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新高考英语作文新题型——概要写作，怎样科学备考？

概要写作题型特点

概要写作（ summary ），《牛津高阶英语词典》（第8版）对它的定义如下 : “A summary is a brief statement that gives only the main points of something not the details。也就是要求考生在整”体把握原文的前提下，用自己简

洁、精练的语言，对原文的主旨大意进行高度的浓缩，写出一篇语义连贯的短文，也可称之为摘要。这一题型

一方面考查学生通过阅读获取文章主旨大意和关键词的能力，另一方面也考查学生的写作能力即用简洁的语言

概括文章重要信息的能力以及对文章整体结构的把握能力。因此，概要写作是基于阅读理解和书面表达的，是二者的有机结合体，是阅读理解和书面表达的沟通桥梁。

从《考试说明》上对概要写作的评分原则以及各档次的给分范围和要求的规定中，我们可以发现概要写

作有以下特点：

客观性：概要写作其实是一种客观的复述，在正确理解原文的基础上，用自己的语言忠实地再现作者的

思想，写作内容要全面，既不能漏掉任何要点，也不能随意增加内容；写作时要尽可能避免使用原文中的字句。

考生应通过释义的方式，用自己的语言呈现原文主要内容。需要注意的是，考生不能对原文进行解释和评论，

也不能掺杂任何个人想法，或做出任何评判，因此不能出现“I believe ”, “I think等字句。”

简洁性：简洁是概要写作的一个显着特点。概要写作是一种对原文“浓缩”后产生的新语篇，通过删除原

文中的细节减少例证，简化描述内容以及去除重复来实现语言的简洁性，但是简洁的同时还要做到意义的完整。

连贯性：概要写作并不是写提纲那样只是要点的罗列。写概要时，必须在各要点之间增加一些体现逻辑

的关系词，使概要衔接紧密、脉络清晰。写出的概要读起来要完整连贯、独立成篇。

分析把握评分原则

《考试说明》中关于概要的评分原则中第一条：本题总分为25分，按 5 个档次给分；评分时，先根据所

写概要的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。其中最高

档次第五档（ 21-25 分）的给分描述如下：理解准确，涵盖全部要点；能准确使用相应的语法结构和词汇；有

效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所完成的概要结构紧凑；完全使用自己的语言。

根据以上的评分原则，我们该如何正确把握概要写作呢？下面以《考试说明》中概要写作的样题为例：

阅读下面短文，然后用60 个单词左右概括短文的要点。?

Getting rid of dirt, in the opinion of most people, is a good thing. However, there is nothing fixed about attitudes

to dirt.

In the early 16th century, people thought that dirt on the skin was a means to block out disease, as medical

opinion had it that washing off dirt with hot water could open up the skin and let ills in. A particular danger was

thought to lie in public baths. By 1538, the French king had closed the bath houses in his kingdom. So did the king of England in 1546. Thus began a long time when the rich and the poor in Europe lived with dirt in a friendly way. Henry

IV, King of France, was famously dirty. Upon learning that a nobleman had taken a bath, the king ordered that, to

avoid the attack of disease, the nobleman should not go out.

Though the belief in the advantage of dirt was long-lived, dirt has no longer been regarded as a nice

neighbor ever since the 18th century. Scientifically speaking, cleaning away dirt is good to health. Clean water supply

and hand washing are practical means of preventing disease. Yet, it seems that standards of cleanliness have moved beyond science since World War Ⅱ . Advertisements repeatedly sell the idea; clothes need to be whiter than white,

cloths ever softer, surfaces to shine. Has the hate for dirt, however, gone too far?

Attitudes to dirt still differ hugely nowadays. Many first-time parents nervously try to warn their children off touching dirt, which might be responsible for the spread of disease. On the contrary, Mary Ruebush, an American immunologist ( 免疫学家 ), encourages children to play in the dirt to build up a strong immune system. And the latter position is gaining some reason.

