七年级下册英语写作指导

写作指导

【写作任务】

假设你是王林，上周你作为交换生来到英国学习，并住进了你的寄宿家庭。你的英国好友尼克(Nick)发信息询问你的住宿情况。请你写一篇不少于70词的短文，向他作简单介绍。

【任务分析】

本次写作任务要求对朋友的询问进行回复，介绍自己的住宿环境。出于礼貌，应该首先对朋友的关心表示感谢。在正文部分可以按照由外到内、由大到小的顺序来写，即首先介绍整体环境，然后说明周边设施，最后写房间内部特征等。【学生习作】

Thank you for asking, Nick. My host family live in a great neighborhood. There is a restaurant on the left of the house. On the right of it is a supermarket. There is also a library near it. I like the library. A small garden is behind the house and a bank is across from it. I have a small room in the house. It’s clean and tidy. Everyone in the host family is nice to me.

【习作点评】

1. 该习作作者基本按照由大到小的顺序对自己的住宿环境进行了介绍，最后还写到了寄宿家庭的成员对自己的态度，是一篇结构清晰、内容完整的习作。

2. 该习作中用到了there be句型及多个表示方位的介词短语，用法准确、灵活，体现了作者扎实的英语功底。

3. 作者在描写周边设施时，顺序稍显混乱。相比之下，图书馆的位置应该较远，应该放到该部分的最后再介绍，这样会使习作显得更条理。

【习作改进】

Thank you for asking, Nick. My host family live in a great neighborhood. There is a restaurant on the left of the house. On the right of it is a supermarket. A small garden is behind the house and a bank is across from it. There is also a library near it.

I like the library. I have a small room in the house. It’s clean and tidy. Everyone in the host family is nice to me.