雅思写作评分标准解读

Unit1 –评分标准解读
4-5分的考生特点
5.5- 6分的考生特点
一、TR
1，误解题目，扩大或缩小范围。

Fast food restaurants have increased around the world. Some people argue that it has a negative effect on both families and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Volunteer work organised by middle schools brings more benefits than problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
2, 忽视对比与比较。

The government should spend money on public facilities rather than support artistic projects or artists. Do you agree or disagree?
3，论述中不断重复一个观点，不加以解释与论述。

Parents are important in shaping children’s perception of the world. It is clear that many children’s behaviour and ideas are affected by parents. If parents do not behave well, their behaviour can have a negative effect on children. This will affect children’s success in adulthood.
4, 段落中间观点太多，没有分类逐个论述与拓展。

The Olympics can create a lot of economic benefits and also benefit people’s health. People can practise sports everyday. They can earn more money because of job opportunities. With physical fitness, they can perform their jobs very well. Their income will also increase, good for the whole society.
二、CC （Coherence and Cohesion）
1，段落中间没有明确的中心句，论述过程与中心句没有关系。

Children are too young to distinguish right from wrong. They watch television every day and do not study. They drop out of schools or fight with their peers. It is true that television
viewing is not good for children.
2, 过多使用连接词，或不恰当。

It is undeniable that the government should spend money on art. This is because the
government has a lot of money. Obviously, art is important to our life. However, other things can not be as important as art to us.
3，论据与中心句不符
刑法的争议
A longer prison term is a effective way to deter the potential offenders. The logic
behind this idea is that breaking laws can pose a threat to social stability, many criminals will carry weapons after they commit a crime, in order to ensuring citizens' safety, the
goveronment should take actions to curb crime.
改 A long prison term is a effective way to deter both prospective offenders（潜在犯罪者）and habitual offenders(惯犯). The logic behind this idea is that imprisonment means a loss of freedom, a consequence that no rational person is willing to take. This is particularly true when it has an impact on their lives, including their career and families, so people are less likely to commit crimes.
4，无关转移
城市建设
Redesign historical buildings need to cost much money,if the goveronment use the financial support to help people from less well-off background,the gap between rich and poor will relieve.
旧城重建需要花费钱–政府应把这笔钱来资助穷人–减少贫富差距点评：一个问题没解决并不代表着另一个问题不值得解决。

改：1）大的旧城改造需要将居民搬离–给居民正常生活与工作带来不便–尤其是老年人或在附近上学的孩子–他们需要时间适应新的环境。

2）如果如果设计不合理- 可能会毁坏文化古迹–使得后代缺少途径了解历史，缺乏文化认同感。

5，逻辑词
6, 用冗长套句。

直接引起考官反感，导致分数低。

Moral Education has become one of the most controversial issues around the world while many people have a hard time reaching a consensus on the importance of moral education.
教育不是充满争议的，不需要统一通过。

7，代词使用不准确
Children today are spoilt in material ways by their parents. They may not know what matters most in their lives.
8，分段不准确
三、LR （Lexical Resource）
1，狂背替换词/词伙，却不知道用法。

Deleterious
2, 重复用词
Working at home is useful for employees. They can manage their time flexibly if they are allowed to work at home. Working at home is particularly important for those who can not work on a full-time basis.
Work from home.
Teleworking.
Home-based employees.
四、GR（Grammatical Range and Accuracy）
1，词伙用错
Many parents have no time communicate with children.
2，句型要多变
互联网的消极影响
Using network can exert great harm to bodies, such as shortsightedness
and obesity .On the other hand, if people depend on the cyber space,
many dwellers are likely to live alone, there will be less face -to-face communications .
These can cause alienation.
Although telecommunications bring about a variety of advantages, it has its drawbacks.(连接上文中互联网的好处) Using net work…… What’ more , what worries the public is that people tend to depend on the cyber world, （现象）thereby（因果，引出表层结果）the opportunity for individuals to communicate face to face is diminishing, which is responsible for the alienation among members of the society.（引出深层结果）
其他
抒情不是论证
国际援助
Think of all the poor, starving African children! How could rich countries be so cruel as not to help them?
In some countries the problems that people face are much more serious than those in our own communities, and it is often even easier to help. For example, when children are dying from curable diseases in African countries, governments and individuals in richer countries can save lives simply by paying for vaccines that already exist. A small donation to an international charity might have a much greater impact than helping in our local area.
绝对化
健康生活
Fast food has become one of the most widely discussed issues in some countries, especailly in the countries with unhealthy people, such as the USA. Many fast food restaurants like McDonald's and KFC offer foods with little nutrition, and thus we cannot expect any fast food restaurant to provide us with nutritious foods.
改Fast food has become one of the most widely discussed issues in some countries,such as the United State, where the number of obese people has grown rapidly. This is not only because the fast food like hamburgers, fried chicken and pizzas contain high fat, sugar, salt and calories but also it is always served in large protions.
3，假大空
作业少- 孩子有更多的时间陪伴家人- 有利于家庭和谐, 社会稳定。

4中西思维- 考官是否好follow
5Under length 字数不够
6 Memorised 背诵
7. Illegible 字迹潦草。

因为考官不会因为你写的不清楚而去仔细辨认你写的是什么!
两种：齐头式和缩进式.
齐头式:每段首字母都顶格，段与段之间空一行.
缩进式:要求每段的首字母缩进4到5个字母.
齐头式的更整洁，剑桥考官的满分作文也都是齐头式，所以比较推荐齐头式。

字迹:把握一个原则：清晰易懂。

写正楷，不要写连笔字，在夏天很容易花掉。

女生注意字不能写太小。

各题型写法。