21世纪联想杯一等奖 演讲稿

从2009年21世纪联想杯全国冠军金路的稿子看写作思路

What would you do if you had only one day left to live?

（题目设计冲击力强，观众带着问题从演讲当中获得答案）

―What would you do if you had only one day left to live?‖

I asked this question to my young students when teaching English this winter. What were their answers?

（个人的经历是一篇成功演讲稿必不可少的，没有，你的说服力就会有折扣，观众不是来听你解释什么是culture smart or science intelligent，他们是想听你如何用自己的经历来演绎这个题目）

―I would watch television!‖ the first answer. ―I would play with the computer!‖ the second one. ―I would play with computer TOO.‖ Th e girl finished her sentence perfectly with a serious smile. Indeed how cute and innocent that smile was, but how seriously my heart was hurt. I was too frightened to listen to more answers like that.

（开始对比，引出推理和解释，这个but 用的恰到好处，而且使用的修辞手法，how cute 和how seriously 平型）

Ten years ago, at their age, I had a different answer: I would spend the last day of my life gazing at the face of my dear grandmother until I inscribed every detail of it onto my mind.

（继续讲故事，对比的手法，different，夹带了虚拟语气，和题目相符；选择my dear grandmother更容易体现亲情，而且这是在生命的最后一天，）

When grandmother was getting old and weak, my family bought her a telephone so I could save time and the trouble of traveling to her home by making phone calls instead. Later we bought her a television so she could watch modern dramas by herself. Then grandma must have been, we assumed, very contented and happy.

（故事没有完成，观众仍然等结论，用by making phone calls instead来说明技术带来的人情的冷漠）

But I never really knew how grandma felt. She silently passed away without a word one night. When I heard about her death, a chilling pain pierced my empty heart. The pain grew even sharper as I tried to remember in detail exactly how grandma looked and I failed completely! How could I remember? I had not visited her for ages—it seemed like a century! My memories of her dissolved into thin air and leaked away like water.

（继续讲故事，谈感受，里面修辞博多：it seemed like a century（夸张）pierced my empty heart/ How could I remember?(反问)/ dissolved into thin air and leaked away like water.（比喻））Even though I have a telephone, can she hear me now?

Even though I might be on television, can she see me now?

Even though I have modern telecommunications, can she still communicate with me now?

With all these ―tele‖s, I was powerless.

（三个大排比，又是排比问句，凸现她的修辞功底，而且对于问句，她给出了答案，With all these ―tele‖s, I was powerless.）

Don’t people just love the word of ―tele‖,which means far away. Indeed this is how modern technology has changed our world. But please don’t forget this other word with ―tele‖: telepathy: which refers to human beings’ inborn ability to connect to our loved ones. Our minds are supposed to read eac h other’s minds; our hearts are supposed to feel each other’s hearts — and fulfill these without any forms of tool!