全国高考英语满分作文赏析

一. 用词准确;表达地道

【北京卷】【试题回放】第一节情景作文(20分)

美国中学生jeff将要来你所在的红星中学学习中文，经协商安排住在你家。假设你是李华，请给Jeff写一封信，按照下图顺序介绍他来中国后的生活安排。

注意：1. 信的开头已为你写好。 2.词数不少于60。

Dear Jeff,

I’m Hua from Beijing Hongxing Middle School. I’m very happy to learn that you’re going to sta y with my family while you’re in Beijing.

While you are here, we’ll provide you with a room of your own with a bed, a desk, a couple of chairs and a TV. You’ll also have your own bathroom. Our school is quite close to our home, so we could go to school t ogether by bike. At noon we’ll eat at the school dining hall. I’m sure you’ll like the delicious Chinese food there, and enjoy talking with friends over lunch. Classes in our school usually finish at 4 in the afternoon. You can then join other students in playing ball games or swimming. It’ll be a lot of fun.

If you have any questions or requests, please let me know. We’ll try our best to make your stay here in Beijing a pleasant experience.

Best wishes,

Li Hua

[名师点评]

这篇文章的特点还是比较清晰的，第一，作者根据图画将文章的要点概括完整，内容充实而丰富，结构紧凑，有层次感;第二，本文没有采用华丽的辞藻，但用词十分恰当，段落过渡自然，令人耳目一新。

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假如你是李华，美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物，该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信，假如你是李华，美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物，该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信，主要内容如下：

l 表示赞成。l 提出你喜欢的栏目。l 简要说明理由。

注意： 1. 词数100左右。 2. 新的开头和结尾已为你写好。

3. 适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

4. 参考栏目：栏目—column

Dear Mr. Green,

I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.

Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, it’s necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely can’t miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.

Well, I can’t list more. I really can’t wait to read that magazine!

Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

【名师点评】

这是一篇满分作文。由于这篇作文的出现，导致了安徽省该年的英语作文分数普遍偏低。仔细分析了这篇文章，写的的确是好，很地道的美式英语，一些词语的大胆使用，让人不得不猜测此人或者是家人可能有过国外生活的经历，否则这么地道标准的英语，可不是一朝一夕所能写出来的。比如说：my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy和trendy的大胆运用，list, can't wait to 简直是perfect! 况且文章中没有一个错误，不管是书写还是语法。英语能够学到这种程度，不可谓不让人佩服。

二. 非谓语动词为作文添彩

【北京卷】【试题回放】情景作文

假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。

注意：词数不少于60 提示词：郊区suburbs

April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.

【名师点评】

本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文，与环保结合，立意较好。文章思路清晰，要点连贯，在语言的表达上选词新颖，同时运用了分词短语作状语等较好的句式表达。

【北京卷】【试题回放】开放作文

请根据下面提示，写一篇短文，词数不少于50

In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.

What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. He is holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it’s a bit funny, for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the tools for eating noodles. The man in the picture is trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the hard way. Maybe using one fork will do a better job, In my opinion, we don’t need to copy others’ ways of thinking. Sometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way.

【名师点评】

本文是开放性作文，要求考生把握好图画内容，发散表达。考生重点要看出这个人是卷发高鼻的外国人，要体会到西式刀叉对中式食物的矛盾性。行文结构十分明晰，同时句式使用得熟练而准确。

三. 复合句为写作增色

【全国卷】【试题回放】

假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫(panda),一直通过有关网站(website)关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她的母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一封信：