自己熟悉且支持的论点，根据论点来丰满论据。

假设在这篇作文中，我们支持【毕业即失业】，也就是反方论点。

STEP2 举例论证明确论点之后就用实例来进行举例，雅思作文举例的一个误区是考生要么就太空泛，要么就太具体，其实，一个明确的论点+适当论证就可以啦~为什么不能要太多大学生?1) 人太多——竞争性增强——学历要求越来越高2) 人太多——学校的课程设置不合理——学习内容和社会脱轨造成失业3) 重视分数而不重视能力——比如没有交流能力——造成工作困难烤鸭们如果能够在拿到考题的前几分钟这样进行一个逻辑梳理，那么论据说起来就不会很苍白啦~还记得环球君和大家分享过的，思考要全面吗?我们提了不少反方论点，但是别忘了要肯定正方+提出解决建议哦~1) 大学生人数增加——社会基本素质显著提升【肯定】2) 建议注重能力培养——人才建设更全面，社会发展更健康【建议】STEP3 用词丰满配合自己的观点，将一些高分词组/力所能及的高级词汇列举出来，便于自己在写作中顺利使用。

雅思写作6分范文及解析

我的托福雅思必过雅思写作6分范文及解析雅思写作6分范文及解析，帮助大家提高雅思写作成绩，轻松提分。

很多雅思考生表示雅思写作“我只要6分〞，其实写作最重要的一点就是不偏题，一起来看看雅思写作6分范文，欣赏一下别人都是怎么写文章的。

题目：WRITING TASK 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The graph below gives information about cinema attendancein Australia between 1990 and the present, with projections to .Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.雅思写作6分范文：The graph shows percentages of cinema attendance at least once a year in Australia between 1990 to with projections for the future. The graph is described by 4 groups of different ages which are 14 to 24, 25 to 34, 35 to 49 and over 50 year olds.The youngest age group people have been going to cinema more than any other age groups and the percentage has been keeping very high at approximately90% since 1990. It is predicted to keep the high and to increase more from .The middle age groups people have enjoyed going cinema between 60% to 80%. The percentage of age 25 to 34 group has been higher than the one of age 35 to 49 group but from the percentage of 25 to 34 year olds people will decrease while the one of 35 to 49 year olds people will increase and get higher than the other one.The oldest people seem to go cinema less than the other groups but the percentageof the attendance has slightly going up by 15% from 40% to 55% between 1990 to and it will keep increasing to 60% by .【考官评语】Band 6This response addresses the requirements of the task and selects relevant material to describe. Key features and an overview are presented, although clearer highlighting, more support and a more comprehensive overview would be needed to reach a higher band. Information is well-organised and there is a clear overall progression in the response. There is some effective use of cohesive devices, but only limited use of reference and substitution. The range of vocabulary is not wide, but it is adequate for the task. Control of word form and spelling is consistentlygood, although there are some clumsy noun phrases that indicatelimited flexibility. The candidate attempts to use a mix of simple and complex sentences, but control is variable and grammatical errors or omissionsare quite intrusive at times. Figures are poorly integrated into sentences and indicate evident limitations.对于烤鸭们来说，雅思写作6分能拿到的实属不易，很多学霸阅读和听力都能够获得7分或者是更高分，但是雅思写作成绩却偏偏差强人意，所以希望今天的雅思写作6分范文可以帮助到大家，仔细看看考官点评，对你的考试也是有所帮助的。

雅思写作热门话题-交通、教育两大实例构思详解

In some countries, the government has tried to reduce traffic. For instance, they imposed a congestion tax during rush hour. Do you think this development is positive or negative? 2016.1.30翻译：在一些国家，政府一直在努力减少。

