龙舟训练营 和 博物馆讲解员详解

存在问题：
1. 开头结尾缺乏交际性： 开头： 写信目的： 我想参加+邀请对方参加 结尾：希望对方能来 2. 要点不齐，缺乏开放性（ 括号里内容没提） 3. 时态用错（ 将来时） 4. 语言质量差，语法错误太多（汉语式英语太严 重） 5. 细节要适度添加，避免节外生枝 6. 卷面乱，书写不规范（ 先构思，在一卷上写写， 不要用涂改液）
内容要点、必要细节、时间线
寒假之前 寒假伊始
要点：申请 细节：网上申请
要点：讲解
要点：参加培训 细节：培训内容
培训之后
寒假结束
细节：讲解主题
要点：获得表彰 细节：称号、心情
Possible Version（112词）
During this winter vacation, I worked as a volunteer guide in the National Museum of China. It was an extremely unforgettable opportunity. A few days before the vacation, I applied for the job online. Not long after, I was lucky enough to be given the job. Then I attended a 5day training course as soon as the vacation began. I was taught how to be both an informative and entertaining tour guide. This was very useful, as I had not done this type of work before. After that, every day over the following two weeks, I gave tours around the Silk Road exhibition, which gave an interesting insight into China’s past. I was delighted to be praised for being an outstanding volunteer at the end of the vacation.
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假设你是红星中学高二（1）班的学生李华，请根据以下 四幅图的先后顺序，为校刊“英语园地”写一篇短文，记述 寒假期间你在中国国家博物馆做志愿讲解员的经历。
注意：1. 词数不少于60。 2. 短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数。 During this winter vacation, I worked as a volunteer guide in the National Museum of China.
四、书面表达
第一节 （15分） 假如你是红星中学高三李华，请给你的美国朋友Jim写一 封信，告诉他你打算参加龙舟训练营，希望他一起参加， 邮件的内容包括： 1. 介绍训练营的相关内容（例如；时间，地点，参加者 等） 2. 说明你打算参加的原因； 3. 询问对方的意向。 注意： 1. 词数不少于50； 2. 开头和结尾已给出， 不计入总词数。 提示词：龙舟训练营 Dragon Boat Training Camp Dear Jim, Yours, Li Hua
Dear Jim, I’m writing to tell you my exciting plan for the summer holiday. I want to join a Dragon Boat Training Camp. I wonder if you would like to go with me. This camp will open on July 20th. It offers teenagers like you and me a chance to enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture. If you are interested in it, let me know and I’ll send you more information. Hope to meet you at the training camp this summer. Yours, Lihua