雅思作文范文- 慈善

作文
7 Some people prefer to provide help and support for those in their local community who need it. Others prefer to give money to national and international charitable organisations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
★★Introduction
Background – theme – view
Charity organization
什么是慈善组织，它的目的是什么，它的作用是什么，什么时候会出现对于慈善组织的讨论?
When people suffer some natural disasters and are confronted with difficulties, they may expect the aid from others, especially charity organizations. However, there is an opinion that charity organizations should help people of their own country instead of giving aid to whoever in need. From my perspective, the aid should be given to those in need regardless of their nationality.
Natural disasters, war or social turmoil, all these factors may render people fall into poverty and diseases. The rise of charity organizations is associated with the emergence of these disasters. They relieve people from great sufferings and give people in need hope of survival. However, there is an opinion that aid from charities should only be given to people living in their countries while others think that charity should benefit all people. I tend to believe the latter is of more justification.
Body 1: why we should give help to those in great needs? What is the responsibility of charity organizations?
To help those in great needs is a reflection of moral obligation/duty for human beings.(意义) And this practice of helping others will have numerous/many positive effects involving/including promoting economic development and enhancing social harmony. (影响和作用)Meanwhile, the aid from charity organizations may cover a wide range of people and may be more transparent. However, there are some disadvantages of charity organizations. The money donated by charity organizations may be taken away by local officials and cannot reach those who are really in need. What’s more, charity organizations tend to give aid to those areas which are frequently reported by the media. This will cause regional imbalance or even regional conflict.
Body 2: whether aid from charities should only be given to local people?
As for those who advocate that aid for charity organization should be given to people living in their own country, I hold conservative attitude. There is no denying that it is more effective for charity organizations to give aid to local people. However, how to
ensure fairness/equality among different peoples is the priority for charities. Fair distribution of resources and aid is an objective reflection of human virtues. (反证)If every individual or every organization just focus on their own interest, the world will become indifferent and unfriendly.
In conclusion, charity organization should give aid to people who are in great need without considering their social background, their nationality and something irrelevant. However, the aid should be supervised and monitored by some independent organizations for fear of corruption or embezzlement. / However, the aid should be controlled or supervised by some dependent organizations so that it can reach the targeted people.
★★While some people claim that assistance should be given first to those who need it the most, no matter what their geographical locations are, others argue that it is better for charity organizations to focus on helping local people who are disadvantaged. To my way of thinking, both arguments have their own reasons, which will be discussed in detail as follows.
On the one hand, there is no denying that giving people help from an international point of view is the most efficient. For one thing, different charitable organizations from different countries can use their specialties to achieve the optimum results. For another, not every unfortunate person needs help in the same way. Those poor people of many Third World nations are in the most urgent need of basic necessities, such as food, water, housing and medical care. Therefore, giving priority to those individuals when organizing charitable activities shows the real spirit of internationalism.
On the other hand, it is often true that concentrating on helping local people is the best policy. This is mainly because every country has only limited social and financial resources. It is simply impossible for any country to keep providing aid to poor people all over the world. Particularly in those African societies, their governments are hardly capable of getting their own citizens out of poverty. Moreover, as every donor likes to see how their money is spent, it is wise to focus charitable events on the local area to show them the results.
In conclusion, it seems that the two different approaches have their own advantages. Thus, it is suggested that when it comes to charity, rich countries should try to reach out to the neediest people in the world, whereas the first priority of poor countries should be dealing with their own problems, especially their socially and economically disadvantaged citizens.
独家点评
这是一道关于做慈善的不同方式的探讨题，其实正反双方的辩论焦点就落在international vs. local上面。

主体段应从两种不同的视角去看，分别阐述各自的立
场及理由，而这也是Discuss both sides题型最难的地方。

该范文的论点展开依靠了大量的形容词最高级：the most efficient, the optimum results, the most urgent need, the best policy等等。

而在最后结尾段，我们巧妙地把两者结合起来，指出富国应该采取international的慈善方式，而穷国则必须遵从local的慈善路线。

Intro: You can begin with a quotation
“ To have enough to share; to know the joy of giving; to thrill with all the sweets of life - is living”
Para 1: Advantages of direct help
1. A person remains directly in touch with the needy
2. You can see how your money is being used – no mediators and so no chances of corruption
3. Moreover, charity begins at home
Para 2: Advantages of joining national and international organisation
1. Can work on a larger platform – for global issues – larger platform is a must
2. Help activities can be better spread through a larger network. You feel part of a global village.
Conclusion: Help in any form is good. Depends on the condition of the country.
★As a result of the development of world economy, people’s donation to charity organizations is at an unprecedented level, which has brought attention to an ongoing debate concerning whether charity organizations should only assist people in their own countries.
In the proponents’ mind, charity organizations should keep the majority of their aid in the country. Initially, it is domestic donations that compose the major proportion of the income of the charity organization; therefore, the money should be spent mostly on poor people within the country. In addition, the assistance from other countries may spark off unnecessary tensions and misunderstandings due to the political, social and cultural differences. It is commonly held that volunteers without sufficient preparation may violate customs of local communities.
Opponents of charity organizations giving only aid domestically, however, contend that the assistance be open to the people in need no matter where they are from. To start with, it is the functionality of charity organizations to render help to those who are in great need, regardless of their nationalities. Otherwise, it may be considered to go breach of the purposes they are established for. What is more, not only can international charity assistance enhance the friendship of two nations, but also help eliminate the conflicts and misunderstanding, thereby stimulating the cultural exchanges between countries. In the last place, a surplus of resources, including food, clothing and medicine, are produced in developed countries every year. Donating them to the impoverished people in developing countries is more reasonable than just throwing them away.
Overall, I tend to believe that charity should not b e constrained in one’s own country. It is highly recommended that charity organizations help people alleviate poverty, disease and illiteracy at an international level.。