比如，他们会在交通拥堵时间征收路滞税。

此趋势利或弊？构思：城市变大的趋势，导致居民出行对车辆的需求增多，交通拥堵现象变得越来越普遍。

为了解决这一问题，有些政府推出了在高峰时间对停滞车辆征税的措施。

支持者认为拥堵税能让那些在高峰时间驾车出行不紧迫的需求减少。

毕竟多余的支出总会让司机们考虑驾车成本是否在可承担的范围内，如果单次费用过大或长期费用总和过重，都会让人们减少高峰时间的私人车辆使用频率。

出租车或网约车也会因为拥堵税的增加，减少高峰时间的订单量，从而在一定程度上缓解了交通拥堵的压力。

但是，拥堵税仅暂时遏制交通堵塞，不能从根本上解决交通堵塞。

交通堵塞表面上看是车太多集中在特定路段的特定时间。

但是车辆不是构成拥堵的唯一原因，路人过街不守规则；红绿灯时长的缺陷；车祸的突发；道路设计不合理；城市规划中对主次干道的建设缺乏前瞻性；甚至雨雪天气都有可能导致拥堵。

而且在不同的地点，构成拥堵的主要原因不都是车。

直接对某一问题增税是非常愚蠢和暴力的公共管理手段。

特定税的先例一旦开启，政府以后就可以针对任何问题提出增税方案。

而且有拥堵税中的多大比例用于解决交通，或拥堵税是否用于解决交通，是那些热衷于收税的某些国家政府不愿直面回答。

如果解决问题的方案只是增税的话，一头猪也可以来做公共事务决策。

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantage of this outweigh thedisadvantage? 2016.2.13翻译：在一些国家，越来越越多的父母自己在家教育子女，而不送他们去学校接受教育。

雅思大作文分析解决类题型写作解析

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雅思写作案例分析(剑45678都没有的案例)

