高考英语高分写作指导非常实用 (3)
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Go through the gate, and you’ll find…. (高级)
When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. (一般)
The more he spoke, the more excited he felt. (高级)
I got up late this morning. I didn’t catch the early bus. (一般)
• 词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量 英语水平的一个重要标志。
词汇使用的原则人靠衣装，文靠词装
四
1、词组优先原则
项
2、地道原则。
原
3、避免重复原则
则
4、后、高、长原则—
后学到、较高级、较长词汇。
1、词组优先原则
［原文］A new railway is being built in my hometown. ［修正］A new railway is under construction in my hometown.
• Adj. 聪明的、脑筋好的
• clever • →smart • →wise • →bright • →intelligent
• 电脑在我们生活中的作用是十分重要的。
• 1.Computers are very important in our life.
• 2.Computers play a very important role in our life.
英 语 书 面 表 达 指 导
Beautify your Composition
高考作文的华丽变身
遇遇 难易 心心 不更 慌细 ，。
1.所选题材及体裁都非常贴近考生生活， 实际具有时代特点，紧扣与学生相关的 社会热点及学生的生活与学习。
2.词数要求100，既要求表 达事实信息，又要陈述个人观点，对考 生思维和表达能力的要求提高了。
Hurdle Race in the 2004 Olympic Games.
2) The word is true. The president will give our school a speech.
is true the president will give our school a speech.
She has trouble in pronouncing the word. (高级)
2，句式多样，文章增“靓”
• 使用较丰富的句式：运用得当的句子结构 可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因 此而生辉
• 他昨天下午来的。
• 1.He came here yesterday afternoon.
• what a clever girl she is!
四、将陈述句改为倒装句。
操作难度★★★★ 写作效果★★★★
• 1. I could hardly understand the importance of English at that time.
• Hardly could I understand the importance of English at that time.
I got up late this morning, otherwise I could have caught the early bus. (高级)
二、主动句与被动句的互换。
操作难度★★★ 写作效果★★★
• The government should take immediate measures to deal with the present financial crisis.
三、 将陈述句改为感叹句。
操作难度★★★ 写作效果★★★
1. To prevent the pollution is very important．
How
！
2. She is a clever girl．
What
!
• How important it is to prevent the pollution!
0分：空白，或者抄写一些无关的东西。
高考阅卷特点：
1. 阅卷时间短； 2.阅卷的速度快； 3.阅卷老师的心理状态：给分中庸平均分 15 4. 高考卷其余部分是标准化计分 ——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股
15分和小 20多结分的作 文到底差在哪里？
15分的作文中规中矩，该对的都对，包括 内容要点的完整，语法与词形的正确，但 句式简单，没有多少亮点。而20多分的作 文句型词汇方面就做了很好的包装，它的 句子如人穿的衣服，它已经不是普通校服， 而是李宁、耐克等名牌，所以让人觉得很 “拽”，而高考英语写作要的就是这种很 “拽”的感觉.
2、地道原则
［原文］Through traveling, I
learned a lot of knowledge. ［修正］Through traveling, I gained／obtained a lot of
knowledge.
3、避免重复原则
［原文］I like reading while my brother likes watching television. ［修正］I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.
Weak as I am, I’ll make the effort. (高级)
五、将简单句改为强调句。
操作难度★★★ 写作效果
•
★★★★
1. Smoking did great harm to his health.
• 2. Our money is earned through hard work by our parents.