首先通过阅读我们知道文章一共有 4 段，它按照时间的顺序、总-分的方式来陈述人们在不同时期对于

Attitudes towards dirt have been changing over time。文章第一段的第二句是全文的主旨，

“ dirt的不”同观点，

即

第二、三、四段都是在不同时期人们对于“dirt 的”不同看法，基本可以确定attitudes 、 dirt和time为全文的关键词。其中第二段是讲在16 世纪，欧洲一些国家特别是英法两国中的皇室贵族们对于“dirt 的”态度；第三段是讲

在 18 世纪时，人们对于“dirt 态”度发生的变化；第四段则是讲述现在人们虽然仍对却有越来越多的人认为playing in the dirt help people build a strong immune system

“dirt 持”有不同的观点，但是。通过梳理整合这些要点，可

以得出文章的概要。

浙江省英语教研员葛炳芳老师在关于新高考读后续写和概要写作的指导性讲座中，分享了自己写的样题的概要范文：

Attitudes towards dirt have been changing over time. In the 16th century, people believed that dirt on the skin helped protect against disease. Since the 18th century, however, people have developed the belief that cleaning away dirt can prevent disease. Today, although attitudes to dirt still differ sharply, more and more people choose to believe that playing in the dirt can help build up a strong immune.(60 words)

对照上述评分原则，可以发现此范文：（1）精确地表达了文本所有 4 个要点，并且对文本的内容进行了归纳、提炼和整合；（ 2）准确地使用了相应的语法结构和词汇，例如在表达“持有某种观点”这一意思的时候，选用了三个不同的表达方法“believe，”“develop the belief ，“”choose to believe ，避”免了重复；（ 3）上下文之

间用了恰当的连接词“however”，“although等”，使行文紧凑浑然一体；（4）对文中的要点运用语义转换，完全使用自己的语言来表达；例如要点 1 用 Attitudes towards dirt have been changing代替原文第一段的第二句话there is nothing fixed about attitudes to dirt；要点2用protect against disease代替b lock out against ；要点 3 中用

prevent disease 代替is good for health ；要点 4 用today 代替 nowadays，用sharply 代替 hugely ，用 more and more people choose to believe代替gaining some ground ；（ 5）全文60 词，非常符合词数要求。

