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Because of his not passing the exam, his family were disappointed.
Not having passed the exam, he made his family disappointed.
With him not passing the exam , his family were disappointed
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相应的解题步骤+高分策略
1.审题：已确定经体裁这、样时态做、人了称，。 还是得不到 第五档高分？ 2.列要点：漏掉内容要点要降低得分档次！
3.列句子：必要时适当增加细节。
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5.润色：w尽力ro使n用g较?复杂结构或较高级词汇；
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2. After his family were told that he hadn’t passed the exam, they were disappointed.
Having been told that he hadn’t passed the exam, his family were disappointed.
4.That he hadn’t passed the exam made his family disappointed. His not having passed the exam made his family disappointed.
5.He didn’t pass the exam, which made his family disappointed.
Some students agreed on it, because they thought that the senior 3 students worked hard, and they easily felt tired, but the tonic could help them overcome. Besides, they often have no time to do exercise.
He didn’t pass the exam, making his family disappointed.
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Have a try!
Some students disagreed on it, who thought if they stick to exercise, they didn’t need to take tonic. And parents used tonic to pay attention to their children’s health, which will make the students under the pressure. what’s more, the price of the tonic is very high.
How about giving more seconds?
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Brain storm
1.He didn’t pass the exam, which made his family disappointed.
2.The reason why his family were disappointed was that he hadn’t passed the exam.
conjunctions
attributive clauses
How to combine
1. He didn’t pass the exam. 2. His family were disappointed.
adverbial clauses
noun clauses
Subject clauses
1.That he hadn’t passed the exam made his family disappointed. 2.It made his family disappointed that he hadn’t passed the eAxnaymm. ore?
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3.The reason why his family were disappointed was that he hadn’t passed the exam.
The reason for his family’s being disappointed was his not passing the exam.
• Para3: 信件交际功能结尾 deadline for reply/ look forward/ gratitudes
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相应的解题步骤+高分策略
1.审题：确定体裁、时态、人称。 2.列要点：漏掉内容要点要降低得分档次！ 3.列句子：必要时适当增加细节。 4.连句成文：使用适当的连接词，使行文连贯 5.润色：尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇；
Some students gave their disapproval, thinking that it’s unnecessary for students to take tonic as long as they work out on a regular basis. In their eyes, parents’ caring with tonic brought them more pressure than health. Moreover, not every family can afford it.
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邀请信
邀请信 开头：自我介绍，开门见山，说明目的。 正文：邀请内容（活动性质，地点，时间，日期），有关要求与希望。 结尾：重申对方参加的重要性，希望尽快回复。
• Para1: 自我介绍（已经给出）+ 写作背景+ 写作目的
• Para2: 要点 time／place/ significance
After his family were told that he hadn’t passed the exam, they were disappointed.
Object clauses
His family were disappointed at the news that he hadn’t passed the exam.
After being told that he hadn’t passed the exam, his family were disappointed.
His family were disappointed to be told that he hadn’t passed the exam.
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His family were disappointed because he hadn’t passed the exam.
As /Because he hadn’t passed the exam , his family were disappointed.
His family were disappointed that he hadn’t passed the exam.
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书信写作 增分点
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结构美：有合理的段落层次，
要点分明
句式美：运用得当的高级句式
2结构可以给文章增色不少
词汇美：词汇反映你知识贮存
3 量的多少，也是衡量英语水平的一
个重要标志。
衔接美：使用恰当的连接词
使文章上下衔接自然、条理清晰。
The first response is to use the conjunctions, such as:
He didn’t pass the exam, so his family were disappointed.
He didn’t pass the exam, and it made his family disappointed. Given several seconds, some adverbial clauses of cause may appear:
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Some students agreed on it, because they thought that the senior 3 students worked hard, and they easily felt tired, but the tonic could help them overcome. Besides, they often have no time to do exercise.
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作文例析
• 假定你是李华。你是学生会主席。你校将于5月25—30日 在广州举行龙舟赛 (Dragon Boat Race)。请根据以下内容 给姐妹学校剑桥中学（Cambridge High School)写一封邀 请信。
• (1)写信目的 • (2)活动时间、地点和意义 • (3)回复时间：2017年4月15日前 • 注意： • 1.词数100左右； • 2.可以适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯；
适当使用语句间的连接成分。 6.检查：避免低级错误。 7.誊写：书写规范，卷面整洁。
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Two simple sentences： 1. He didn’t pass the exam. 2. His family were disappointed.
How to combine these two sentences?
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Some students disagreed on it, who thought if they stick to exercise, they didn’t need to take tonic. And parents used tonic to pay attention to their children’s health, which will make the students under the pressure. what’s more, the price of the tonic is very high.
20231/.1I0t/1w0 as that he hadn’t passed the exam that made his family disapp1o0inted.
More noun clauses!
After his family learned that he hadn’t passed the exam, they were disappointed
我们可能忽略了什么？ 适当使用语句间的连接成分。
6.检查：避免低级错误。
Appositive clause
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Sometimes, clauses are tedious（冗长） , so, why not refine them?
Using the phrases!
1.As /Because he hadn’t passed the exam , his family were disappointed.
Other students, however, were in favor of it , saying that nothing is more important than study, and that doing exercise was a waste of time, so they worked full days without any rest, thus making them easily felt tired. As a result, they rely on taking tonic to recover themselves.