高中英语新高考-英语写作分析—思维和措辞的规律谈

高中英语新高考-英语写作分析—思维和措辞的规律谈

写作是一种乐趣。

请认真阅读下面有关中学生自信心现状调查的柱状图及相关文字，并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。

Self-confidence is an attitude which allows individuals to have positive yet realistic views of themselves and their situations. People who are not self-confident depend excessively on the approval of others in order to feel good about themselves. They tend to avoid taking risks because they fear failure. They generally do not expect to be successful. They often put themselves down and tend to discount or ignore compliments paid to them.

【写作内容】

1. 用约30个单词概述饼状图信息的主要内容；

2. 简要分析中学生培养自信心的重要性（不少于两点）；

3. 根据你的分析，谈谈中学生自信心培养的途径和方法。

【写作要求】

1. 写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句；

3. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；

4. 不必写标题。

【评分标准】

内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。

概括：

图：

找趋势：学生普遍不自信

找极端：不敢表现

most students lack confidence especially in expressing themselves in pulic

文：

第一段说的是重要性：Sel-confidence plays a big role in shaping one's perspective.

第二段列举各种缺乏自信的后果，不要细说：Lacking confidence will do much harm.

合并：

Sel-confidence plays a big role in shaping one's perspective, while lacking confidence will do much harm. However, It is reported that most students lack confidence especially in expressing themselves in pulic.

要点二：

思路：

自信属于正能量的范畴，正能量的因素很多，譬如：motivation, purpose, passion, active, success, brave...而且互为因果，即：你可以说自信的人有激情，自信的人有目标等，同样，你也可以说有激情的人有自信，有目标的人有自信等。

虽然这是套路，但鸡汤文不都是这样吗？所以读鸡汤文犹如看韩剧，看到开头基本猜到结尾。

第一层：self-confidence is a constant source of passion.

第二层：self-confidence encourages one to overcome whatever gets in the way.

主题句有了，下面就开始推敲了，我直接写好，请仔细揣摩：

Self-confidence undoubtedly facilitates our pursuit of goals and keeps our passion. (主题句要有，命题人说总分总的结构。）For one thing, it is not uncommon for us to come across many difficulties on the way to success. With confidence, we can cultivate a positive way of thinking（这也是照应材料）and rise up to challenges instead of giving up with fear. For another, self-confidence serves as a constant source of enthusiasm, which is a must to success. It is also the driving force motivating us to develop our potential to the full.

分析：

你不难看出我用到了非常多的鸡汤类词块，你需要背诵的。

1. undoubtedly之类的词不要少了，起到润滑剂作用；

2. facilitate相当于help，这是09真题作文的最后一句，注意它的宾语；

3. pursuit虽说不在3500里，但是太常见了，动词是pursue，能提高观感；

4. It is not uncommon that...这也是高考真题的常用句型，用句型能有效防止汉式英语的出现，所以我通常建议考生要多几个it句型。

5.cultivate这个词同样也是鸡汤文里常见的词；

6.rise up the challenges迎难而上

7.instead of doing...用一个选择性的表达加强对比，你也可以用rather than...，甚至句型prefer...to...

8.serve as代替be动词是一个很好的形式

9. make sb happy可以用a source of代替

10.driving force也是比喻了，现在英语文章中少不了比喻。

要点三：

要牢记：材料很重要！如何培养自信？文章说，处事能力差；思维方式消极；学习不如他人；不敢公开场合表现。那我们反其道而行之！第一层：处理能力差--》多实践

第二层：思维方式消极--》多和有目标的人相处，读一些积极方面的好书

第三层：学习不如他人--》正确看到自己的长处

第四层：不敢表现--》多参加社团活动

The following tips, if followed, will help us in developing self-confidence, I believe. (本句是我给成绩不怎么好的学生量身定