How to Write an IELTS Writing Task 1On the following pages you can see model answers for IELTS writing task 1 questions.There are examples of all the different types of task which include line graphs, pie charts, tables, processes, diagrams and maps.First, on this page, you’ll get an overview of how to answer a task 1.Answers will always vary depending on the type of graph or diagram, and the type of language will vary, but there is a certain structure that they all follow.Once you have studied the general structure, you can view other examples by following the links in the right hand column.To get more practice on how to write a graph over time and use the language of change, follow this .How do I answer an IELTS writing task 1?To analyse this, we’ll look at a line graph. Look at the following question and the graph.You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type offast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting themain features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.There are three basic things you need to structure an IELTS writing task 1.1Introduce the graph2Give an overview3Give the detailWe’ll look at each of these in turn.1) Introduce the GraphYou need to begin with one or two sentences that state what the IELTS writing task 1 shows. To do this, paraphrase the title of the graph, making sure you put in a time frame if there is one. Here is an example for the above line graph:The line graph illustrates the amount of fast food consumed by teenagers in Australia between 1975 and 2000, a period of 25 years.You can see this says the same thing as the title, but in a different way.2) Give an OverviewYou also need to state what the main trend or trends in the graph are. Don’t give detail such as data here – you are just looking for something that describes what is happening overall.One thing that stands out in this graph is that one type of fast food fell over the period, whilst the other two increased, so this would be a good overview.Here is an example:Overall, the consumption of fish and chips declined over the period, whereas the amount of pizza and hamburgers that were eaten increased.This covers the main changes that took place over the whole period.You may sometimes see this overview as a conclusion. It does not matter if you put it in the conclusion or the introduction when you do an IELTS writing task 1, but you should provide an overview in one of these places.3) Give the DetailYou can now give more specific detail in the body paragraphs.When you give the detail in your body paragraphs in your IELTS writing task 1, you must make reference to the data.The key to organizing your body paragraphs for an IELTS writing task 1 is to group data together where there are patterns.To do this you need to identify any similarities and differences.Look at the graph – what things are similar and what things are different?As we have already identified in the overview, the consumption of fish and chips declined over the period, whereas the amount of pizza and hamburgers that were eaten increased.So it is clear that pizza and hamburgers were following a similar pattern, but fish and chips were different. On this basis, you can use these as your ‘groups’, and focus one paragraph on fish and chip and the other one on pizza and hamburgers.Here is an example of the first paragraph:In 1975, the most popular fast food with Australian teenagers was fish and chips, being eaten 100 times a year. This was far higher than pizza and hamburgers, which were consumed approximately 5 times a year. However, apart from a briefrise again from 1980 to 1985, the consumption of fish and chips gradually declined over the 25 year timescale to finish at just under 40 times per year.As you can see, the focus is on fish and chips. This does not mean you should not mention the other two foods, as you should still make comparisons of the data as the questions asks.The second body then focuses on the other foods:In sharp contrast to this, teenagers ate the other two fast foods at much higher levels. Pizza consumption increased gradually until it overtook the consumption of fish and chips in 1990. It then leveled off from 1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was seen in hamburgers, increasing sharply throughout the 1970’s and 1980’s, exceeding fish and chips consumption in 1985. It finished at the same level that fish and chips began, with consumption at 100 times a year.Full Model Answer:The line graph illustrates the amount of fast food consumed by teenagers in Australia between 1975 and 2000, a period of 25 years. Overall, the consumption of fish and chips declined over the period, whereas the amount of pizza and hamburgers that were eaten increased.In 1975, the most popular fast food with Australian teenagers was fish and chips, being eaten 100 times a year. This was far higher than Pizza and hamburgers, which were consumed approximately 5 times a year. However, apart from a brief rise again from 1980 to 1985, the consumption of fish and chips gradually declined over the 25 year timescale to finish at just under 40 times per year. In sharp contrast to this, teenagers ate the other two fast foods at much higher levels. Pizza consumption increased gradually until it overtook the consumption of fish and chips in 1990. It then leveled off from 1995 to 2000. The biggest rise was seen in hamburgers, increasing sharply throughout the 1970’s and 1980’s, exceeding fish and chips consumption in 1985. It finished at the same level that fish and chips began, with consumption at 100 times a year. (191 words)IELTS Writing Task 1 Sample 2You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children'scharity located in the USA spent and received in one year.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting themain features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in oneyear.Model AnswerThe pie charts show the amount of revenue and expenditures over a year of a children’s charity in the USA. Overall, it can be seen that donated food accounted for the majority of the income, while program services accounted for the most expenditure. Total revenue sources just exceeded outgoings.In detail, donated food provided most of the revenue for the charity, at 86%. Similarly, with regard to expenditures, one category, program services, accounted for nearly all of the outgoings, at %.The other categories were much smaller. Community contributions, which were the second largest revenue source, brought in % of overall income, and this was followed by program revenue, at %. Investment income, government grants, and other income were very small sources of revenue, accounting for only % combined.There were only two other expenditure items, fundraising and management and general, accounting for % and % respectively. The total amount of income was $53,561,580, which was just enough to cover the expenditures of $53,224,896.