新高考英语读后续写讲义

2021新高考英语读后续写讲义

一．从教学情况看，学生续写主要存在四个方面问题：

1）对原文的理解不到位，续写文不对题；

2）与段落开头语的衔接不合理，行文逻辑不清；

3）情节安排不合理或无话可说；

4）语言表达上，词汇低级且出现较多的语法错误，表达不准确。此外，目前的续写教学以讲评课、分析课居多，真正系统有效的语言输入很少。与概要写作一样，读后续写作为高考英语大作文，时间紧，任务重，考前一定要有足够的准备与积累。

9.A setting

I closed my eyes to enjoy the gentle breeze and the sounds of the clash ing waves. Gently opening my eyes, I saw my parents taking a relaxing stroll along the beach.

The cave was dark and everything was silent. I couldn’t even see my hand in front of my face.I knew this adventure was going to be something that I would never forget.

(201711浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para 2: We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.I looked out of the car window, winding rivers, lofty mountains, sunny beaches and deep valleys holding me entirely in their fascination. （视觉+环境描写+拟人）

10.An action

Furry started wagging his tail and running around in circles when he saw his master taking a leash out from the drawer. Furry was all ready for his evening walk.

(201711浙江高考读后续写范文摘录)Para 1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Dad exchanged a glance with me. Why not camp to satisfy Mom? （动作描写+问句衔接）

11.Sound effects

BOOM, CRASH! The wind was howling outside of my house. We were having a terrible thunder storm. I was very scared.

12. A question

Have you ever been on a self-driving trip? Let me tell you an exciting trip my family took this summer.

Why does trouble always follow me around? Do I have a "kick me" sign on my back or something?

技能提升二动作描写

一、动作描写的原则

1.要精准

使用精准化动作类词汇对动作进行细致描写,用一系列小动作而不用大动作或者用含义比较明确的动词而不用抽象或虚化的动词来描述,可以使描写更加具体生动。试比较下面两句:

①The little boy said sorry to his mother.

②The little boy hung his head and mumbled an apology to his mother.

分析:①句中“said sorry to”不带任何感情色彩,而②句中使用了具体化的表示“说”的动词mumbled,从而使一个不愿意道歉又不得不道歉的小男孩的形象栩栩如生地复现在读者脑海中。

2.有过程

记叙文中有不少动作描写是一连串动作过程的展示。尤其在展示人物个性的动作时,如果我们蜻蜓点水、一笔带过,就很难突出人物形象,也很难给人以深刻的印象,而通过细节描写展现出动作的过程,表现力便会大增。如:

①She went to catch the butterfly.

②She crept along the path, bent over swiftly and cupped her hands around the butterfly gently.

分析:①句在描写主人公捕捉蝴蝶的动作时,没有细节的动作描写,因此显得很平淡。而②句运用了creep, bend, cup三个连贯的动词生动具体地描述了主人公小心翼翼捕捉蝴蝶的微妙过程,具有极强的画面感。因此,在续写过程中,在必要的地方恰当使用一连串的动词来表示过程,能为文章增添不少色彩。

3.用修辞

除了在动词上做调整,还可以利用恰当的修辞手法来帮助描写动作。比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞手法都能让动作描写变得更有表现力。

(1)比喻

①The old man’s face wrinkled.

②The old man’s face was like a withered apple.

(2)拟人

①My stomach was aching for not eating on time.

②My stomach was punishing me for not eating on time.

(3)夸张

①When she heard the bad news, she cried.

②When she heard the bad news, a river of tears poured out.

分析:上面每组中的②句分别使用了比喻、拟人、夸张的修辞手法,使得动作的描述更加生动形象,更加吸引眼球。

二、动作描写的素材

1.与“看、听、说”相关的词块

①listen impatiently不耐烦地听

②glare angrily at sb.对某人怒目而视

③glance around/round the room扫视房间

④stare at凝视

⑤take a look at看

⑥overhear a funny conversation无意间听到一段好笑的谈话

⑦remark评论说

⑧add补充说

2.与“跑、跳、行走”等相关的词块

①walk across a street步行穿过马路

②walk arm in arm臂挽着臂走

③pace back and forth来回踱步

④jump to one’s feet一跃而起

⑤walk gracefully步态优美地走

⑥rush out of the room冲出房间

技能提升三心理描写

心理描写的原则

1.落实“细微处”描写