四大写作步骤

概要写作是一项复杂的思维任务，要从一篇350 词以内的短文中提炼出60 词左右的内容概要，必须要掌

握一定的方法，它要求写作者具有很高的阅读和重组技巧。因此，其写作过程也较为复杂，考生可以按照以下

四个步骤进行：

Step 1 通读全文概要写作是一种

理解文本大意

“阅读 + 写作”的复合性任务，是有效并真实测试考生语言综合运用能力的项目。第一遍通

读全文，理解文本大意，可以帮助考生从宏观上把握文本的行文逻辑、篇章结构和主旨，为写作奠定基础。

Step 2细读文本理清信息主次

概要写作的一个重要功能就是测试考生对所获信息进行整理、加工与概括的能力及策略。文章的重要内

容是为了表明作者的写作目的或论证作者观点而使用的具体论据，具有高度的概括性，属于概要写作中的必要

信息。而细节往往起到突出或强调等作用。写作时要把握文章的主次，分析原文的内容和结构。简明扼要地表

述出文章的主要内容并注意结构上的先后顺序，同时要避免出现遗漏或胡乱增添要点的现象。

Step 3 梳理整合灵活表达要点

要点全面是评分的重要方面，在概要写作时只有把每段的大意都包括在内才能确保要点的全面。但是，

要点全面不是把每段的段落大意简单地相加，而是需要我们对要表达的内容进行梳理，在梳理的基础上进行整

合。为了避免使用原文句子，考生需要灵活采用同义词或近义词进行替换，用不同的句式进行转换。此外，为

了用自己的语言写出准确连贯的概要，还需要对相关要点进行灵活调整，并用丰富的语言、灵活的句式进行表

达。

Step 4 检查修改确定写作终稿

概要写作要求结构完整合理、语言表达规范。学生对要点进行梳理整合后，按顺序组合在一起就成了初

稿。按照概要写作的评分标准，在文章完成之后还需要对其进行适当检查修改，这样才能成为终稿。除了检查要

点是否齐全、观点是否与原文一致、各要点的衔接与过渡是否自然、词数是否符合要求这些重要的点以外，

考生还需要注意书写规范、字迹工整、卷面整洁。

给教师的两点备考建议

纵观学生的习作，主要有三类问题：运用太多细节的内容而不是概括语言；没有包含文章的所有要点；

没有完全用自己的语言来表达。针对这三个问题，在平时的教学中，教师要有的放矢地对学生进行训练和培养。

提高学生提取文章要点的能力

概要写作是基于原文理解对所读内容进行简要概述的过程。因此，扎实的阅读理解能力是基础，读懂、

读透原文是第一要务，在这个过程中阅读策略是有力的保证。因此，教师要培养学生区分主要观点、事实与一

般支撑性事实的技能，从而能概括出文本的主旨、要点和次要点，在写作时知道哪些是主要的，要保留，哪些

是不太重要的，可以忽略；要培养学生辨识文段主旨及其发展脉络的能力，从而把握文本的整体框架，写作时

能做到层次分明、条理清楚；要培养学生识别文体特征的能力，知道不同文体的不同谋篇布局、遣词造句等特

征，从而能更好地理解文本并根据其特征写出与之相匹配的概要。

提取文章要点、次要点及关键词或词组的方法主要有两种：取舍法，即在原文上用下划线标出重点内容、

关键词句，划掉与中心大意不紧密的内容；列提纲法，即按原文的层次结构，将文章的中心大意、要点、次要

点都用自己的语言逐一列出，以便组织概要。

培养学生灵活释义转述的能力

概要写作要求学生在表达时完全使用自己的语言，而学生在习作中往往不能做到这一点，究其原因在于

语言基础薄弱，词汇积累不够以及句法知识掌握不全面。夯实学生语言基础首先要扩大学生的词汇量，让学生

了解这些词的用法，同时要培养学生的释义转述能力。学生要想通顺地释义句子，首先必须对原句有透彻的理

解，然后用自己熟悉的词汇、句型加以表达。概要写作的释义转述方法我们可以从以下 5 个方面来对学生进行

训练：改变语序；转化词性；反义表达；同义词语代替；改变句子结构。只有当学生在平时积累并学会了熟练

使用这些释义转换能力，才能在考场上游刃有余地发挥。同时，在日常翻译练习中，教师也可有意识地引导学

生一句多译，增强语言运用的灵活性；也可以让学生多练习句型转换这种题型。

新高考英语作文新题型——读后续写，如何有效复习？

读后续写是新高考英语科目中的新题型，很多同学仍不太熟悉。今天，浙考微君邀请资深阅卷老师从2016

年 10 月英语首考的真题切入，教大家如何复习。

首考真题回放

第二节读后续写

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the

forest. Unfortunately ,on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel .By the time they reached

the lake ,Jane was so angry that she said to Tom,“ I’ m going to find a better spotandforwalkedusto campaway.

”

With no path to follow ,Jane just walked on for quite a long time .After she had climbed to a high place ,she

turned around ,hoping to see the lake .To her surprise ,she saw nothing but forest and ,far beyond ,a snowcapped

mountain top .She suddenly realized that she was lost.

“ Tom! ” she cried.“ Help!”

No reply .If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom .Jane kept moving ,but the farther she

walked ,the more confused she became .As night was beginning to fall ,Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the

night .Lying awake in the dark ,Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family .She wanted to hold him and

tell him how much she loved him.

Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling( 滴落 )somewhere at a distance.

Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few

berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and

hope it would lead her to the lake.

As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the

trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead.

Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.

