【上海高考概要写作】summary writing1(有解析)

Exercise 1

With only two weeks to go before Christmas, buying presents is a high priority for a lot of people. However, this year not so many people are leaving their homes to go shopping. These days lots of people can do their shopping in the comfort of their own home with the help of the Internet.

Online shopping is becoming more and more popular for a number of reasons: prices are often lower online; you don’t have to queue up in busy shops and you can buy almost any product imaginable with just a few clicks of your mouse.

Both male and female are buying into the trend, but women are expected to do more shopping on the Internet than men. It seems women are now more attracted to the convenience of online shopping than they used to be. Average spending online this Christmas by women will rise to £ 240 (3.360 yuan) compared to the slightly lower average of £ 233 (3,262 yuan) for men.

In the past a lot of people were reluctant to shop online. Many were worried about the security of entering their card details on the Internet and the reliability of the Internet but as shopping online has become more widespread, these worries have begun to disappear. 45% of Internet users still do have security worries but it hasn’t slowed down the ever-increasing numbers of online shoppers.

One victim of the online shopping boom is the UK high street. The average spending per person on the high street is only £197. 70% of Internet users who are now buying their Christmas gifts online.

参考范文：

This year, people are doing Christmas shopping online at home rather than leave their homes for cheaper goods and more convenience.(要点1) With increasing popularity of online shopping, women spend more than men.(要点2) Although safety is a major concern for shopping online,still more and more people choose to shop online.(要点3) With the pressure from widespread online shopping, traditional shops in the UK high street began their sales promotion earlier this Christmas.(要点4)

分析过程：

一、试题详解

1.核心内容

本文是一篇说明文,共分五段。第一段主要讲随着圣诞购物季的到来,今年许多人选择在家网购。第二段讲了网上购物变得流行的原因。第三段主要是讲无论男女都热衷网购,不过网购对女士更有吸引力。第四段主要是讲对网购安全的担忧并未降低网购人数。第五段主要讲面对网购的冲击,传统商场在圣诞购物季到来时的应对措施——提前打折。

2.写作思路

抓住关键信息,理解段落大意。准确理解文章内容,在此基础上理清文章脉络、概括段落大意是写摘要的关键。第一段的主要信息是However后的这句话,其他则是次要信息。第二段的关键词是popular 和reasons。第三段信息重点是but 后面的“women are ex pected to do more shopping on the Internet than men”。第四段的关键信息是security 和“ever-increasing numbers of online shoppers”,关键信息之间的逻辑关系是转折。第五段主要信息是“the bargains have come early”及其原因,该段大意需要在理解的基础上进行概括。

确定表达要点,简要提炼概括。将每段的段落大意都作为表达的要点可以确保不遗漏。第一段表达要点是“not so many people are leaving their homes to go shopping”也可以是“lots of people can do their shopping in the comfort of their own home with the help of the Internet’’,结合背景圣诞购物,概括起来就是“people are doing Christmas shopping online at home rather than leave their homes”。第二段的表达要点是reasons,可以考虑整合到第一段。第三段的要点是“women are expected to do more shopping on the Internet than men”,利用简化原则,概括起来就是“women spend more than men”。第四段概括起来核心内容是“security worries haven’t slowed down the ever-increasing numbers of online shoppers”。第五段要点是“the bargains have come early”和“one victim of the online shopping boom”, 概括起来就是“Because of the popularity of online shopping,the bargains have come early. ”。