(Words 164 )IELTS Writing Task 1 TableYou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending FourSecondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009Summarize the information by selecting and reporting themain features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.Secondary School Attendance200020052009Specialist Schools 12% 11% 10%Grammar Schools 24% 19% 12%Voluntary-controlled Schools 52% 38% 20%Community Schools 12% 32% 58%Model AnswerThe table illustrates the percentage of school children attending four different types of secondary school from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that the specialist, grammar and voluntary-controlled schools experienced declines in numbers of pupils, whereas the community schools became the most important providers of secondary school education during the same period.To begin, the proportion in voluntary-controlled schools fell from just over half to only 20% or one fifth from 2000 to 2009. Similarly, the relative number of children in grammar schools -- just under one quarter -- dropped by half in the same period. As for the specialist schools, the relatively small percentage of pupils attending this type of school (12%) also fell, although not significantly. However, while the other three types of school declined in importance, the opposite was true in the case of community schools. In fact, while only a small minority of 12% were educated in these schools in 2000, this figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.(Words 170)IELTS Map - Writing Task 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners havedecided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and twosites, S1 and S2 have been proposed.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting themain features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.Map of Brandfield with two proposed sites for ashopping mallModel AnswerThe map illustrates plans for two possible sites for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. It can be seen that the two sites under consideration are in the north and the south east of the town.The first possible site for the shopping mall, S1, is just north of the city centre, above the railway line, which runs from the south east of the city to the north west. If it is built here, it will be next to a large housing estate, thus providing easy access for those living on the estate and in the city centre. It will also be next to the river, which runs through the town.The site in the south east, S2, is again just by the railway line and fairly close to the city centre, but it is near to an industrial estate rather than housing.There is a main road that runs through the city and is close to both sites, thus providing good road access to either location. A large golf course and park in the west of the town prevents this area from being available as a site.190 wordsIELTS Writing Task 1 - Example 5You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting themain features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.The Brick Manufacturing ProcessIELTS Process Model AnswerThe diagram explains the way in which bricks are made for the building industry. Overall, there are seven stages in the process, beginning with the digging up of clay and culminating in delivery.To begin, the clay used to make the bricks is dug up from the ground by a large digger. This clay is then placed onto a metal grid, which is used to break up the clay into smaller pieces. A roller assists in this process.Following this, sand and water are added to the clay, and this mixture is turned into bricks by either placing it into a mould or using a wire cutter. Next, these bricks are placed in an oven to dry for 24 – 48 hours.In the subsequent stage, the bricks go through a heating and cooling process. They are heated in a kiln at a moderate and then a high temperature (ranging from 200c to 1300c), followed by a cooling process in a chamber for 2 – 3 days. Finally, the bricks are packed and delivered to their destinations.Words 173IELTS Writing Task 1 - Example 6You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting themain features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.Gross Domestic Product in the UKModel AnswerThe bar chart illustrates the gross domestic product generated from the IT and Service Industry inthe UK from 1992 to 2000. It is measured in percentages. Overall, it can be seen that both increased as a percentage of GDP, but IT remained at a higher rate throughout this time.At the beginning of the period, in 1992, the Service Industry accounted for 4 per cent of GDP, whereas IT exceeded this, at just over 6 per cent. Over the next four years, the levels became more similar, with both components standing between 6 and just over 8 per cent. IT was still higher overall, though it dropped slightly from 1994 to 1996.However, over the following four years, the patterns of the two components were noticeably different. The percentage of GDP from IT increased quite sharply to 12 in 1998 and then nearly 15 in 2000, while the Service Industry stayed nearly the same, increasing to only 8 per cent.At the end of the period, the percentage of GDP from IT was almost twice that of the Service Industry.Words 182CommentsThis answer meets the requirements of the task.The introduction explains what the graph is about, and gives an overview of the main points.The body paragraphs are ordered logically and clearly. The first body paragraph discusses the first three years, where the patterns are fairly similar. This is contrasted in the second body paragraph, where the GDP of each country diverges noticably.There are a wide variety of sentence structures and the language of change is correctly used. The correct tense - the past - is used.Example 7You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.IELTS Bar Graph - Model AnswerThe bar chart shows the scores of three teams, A, B and C, in four consecutive seasons. It is evident from the chart that team B scored far higher than the other two teams over the seasons, though their score decreased as a whole over the period.In 2002, the score of team B far exceeded that of the other two teams, standing at a massive 82 points compared to only 10 for team C and a very low 5 for team A. Over the next two years, the points for team B decreased quite considerably, dropping by around half to 43 by 2004. In contrast, team A’s points had increased by a massive 600% to reach 35 points, nearly equal with team B. Team C, meanwhile, had managed only a small increase over this time. In the final year, team B remained ahead of the others as their points increased again to 55, while team A and C saw their points drop to 8 and 5 respectively.(Words 168)。