高考评分标准
第五档（21-25） ： 完全完成试题规定的任务，完全达 到了预期的写作目的，覆盖所有的内容要点，用了丰富
的语法结构，语法与高级词汇有少些错误，全篇流畅，
连词使用较好。
第四档（16-20） ： 完全完成试题规定的任务，达到 了预期的写作目的，写漏了一两个要点，语法和词汇基 本正确，有少些错误，主要是想使用高级词汇与复杂句 子所致。
高考作文评分原则
１．形式上胜人一筹，也就是文章结构，谴词造句
２．内容要点，发挥想象，适当拓展
书面表达在评阅 时遵循三原则
语言第一位（语言高级） 内容第二位（要点齐全） 结构第三位（文章分段）
漂亮、地道
语言第一位（语言高级）
一、高级词汇和句式
二、修辞手法 三、有效的连词
四、名人名言或谚语
1.高级词汇短语
4、后高长原则—后学到、较高级、较长词汇。
原词
替换词
hard
diligently
very
rather extremely
pay attention to attach importance to
happy
delighted enjoyable
more and more the increasing number of
一、将两个简单句合并为并列句。
操作难度★★ 写作效果★★
• 1. You can do it. I can do it. One of us must do it.
• Either you or I must do it.
If you go through the gate, you’ll find the entrance to Bear Country. (一般)
• It was smoking that did great harm to his health.
• It is through hard work that our money is earned by our parents.
六、将两个简单句合并为复合句。
操作难度★★★★★写作效果★★★★★ 1. 同位语和同位语从句（常用于描述人物、地点 等介绍性文段）
• 2. 定语从句 （限制性/ 非限制性）
1) The 2008 Olympic Games will be held in Beijing, and its slogan is One World, One Dream,
• The 2008 Olympic Games,
.
Whose slogan is One World, One Dream ,will be held in BJ 2) In my opinion, the Great Wall and the Summer Palace are
• 2.He didn’t come here until yesterday afternoon.
• 3.Not until yesterday afternoon did he come here.
• 4.It was yesterday afternoon that he came here.
思考：什么样的作文会成为一篇 好作文
• 无遗漏信息点（审题） • 篇章条理清晰：分段和过渡词
• 句式多样
• 地道的高级词汇和恰当的词组
思考：你能想到的好句式有哪 些？
advanced sentences
定语从句 名词性从句 非谓语动词
with复合结构 常用谚语 倒装句
强调句 被动句 …
化腐朽为神奇十 式
3.开头或/和结尾都已经给出，无文体要 求，主要考查考生的表达能力。
1. 词数都符合试题要求。
2. 都覆盖了所有要点，并进行了分段表达， 基本上是3段；
3.所用句型以简单句为主，但是使用了一定 量的高级词汇，大量的短语和句型，丰富 的句式结构增强了表达的效果。
4.都有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全 文结构紧凑。
1) Liu Xiang is an excellent athlete. He won the first
prize in Men’s 110 Hurdle Race in the 2004 Olympic Games. (用同位语改写)
,
Hale Waihona Puke Baidu
, won the first prize in Men’s 110
• 2. We did not realize our mistakes until at that time.
• Not until at that time did we realize our mistakes.
3.Though I’m weak, I will make the effort. (一般)
第三档（11-15） ： 大错（时态、句子结构等） 超过五六处，不能及格，写漏了一些内容，但覆盖 了主要要点，基本上让人能够看懂，基本达到了预 期目的。
第二档 （6-10） ： 未适当完成试题规定的任务， 有要点，但表达不清晰，只有一些句子可读。
第一档 （1-5） ：未完成试题规定的任务，只 是一些字词的堆积，不成句，让读者根本不明白 写什么。
运用高级词汇：
When he heard she had died, he went pale with sorrow. (一般)
At the news of her death, he went…. (高级)
She can’t correctly pronounce the word. (一般)
• 3.computers are of great importance in our life.
EX、运用高级词汇：
As a result, the plan failed. (一般)
The plan turned out to be a failure. (高级)
She went to Austria in order to study music. (一般)
•Immediate measures should be taken to deal with the present financial crisis.
People suggest that the conference be put off. (一般)
It is suggested that the conference be put off. (高级)
She went to Austria for the purpose of studying music. (高级)
Suddenly I thought out a good idea.(一般)
A good idea occurred to me.
