英语作文案例

高三英语专题复习之书面表达教学案例
泾川一中史会荣
一．学习内容：分析及解决学生作文中常见的低级错误。

二．案例设计背景：
本节课旨在减少学生在写作中经常会出现一些低级错误，提高书面表达得分。

学生在写作中经常会出现一些低级错误，但屡禁不止，很是头疼。

为了让学生避免这些错误，本人把错误收集在一起，并让学生来改，希望类似的问题减少。

三、教学过程：
Step 1.Presentation
呈现书面表达的评分原则，再指出好的方面和不足方面：
（一）评分原则：
1. 本题总分为30分，按5个档次给分。

2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

3. 词数少于80和多于100的，从总分中减去2分。

4. 评分时应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的连贯性。

5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。

评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。

英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

6. 如书写较差以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。

（二）好的方面
1．能按照要求把要点写出；
2．有意识地用上好词好句；
3．连接词用得较好；
4．书写有提高。

（三）主要的错误
1．有语病的句子很多；
2．应用词汇和语法结构的数量少和准确性差；
3．拼写与标点符号较差；
4．书写较差以至影响交际。

Step2. Practise and anylysize the common mistakes in writing 将具体的错误分类列出，有句子，有说明，还有巩固练习：
1. 有……人死于交通事故
There were 500,000 people died in the traffic accident.
分析：这是有语病的句子，其句法应该是“主语+谓语+状语”，即People died in the accident.不能按汉语的句式用There were来写英语句子。

再如：
有十二人在打篮球。

Twelve people are playing basketball.(不能用There are twelve people are playing basketball.)
有三个同学没来上课。

Three students didn’t come to school. (不能用There were three students didn’t come to school.)
请改正：
There is also a few people hold a completely different opinion. （去掉There is )
2. 动词的第三人称单数的词尾变化。

究其原因是受汉语的影响，一定在记住英语的谓语动词必须跟主语保持一致。

下面有几个错误的句子，请指出并改正错误：It provide a good job. (provides)
The car give us convenience. (gives)
Everything have two sides. (has)
The car have a lot of advantages. (has)
The company provide work for us. (provides)
It take us little time to arrive the place. (takes)
3. 动词不可直接作主语，应该用V-ing或to do等。

请指出并改正错误：
Have a car brings us convenience.
Have a car can save a lot of time.
Use car can save time.
Not only can it makes traffic jams, but also it cause pollution.
Car bring air pollution.
4. Too many和too much 混用。

可数名词和不可数名词混用。

Too many修饰可数名词，too much修饰不可数名词。

想想为什么会有人用too much 来修饰people？还有work是不可数名词，不能用many works。

还有不能
用bring a bad pollution.
5．as…as possible和as possible as I can. 请指出并改正错误：
as+形容词/副词…as possible，如as fast as possible; as quickly as possible; as many as possible;
We are trying to collect as many used books as possible.
Come to me as quickly as possible.
The pollution should be controlled as possible as we can.
Besides, it has made many pollution.
Many traffic accidents takes place.
The car have a lot of advantages.
从来就没有as possible as I can的短语，为何用它？
6. 无端在行为动词前加上am/is/are。

请指出并改正错误：
There are exist some advantages
It is provide us good jobs.
Cars are play an important role.
It’s takes into consideration.
Some people are hold the opposite opinion.
The traffic jam is become worse.
It is offer many choices of work.
7. 名词前无冠词。

通常情况下，可数名词前要有冠词，或用上复数形式，不能单独使用。

请指出并改正错误：
Car is convenient.
Traffic accident happen.
There is traffic jam.
We can have job.
Car bring air pollution.
8．汉式英语。

请指出并改正错误：
Advantages are more than disadvantages.
We use the car can save time.
Use car can save time.
Cars are benefit but bad.
9.想用定语从句，却不是句子。

请指出并改正错误：
Those who driving a car can’t be too careful.
…cars, which making our lives easier.
There are more than 500 thousand people die of var accidents.
I think the drivers who using the car should be careful.
10. 单复数不分。

Some people earns his life by car.
There are some problem.
Everyone don’t think so.
11．because老爱用大写。

在表示原因状语时且用在句中时，because一定用小写。

请指出并改正错误：There is air pollution Because of many cars.
12．形容词比较级混用。

请指出并改正错误：
It can be more better in the future.
Other people don’t agree. Because if there are more cars in city people can get to cities more easily.
We should make our earth more good.
13．拼写错误。

thousant--thousand, liveing-living, worsely无此此词, surrouding--surrounding, consided--considered, rathen--rather, puble-public等。

Step3. Summary
Give some advice on how to write efficiently：
1．凡事细心些，按英语习惯来写句子；
2．认清常见错误，避免再次写错；
3．建立错题集，不断提醒自己；
4．多背些范文，模仿它们来写．
Step4. Homework
以My school 为题，写一篇100字左右的英语短文。

要求写完先按本节课涉及的常见的错误类型进行自评。