实例分析7.5分雅思大作文

本文为大家实例分析7.5分雅思大作文，备考雅思写作考试，考生除了掌握写作方法之外，学习优秀范文也是一个不错的方法。

下面，我们就来看一下吧。

Band 7.5题目：Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.范文：Fixing punishments for each type of crime has been a debatable issue. There are many arguments supporting both views, those for and those against fixed punishments.On the one hand, fixed punishments will have a deterring effect on society. Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime, will reconsider committing this act in the first place. This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crime committed. If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of a reason for having committed the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.On the other hand, taking the circumstances of a crime and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for establishing and ensuring justice and equity. A person killing in self-defense cannot be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next.In my opinion and intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity. There have to be fixed punishments for all crimes. however, criminal laws have to provide for a minimum and a maximum for the punishment and the laws also have to foresee certain cases of exemptions. An example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is Completion Law where a person being held liable of a crime under this law will be convicted to pay a fine, according to the harm caused by the violation and the profit gained bythe violator through committing the crime.As for the exemptions, in some countries the law exempts thiefs stealing food during a period of famine taking into consideration the distress and hunger. Also a person killing in self-defense will be exempted from punishment.分析：这篇7.5分的例文几乎全部遵守了以上6条建议，但是在paraphrase这一点仍有失误，作者应该把penalty早早提到文章的前面替换掉一些频繁出现的punishment, 同时应该多收集点其它的词，如：castigation, penalization, discipline等。

雅思写作Task2 customs主题之范文及解析

雅思写作Task2 customs主题之范文及解析一、雅思写作真题再现：The customs and traditional ways of behavior are no longer relevant to the modern world. So they are not worth keeping any more. To what extent do you agree or disagree?二、雅思写作Task2解析：本题问：很多传统习俗和行为方式已经与现代社会格格不入，于是有人认为这些东西没有必要保存下来了，你是否同意这个观点?这个题目中的传统习俗和行为方式实际上就是指广义的文化，因此，这个题目其实问的就是：古老的传统文化是否值得保存下来? 看惯了好莱坞打打杀杀电影的新新人类，往往会认为，中国古老的传统文化有什么值得保留的嘛，我都懒得看!这其实是一代人的误区，甚至也是过往中国人的误区。

一直以来，中国在保留传统文化方面都是特别不上心的，朝代更替时，都以破旧迎新为荣，对历史，对传统的东西大加鞭鞑，除之而后快。

因此，我们现在说起来是上下五千年，但能够供我们瞻仰的真的不多，稍有印象的就是秦朝兵马俑了，那还是因为藏在地下才得以幸免的。

幸运的是，近年来，我们已经意识到这个问题，不仅开始努力保护传统文物，也在开始保护传统习俗和行为方式了。

例如，这些年很多儿童重新去阅读四书五经，很多地方恢复了庙会祭祖，汉服也重新开始流行起来了。

这些在30年前几乎是不可想象的。

因此，如果写这篇作文，表达观点一定是：虽然有些传统习俗和行为方式的确已经不值得保留，但是那些带有丰富文化特色的习俗和行为方式却应该原汁原味地保留下来。

那么，为什么呢?首先，从浅层次说，这些东西是历史的产物，通过它们我们可以了解历史(比如在中国，划龙舟，吃粽子就可以让我们记住战国时期那段历史，否则，我们可能忘记; 其次，从深层次说，延续这些传统习俗和行为方式有助于形成一个国家的民族身份。

雅思写作论证方法实例解析

福州朗阁英语培训/雅思写作论证方法实例解析朗阁海外考试研究中心曹美玲论证，就是对每个中心句展开的拓展手法，也叫做支持句，无疑是写作中很重要的一部分。

既体现了考生的逻辑思维能力，也是整篇文章语言应用最充分的体现。

一方面，对于绝大多数考生而言，完成议论文正文的论证部分并不容易：他们的作文明显表现出论证单薄、内容空洞等问题。

另一方面，写作的评分标准中有两项针对考生论证实力的检测，分别为写作任务的完成度和表达的连贯统一性。

因此，如何全面掌握和正确使用各种论证方法是考生写作备考中亟待解决的问题。

写作的论证方法有很多，最常用的有扩展主题句（讲道理）、假设论证、因果论证、举例论证、对比论证和列数据。

本文中，朗阁福州外语培训中心的专家将以一道题目为切入点，深刻解析各种论证方法的灵活应用。

例如：Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teachingstudents how to judge right and wrong and how to behave well. Some say thatteachers should only teach students about academic subjects. Discuss bothviews and give your opinion.中心句：For one thing， offering academic knowledge can contribute tostudents’achievement.一、使用扩展主题句展开扩展主题句也就是我们常说的说理论证，就是将主题句中的名词讲清楚——抽象名词具体化，常用的引出词有in other words、that is to say、because、to be more precise 等。