/ A good idea suddenly struck me(高级)
When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. (一般)
The more he spoke, the more excited he felt. (高级)
I got up late this morning. I didn’t catch the early bus. (一般)
• 词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量 英语水平的一个重要标志。
词汇使用的原则人靠衣装，文靠词装
四
1、词组优先原则
项
2、地道原则。
原
3、避免重复原则
则
4、后、高、长原则—
后学到、较高级、较长词汇。
1、词组优先原则
［原文］A new railway is being built in my hometown. ［修正］A new railway is under construction in my hometown.
• Adj. 聪明的、脑筋好的
• clever • →smart • →wise • →bright • →intelligent
• 电脑在我们生活中的作用是十分重要的。
• 1.Computers are very important in our life.
• 2.Computers play a very important role in our life.
英 语 书 面 表 达 指 导
Beautify your Composition
高考作文的华丽变身
遇遇 难易 心心 不更 慌细 ，。
1.所选题材及体裁都非常贴近考生生活， 实际具有时代特点，紧扣与学生相关的 社会热点及学生的生活与学习。
2.词数要求100，既要求表 达事实信息，又要陈述个人观点，对考 生思维和表达能力的要求提高了。
Hurdle Race in the 2004 Olympic Games.
2) The word is true. The president will give our school a speech.
is true the president will give our school a speech.
She has trouble in pronouncing the word. (高级)
2，句式多样，文章增“靓”
• 使用较丰富的句式：运用得当的句子结构 可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因 此而生辉
• 他昨天下午来的。
• 1.He came here yesterday afternoon.
• what a clever girl she is!
四、将陈述句改为倒装句。
操作难度★★★★ 写作效果★★★★
• 1. I could hardly understand the importance of English at that time.
• Hardly could I understand the importance of English at that time.
I got up late this morning, otherwise I could have caught the early bus. (高级)
二、主动句与被动句的互换。
操作难度★★★ 写作效果★★★
• The government should take immediate measures to deal with the present financial crisis.
三、 将陈述句改为感叹句。
操作难度★★★ 写作效果★★★
1. To prevent the pollution is very important．
How
！
2. She is a clever girl．
What
!
• How important it is to prevent the pollution!
0分：空白，或者抄写一些无关的东西。
高考阅卷特点：
1. 阅卷时间短； 2.阅卷的速度快； 3.阅卷老师的心理状态：给分中庸平均分 15 4. 高考卷其余部分是标准化计分 ——书面表达是提高分数最大的潜力股
15分和小 20多结分的作 文到底差在哪里？
15分的作文中规中矩，该对的都对，包括 内容要点的完整，语法与词形的正确，但 句式简单，没有多少亮点。而20多分的作 文句型词汇方面就做了很好的包装，它的 句子如人穿的衣服，它已经不是普通校服， 而是李宁、耐克等名牌，所以让人觉得很 “拽”，而高考英语写作要的就是这种很 “拽”的感觉.
2、地道原则
［原文］Through traveling, I
learned a lot of knowledge. ［修正］Through traveling, I gained／obtained a lot of
knowledge.
3、避免重复原则
［原文］I like reading while my brother likes watching television. ［修正］I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.
Weak as I am, I’ll make the effort. (高级)
五、将简单句改为强调句。
操作难度★★★ 写作效果
•
★★★★
1. Smoking did great harm to his health.
• 2. Our money is earned through hard work by our parents.
