新题型-读后续写-第20篇

3.曲折性原则 凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解 决。
读懂大意，理清脉络
读所给的不完整故事，弄清大
意和主题，理清故事的主要 人物和事件。
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2 细读首句，构思框架
仔细阅读所给两段的首句， 结合正能量结尾，思考大 致框架。
增加细节，开始写作
依据情节发和常识，在确定的 框架内，可按“所见/遇所想，
所为所感”等构思具体细节。
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4 修改润色，整洁誊写 思考再三，把修正润色后的 续写整洁地写入答卷。
读后续写 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开 头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 续写的词数应为150左右。
It was the hottest time of the year in southern California. Steve, a star basketball player at the University of California, with his cousin Zach, had planned a camping trip in the Great National Forest for their summer vacation.
从本段首句可知，即使史蒂夫 怀疑，因火灾紧急，布雷迪继 续让他赶紧离开。 那么，本段应是写火势危急， 闲不容息，男孩们赶紧逃离， 最终在小狗的带领下，他们成 功回到了河边。 因此，可以这样构思：
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修改润色，整洁誊写
审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后 是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言 特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之 后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。
At high noon, the sun was scorching hot. With a good harvest of fish, the boys marched into the forest with Brady following them.
After a long walk, they found a clearing that was ideal for a campsite (野营地). The camp was set up immediately as Steve knew all the tricks of an experienced wilderness camper.
事件 梳理
●那是南加州一年中最热的时候。 ●史蒂夫他的表弟扎克和小狗布雷迪在国家森林公园 露营。到达后，他们在河边停下。 ●正午时，他们走进森林，在一块空地上搭起了帐篷。 ●但他们遇到了火灾，试图回到河边。 ●然而，在浓烟中很难逃脱。 ●然后布雷迪跑开了，没有再回来。
●... with the dog Brady early in the morning.
●In a little while, ...
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细读首句，构思框架
两段首句定一框
由续写的第一段首句与第二 段首句确定第一段的框架。
二框二首正能量
第二段的框架，由第二段首 句与正能量结尾来确定。
Steve and Zach hadn’t gone far when there was a familiar bark. （史蒂夫和扎克没走多远，就听到一声熟悉的 狗叫声。）
The long dry summer turned the forest into a tinderbox. In a little while, Steve and Zach were inside their tent packing their belongings.
“Let’s go! We can make it back to the river!” They headed down against the fire-wind in the direction of the river. But Brady barked a sharp warming. Ahead of them lay a thick curtain of smoke across the track. They would never make it through that. Steve was uneasy for it was hard to find a safe way to escape in the heavy smoke.
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读懂大意，理清脉络
主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大 意，特别要弄清故事的人物，时态(通常是 一般过去时)，事件(故事的起因和经过)， 语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致， 保持不变)，等等。
人物时态和事件 语言特色不要变
characters Steve, his cousin Zach, the dog Brady
tense events
simple past tense
●It was the hottest time of the year in southern
California. ●Steve, with his cousin Zach and the dog Brady, had a
camping trip in the Great National Forest . ●Upon arrival, they stopped by the river. ●At high noon, they marched into the forest and set
框
吠声。
架
2. 由第二段首句可知，布雷迪不顾男孩的怀疑，又匆忙地
拉扯起来，说明上一段小狗跑回来想带他们离开。同时可
以看出，本段中史蒂夫对布雷迪的动作抱有怀疑态度，不
愿立刻离开。
说明本段写小狗找到了回河边的路，回来想带男孩们逃
离火灾，可史蒂夫犹豫不决。注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。
二框二首正能量
构
由第一段框架可知，第一段中小狗跑回来想带男孩
写作指导
1.原文一致原则 内容要前后衔接，上下连贯 语言表达风格一致。
2.正能量原则 故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最 终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架 了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自 新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。
思
们离开，可史蒂夫有所犹豫。那么本段应是火势不容
乐观，男孩们跟随着小狗，最终回到河边。
框
架
Paragraph 2：
1. 由续写第二段首句可知，布雷迪不顾男孩的怀疑，
又赶紧地拉扯起来。
2. 由正能量结尾可知，在小狗的一再坚持下以及从火
灾中逃脱已是迫在眉睫，男孩们跟着小狗，最终回到
了期待已久的河边。
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Brady lifted his head and snuffed（嗅）the smoke-laden wind. Next moment, the dog bounded away and disappeared down a sharp slope（斜坡）. The boys shouted for him, but he didn’t come back. Steve couldn’t blame Brady for panicking. He himself wanted to run even though he didn’t have a clue which way.
An afternoon nap was absolutely a special treat in mid-summer. However, the boys were waken up by the fierce barks of Brady. Outside, heavy smoke filled the air and wind-blown flame was skipping from the top of one tree to another.
Brady pulled again, in spite of the boy’s disbelief, urgently. （布雷迪不顾男孩的怀疑， 匆 忙 地又拉了拉。）
两段首句定一框
构
Paragraph 1：
思
1. 由正文末段结尾可知，小狗布雷迪跑开而且没有回来。
接着由续写的第一段首句可知，他们听到了一阵熟悉的狗
增加细节，开始写作
在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展 和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、 所闻、所思、所说、所做等给每段 增加5至8个具体细节，我们称之为 “58细节添加法”。
构思
Paragraph 1 Steve and Zach hadn’t gone far when there was a familiar bark. （史蒂夫和扎克没走多远，就听到一声熟悉的 狗叫声。）
Paragraph 1
Steve and Zach hadn’t gone far when there was a familiar bark. Brady came bounding, stopped directly in front of Steve and hit him with his head, pushing him back toward the slope. But Steve didn’t get it. Then Brady grabbed the boy’s jeans and started pulling. The message was clear, but Steve hesitated. Of course he remembered Brady saving his uncle’s life when the dog was much younger. Was he still sharp enough to get them through this?
up a camp on a clearing . ●But they met a fire and tried to go back to the river. ●However, it was hard to escape in the heavy smoke. ●Then, Brady bounded away and didn’t come back.
语 言
●Upon arrival, ... along ...
特 ●... in delight. ...in agreement.
色 ●At high noon, ...
●With a good harvest of fish, ...
●However, the boys were waken up by ...
从所给材料结尾和本段首句可知，小狗跑开而且不再回来，
史蒂夫表示理解，毕竟火灾威胁生命，谁料它很快回到男孩 们身边。由下段首句Brady pulled again, in spite of the boy’s disbelief, urgently. 可知小狗想带男孩们逃离。所以本段应是 写小狗赶回来想带男孩们逃离火灾，可是史蒂夫徘徊不定。 因此，本段可以这样构思：
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Paragraph 1: Steve and Zach hadn’t gone far when there was a familiar bark.
Paragraph 2: Brady pulled again, in spite of the boy’s disbelief, urgently.
构思
Paragraph 1 Steve and Zach hadn’t gone far when there was a familiar bark. （史蒂夫和扎克没走多远，就听到一声熟悉的 狗叫声。）
构思
Paragraph 2
Brady pulled again, in spite of the boy’s disbelief, urgently. （布雷迪不顾男孩的怀疑，匆忙地又拉了拉。）
The boys packed clothes and supplies into a bag, and began their great adventure with the dog Brady early in the morning. Upon arrival, Steve pulled over to the side of the road along the bank of the river. “A wonderful place for fishing,” Steve exclaimed in delight. Zach nodded in agreement.