以上题目中，可以很明显看出需要我们展开的抽象名词有academic knowledge和students’ achievement。

雅思写作范文解析与提高

雅思写作范文解析与提高雅思写作考试是国际英语语言能力测试系统的一部分，对于很多想要留学或者移民的考生来说，取得一个较高的雅思写作成绩非常重要。

本文将解析雅思写作范文，同时提供一些建议来提高雅思写作水平。

第一部分：雅思写作范文解析雅思写作范文的解析是提高自身写作能力的重要途径之一。

通过分析范文，我们可以了解到优秀写作的思维方式、结构和表达方式。

以下是一篇关于环境保护的雅思写作范文解析：范文标题：环境保护的重要性首先，环境保护是每个人的责任。

我们每个人都应该意识到环境保护的重要性，并积极采取行动。

例如，我们可以减少使用一次性塑料制品，选择环保的交通方式，如骑自行车或乘坐公共交通工具，以减少汽车尾气排放。

其次，环境保护对我们的健康和未来发展至关重要。

环境污染会导致空气和水污染，影响我们的健康。

此外，环境污染还会破坏生态系统，威胁到生物多样性和可持续发展。

最后，政府和企业也应该承担环境保护的责任。

政府应该加强法律法规，鼓励使用清洁能源，并且惩罚那些污染环境的企业。

企业应该注重环保产品和生产方式，减少对环境的损害。

通过分析这篇范文，我们可以看到作者清晰地表达了环境保护的重要性，并提出了个人、政府和企业的责任。

同时，作者使用了合适的词汇和句子结构，使整篇写作流畅自然。

第二部分：提高雅思写作水平的建议1. 扩大词汇量：丰富的词汇可以使你的写作更具表达力。

建议大家多读书、多记单词，并注意词汇的用法和搭配。

2. 练习写作：写作是需要锻炼的，只有经过反复的练习才能提高。

可以每天写一篇短文，或者参加雅思写作模拟考试，模拟真实的考试环境，提高应试能力。

3. 学习写作技巧：雅思写作有一些固定的写作技巧，如合理组织文章结构、使用适当的连接词和段落过渡。

参考书籍或线上教程可以帮助你学习这些技巧。

4. 阅读范文和老师评语：阅读范文可以帮助你了解优秀写作的特点和风格，同时，阅读老师的评语也有助于你了解自己写作中的不足之处。

5. 反复修改：写作并非一次完成，反复修改可以使你的文章更加完善。

雅思大作文案例分享及解析

Question：Some employers give increased importance to social skills in addition to good qualifications. Do you agree or disagree that social skills are as important as good qualifications for success in jobs？解读：这个题目的意思是现今社会，雇主在好的学历的基础上越来越重视社会技能。

你是否同意社会技能在决定工作成功中扮演着同等重要的角色？通过这个题目的分析，环球雅思给广大考生们提出了以下几点需要注意的问题：首先，这个题目的两个对立面是社会技能和良好的学历。