高考评分标准
第五档（21-25） ： 完全完成试题规定的任务，完全达 到了预期的写作目的，覆盖所有的内容要点，用了丰富
的语法结构，语法与高级词汇有少些错误，全篇流畅，
连词使用较好。
第四档（16-20） ： 完全完成试题规定的任务，达到 了预期的写作目的，写漏了一两个要点，语法和词汇基 本正确，有少些错误，主要是想使用高级词汇与复杂句 子所致。
高考作文评分原则
１．形式上胜人一筹，也就是文章结构，谴词造句
２．内容要点，发挥想象，适当拓展
书面表达在评阅 时遵循三原则
语言第一位（语言高级） 内容第二位（要点齐全） 结构第三位（文章分段）
漂亮、地道
语言第一位（语言高级）
一、高级词汇和句式
二、修辞手法 三、有效的连词
四、名人名言或谚语
1.高级词汇短语
4、后高长原则—后学到、较高级、较长词汇。
原词
替换词
hard
diligently
very
rather extremely
pay attention to attach importance to
happy
delighted enjoyable
more and more the increasing number of
一、将两个简单句合并为并列句。
操作难度★★ 写作效果★★
• 1. You can do it. I can do it. One of us must do it.
• Either you or I must do it.
If you go through the gate, you’ll find the entrance to Bear Country. (一般)
• It was smoking that did great harm to his health.
• It is through hard work that our money is earned by our parents.
六、将两个简单句合并为复合句。
操作难度★★★★★写作效果★★★★★ 1. 同位语和同位语从句（常用于描述人物、地点 等介绍性文段）
• 2. 定语从句 （限制性/ 非限制性）
1) The 2008 Olympic Games will be held in Beijing, and its slogan is One World, One Dream,
• The 2008 Olympic Games,
.
Whose slogan is One World, One Dream ,will be held in BJ 2) In my opinion, the Great Wall and the Summer Palace are
• 2.He didn’t come here until yesterday afternoon.
• 3.Not until yesterday afternoon did he come here.
• 4.It was yesterday afternoon that he came here.
思考：什么样的作文会成为一篇 好作文
• 无遗漏信息点（审题） • 篇章条理清晰：分段和过渡词
• 句式多样
• 地道的高级词汇和恰当的词组
思考：你能想到的好句式有哪 些？
advanced sentences
定语从句 名词性从句 非谓语动词
with复合结构 常用谚语 倒装句
强调句 被动句 …
化腐朽为神奇十 式
3.开头或/和结尾都已经给出，无文体要 求，主要考查考生的表达能力。
1. 词数都符合试题要求。
2. 都覆盖了所有要点，并进行了分段表达， 基本上是3段；
3.所用句型以简单句为主，但是使用了一定 量的高级词汇，大量的短语和句型，丰富 的句式结构增强了表达的效果。
4.都有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全 文结构紧凑。
1) Liu Xiang is an excellent athlete. He won the first
prize in Men’s 110 Hurdle Race in the 2004 Olympic Games. (用同位语改写)
,
Hale Waihona Puke Baidu
, won the first prize in Men’s 110
• 2. We did not realize our mistakes until at that time.
• Not until at that time did we realize our mistakes.
3.Though I’m weak, I will make the effort. (一般)
第三档（11-15） ： 大错（时态、句子结构等） 超过五六处，不能及格，写漏了一些内容，但覆盖 了主要要点，基本上让人能够看懂，基本达到了预 期目的。
第二档 （6-10） ： 未适当完成试题规定的任务， 有要点，但表达不清晰，只有一些句子可读。
第一档 （1-5） ：未完成试题规定的任务，只 是一些字词的堆积，不成句，让读者根本不明白 写什么。
运用高级词汇：
When he heard she had died, he went pale with sorrow. (一般)
At the news of her death, he went…. (高级)
She can’t correctly pronounce the word. (一般)
• 3.computers are of great importance in our life.
EX、运用高级词汇：
As a result, the plan failed. (一般)
The plan turned out to be a failure. (高级)
She went to Austria in order to study music. (一般)
•Immediate measures should be taken to deal with the present financial crisis.
People suggest that the conference be put off. (一般)
It is suggested that the conference be put off. (高级)
She went to Austria for the purpose of studying music. (高级)
Suddenly I thought out a good idea.(一般)
A good idea occurred to me.
/ A good idea suddenly struck me(高级)