高考作文公开课最终版

用一句话表达 ① Kate is a new student. ② She comes from a northern province. ③ She speaks a dialect. ④ We find it hard to understand her dialect. Kate, a new student from a northern province, speaks a dialect which we find hard to understand. --G9
Body（文章主体）
告知展览的时间、地点和内容 Tip2：时间地点写详细
Structure 文章结构
Place： City museum Time： at weekends
Location！
from June 16th and last for more than a week from 8 a.m. to 5p.m. every weekend in July Content：A large number of paper-cut works will be on show.
2. 抓准要点，勾勒题纲
3. 紧扣要点，扩写成句
4. 修饰文章，提升层次 5. 添加过渡，确保连贯 6. 查错补漏，工整抄写
1. 认真审题，把握主题
假定你是李华，想邀请外教Henry一起参观中国剪纸艺术展。 请给他写一封邮件，内容包括： 1. 展览的时间、地点； 2. 展览内容。 注意：1. 词数100词左右 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯
Nothing is impossible to a willing heart.
Two heads are better than one.
Practice makes perfect.
2018高考全国卷写作阅卷标准
月考
给出的要点信息量少
Add proper information
过多的使用简单句
Linking words makes the sentence logical 逻辑连词
Q: What varied expressions can be used to improve your sentence?
同位语 介词和介词短语 定语从句 非谓语动词 逻辑连词
Dear Henry, How’s everything going? I’m Lihua. I’m a student from your class. I’m writing to invite you to see the exhibition of the paper-cutting. It is a Chinese folk art and has a long history. The exhibition will be held in City museum. It is located in the north of our city. It will start from June 16th and last for more than a week. A large number of paper-cut works will be on show. Some of them are made by famous artists. The works are about animals, people and other things. When we visit this exhibition, we will enjoy the folk art and learn a lot. If you are interested, please e-mail me. We can make it any day to visit the exhibition. Looking forward to you early reply. Yours, Two heads are better than one！ Lihua
有了Tom的帮助，我们很快就找到了他们的 村子。 With the help of Tom, we soon found their village. ---- G7
4)借助非谓语动词短语做定语或状语
他们站在大树下，等待着总统的到来。
Standing under the big tree, they are waiting for the president. ---G4
Group work!
Presentation!
requirements: (1~10’) 1. varied expressions are used 1’ each 2. logical and coherent 1’ 3. good handwriting 1’
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李立，男，19岁，1999年生；籍贯：广东。
2)借助介词做定语 李飞，男，10岁，棕色短发，身穿白色 茄克。 Li Fei is a ten-year-old boy with short brown hair and a white jacket. ---G1
Short and clear！
3)借助介词短语做状语
Ending（结尾） 期盼回信
5. 修饰文章，提升层次 Dear Henry, How’s everything going? I’m Lihua. I’m a student from your class. I’m writing to invite you to see the exhibition of the papercutting. It is a Chinese folk art and has a long history. The exhibition will be held in City museum. It is located in the north of our city. It will start from June 16th and last for more than a week. A large number of paper-cut works will be on show. Some of them are made by famous artists. The works are about animals, people and other things. When we visit this exhibition, we will enjoy the folk art and learn a lot. If you are interested, please e-mail me. We can make it any day to visit the exhibition. Looking forward to you early reply. Yours, Lihua
合并句子 ① Not everyone is good at learning English. ② Children from primary school start to learn English and Chinese at the same time.
③ This will affect their Chinese study. 方法1： Not everyone is good at learning English, but children from primary school start to learn English and Chinese at the same time, which will affect their Chinese study. ----G6
5) 用好定语从句 中国，地处亚洲东部；特点：地大物 博、人口众多。
China, which lies in the east of Asia, is a great country with a large area and population as well as rich natural resources. China, located in the east of Asia, has a vast area and rich natural resources as well as a large population . ----G6
How’s everything going? I’m Lihua. I’m a student from your class.
How to add proper information to the key points?
Tip1：进一步解释名词
I’m writing to invite you to see the exhibition of the paper-cutting. It is a Chinese folk art and has a long history.
体裁： 人称： 时态：
邀请信 第一、二人称 一般现在时
2. 抓准要点，勾勒题纲
Beginning (开头) 问候、自我介绍、写信目的
Structure 文章结构
Body（文章主体）
告知展览的时间、地点和 内容
Ending（结尾） 期盼回信
3. 紧扣要点，扩写成句 Beginning (开头) 问候、自我介绍、写信目的
exhibition n. 展览
be on show
2017，全国II
• 假定你是李华，想邀请外教Henry一起参观中 国剪纸艺术展。请给他写一封邮件，内容包 括： • 1. 展览的时间、地点； • 2. 展览内容。 • 注意：1. 词数100词左右 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯
1. 认真审题，把握主题
Homework evaluation
Nothing is impossible to a willing heart!
1)借助名词短语做同位语 Li Li, a 19-year-old boy, was born in Guangdong in 1999. --- G3
Short and clear！
Whose works? Some are made by famous artists.
What? The works are about animals, people and other things. Benefits? We can enjoy the folk art and learn a lot. Tip3: 加上原因、条件、结果 If you are interested, please e-mail me.
Paper cutting
Paper cutting is one of China’s most popular traditional folk arts(民间艺术). Chinese paper cutting has a history of more than 1,500 years. During the Spring Festival and Weddings, people often decorate (装饰)their homes with paper cutting in order to enhance the joyous atmosphere.
Use varied expressions
Learning aims
• To be clear about the steps of writing a composition • To master the ways of adding information (important point) • To be able to use the varied expressions (difficult point)