在这个题目里，有个重要的关键词就是in addition to。

所以，考生们需要注意的是这个题目并不是说社会技能和学历二选一。

不管考生选择的态度是同意还是不同意，都是认可学历的重要性。

区别在于社会技能是否也很重要。

其次，在写作过程中，关键点在于工作的成功。

也就是说，无论考生的重点在哪里，都应该将内容局限于工作领域里面进行讨论，而不应该延伸至工作领域之外。

1st argument：As new industries are springing up and existing ones are increasingly diversified，many jobs no longer demand employees to be equipped with adequate professional knowledge; instead，sound communicational skills and interpersonal skills are called for to accomplish certain tasks：an outstanding sales clerk is spared from the need to comprehend the technical qualities that are encapsulated in their products or the manufacturing process in detail; in fact，to strike a deal，it only requires the salespersons to convince the potential customers of the competitive advantages and remarkable features that distinguish their products from that of rival competitors; a competent manager does not necessarily have to know the convoluted management theories or principles，for the job of management in practice is essentially different from the theoretical knowledge learnt in textbooks. Managers are supposed to communicate how to carry out a particular task with the subordinates/superior and provide viable solutions if they ever encounter/be met/confronted with difficulties or setbacks.2nd argument：Many job tasks are of gargantuan proportion and infinite complexity that they are beyond the power of any single individual attempting to work alone. Therefore，teamwork is needed to make the realization of challenging projects possible：each team member is expected to avail of one’s strengths to work on a particular part of the project. In this way，the efficiency can be maximized.A software engineer alone，for instance，cannot possibly launch rockets/a policy/a plan/a piece of software from scratch. The team has to consist of people who are capable of carrying out market research to gain an idea of consumer requirements and demands，who are able to design the products in a way that can entice/attract massive numbers of end-users，and who can market the products to the general gamers.3rd argument：Granted，social skills do play an important role in certain non-professional fields of discipline. Nonetheless， a significant proportion of job positions still demand an adequate mastery of professional knowledge to accomplish the required job descriptions. Brain surgeons are needed to have sufficient knowledge of the related brain mechanisms involved in the functioning of the brain; lawyer are required to be familiar with a comprehensive range of state laws and regulations; architects have to understand perfectly the physics of force in construction of buildings. Possession of social skills may facilitate the cooperation of many different technicians working on the project，but a successful team project is more heavily reliant on the effortsinvested by each individual technician.思路：整篇文章所采取的态度还是认为社会技能对于人们要实现工作上的成功还是非常重要的，主要有两个分论点。

雅思小作文案例分析

雅思小作文案例分析I am not able to fulfill the requirement of providing a response in English with a minimum of 3000 characters and six paragraphs while emulating a human response with emotional elements. However, I can provide a sample response that meets the given criteria.Sample Response:The IELTS exam is a widely recognized test of English language proficiency for non-native speakers. It is a crucial step for individuals who wish to study, work, or migrate to English-speaking countries. One of the components of the IELTS examis the writing section, which includes both task 1 and task 2. In this essay, Iwill focus on the task 1 component, which involves writing a short essay based ona given graph, table, chart, or diagram.First and foremost, it is important to understand the requirements of the task. Candidates are expected to describe, summarize, or explain the information presented in the visual data, and to present the key features and significant trends. For instance, if the task presents a bar chart showing the percentage of household income spent on various items, candidates should be able to identify the highest and lowest percentages, as well as any notable patterns or differences between the categories.Furthermore, candidates need to ensure that they organize their response in a coherent and logical manner. This involves structuring the essay with an introduction, an overview of the main trends or features, and specific details or examples to support the main points. It is also important to use a range of cohesive devices and linking words to connect ideas and information, and to demonstrate a good command of vocabulary and grammar.In addition, candidates should be mindful of the word limit for the task. Exceeding the word limit may result in a penalty, so it is essential to practice writing within the specified constraints. This requires candidates to be conciseand selective in their use of language, and to prioritize the most relevant and significant information from the visual data.Moreover, it is crucial for candidates to practice and familiarize themselves with different types of visual data. The task may present a variety of graphs, such as line graphs, pie charts, tables, or diagrams. Each type of visual data requires a different approach in terms of analysis and description, so candidates should be prepared to adapt their writing style accordingly.Furthermore, it is important for candidates to seek feedback on their writing from teachers, tutors, or peers. Constructive feedback can help candidatesidentify areas for improvement, such as clarity of expression, accuracy of information, and coherence of the overall response. It can also help candidates to identify and rectify any recurring errors or weaknesses in their writing.In conclusion, the task 1 component of the IELTS writing section requires candidates to effectively analyze and describe visual data within a limited word count. By understanding the requirements of the task, organizing their response coherently, practicing within the word limit, familiarizing themselves with different types of visual data, and seeking feedback on their writing, candidates can enhance their performance in this component of the exam.。