But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.__________________________________

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It was daybreak when Jane woke up .___________________________________________________

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注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150 左右；

2.应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

答题情况分析及审题建议

第一，从逻辑方面来看，大部分考生对故事的主要情节拓展基本做到了合情合理，衔接较为顺畅。但是，

也有不少考生构思能力较为欠缺，无法在短时间内理清故事脉络以及写作意图，对所给的十个关键词、两段开

头语中提供的线索信息没有很好利用，未实现语言交际的目的。

第二，从语言方面来看，大多数考生能做到语言的基本正确。但是很多考生仍然基础薄弱，不能用英文

传达意义，出现一些低级错误。

第三，抄袭现象比较严重。抄袭的情况一般分为三类：抄自续写原文部分，抄自试卷的其他部分（如阅

读题），或者之前背诵的某一段文章。由于读后续写的内容连贯性强，抄袭的同学很难浑水摸鱼，往往以零分

或低分告终。

第四，内容创新不够，平淡无奇。既然是故事，需要一定的情节构思和布局，不要求考生必须出奇制胜，

但也需要考生能有较清晰的逻辑思维能力和一定的创造能力，情节合情合理，达到最后的合理收官。

第五，整体卷面美观程度有待提高，行文书写体现不了语言美。

审题可从两层面入手

读后续写，可以说是英语写作的“集大成者”，它包含了“写作”、“阅读”、“分析”、“创造”。其中，最难的

是合理的创造，即逻辑。那么，如何才能在故事续写中做到合理审题、合理创造呢？我们可以从结构阅读、情

节阅读两个层面分析。

既然是英语阅读，那么无论是读后续写的篇章，还是阅读理解题中的文章，都应该坚持阅读的最重要一

步：分析全文结构。阅读理解类的文章，主要涉及社科类，偶尔有叙事类。但是，读后续写主要以故事类文本

为主，阅读理解中的结构分析法仿佛一下子失去了作用。确实，故事类文本的分析与社科类文本的分析有很大

区别。故事可能在逻辑上缺乏科学性，在情节上充满跳跃性。不过，所有故事都离不开六要素：“who,when, where,

what, how, why”。这才是故事的真正结构，因此考生在阅读时，不应该走马观花看情节，而应找出文章的六要

素，然后将每个主要事件都用六要素串联成一句话。这样一来，冗长的故事就成了两三句，文章的结构自然水

落石出。同时，考生还应该分析答题纸中已给出的两个开头句包含的主要句子结构，这样才能保证正确的写作

方向。

情节是故事生命力所在，不论一个故事辞藻多么华丽，没有精妙的情节安排，词汇都成了一纸空壳。为

了写出符合故事发展的“尾巴”，就必须先分析原文的情节发展方向。除了采用上文提到过的六要素分析法，在

审题时还应该着重分析三个点：起因、转折、高潮。这三个点中，最重要的是起因与转折。大家或许会问：为

什么高潮部分不是最重要的？因为故事高潮基本都会留给考生自己去创造，即使原文中出现了故事的高潮，那

也是次要的。只有确定了故事的起因，考生才能合理推断这个起因会导致的可能结果；只有确定了故事的转折，

考生才能合理地将故事发展下去。不过，在设计情节时，同样要考虑六要素，将它们串联成一句话，再将这句

话添砖加瓦变成段落。

优秀范例点评

范例一

But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the

forest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memory

crowded in and she couldn’ t help crying,“ Hadn’ tTom,Iquarrewa l kedwithaway and climbed to the high place, I

wouldn ’ t be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying.” She regretted with endless a then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.

It was daybreak when Jane woke up . Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged

her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others ’ attention. Fortunventuallytely,noticshedwas e and brought into the helicopter. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As

tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.

【点评】

该篇作文在逻辑、语言方面做到了平衡、全面、出色。

首先，在逻辑上，该篇文章做到了合理合情：起初，主人公身陷森林，内心充满了悔恨，在面对困难时

焦虑、畏惧；之后，主人公努力求生，最终获救，并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。纵观整个故事，情节发展不

仅符合两段给出的开头所限定的情景要求，而且还设置了一定的悬念，增强了故事的可读性。

在语言上，这篇文章并没有一味采用大词、难词，而是在高中词汇范围内精挑细选，活用了许多小词，

增加了许多阅读趣味。例如，文章第一句“an absolute darkness ruled the forest 辞手法，让森林阴森黑暗的一面展露无遗，同时描绘出主人公身处绝境的紧迫性。在中，“”rule一”词就使用了拟人的修

“Eager and excited, she

flagged her yellow blouse...一句中，”直接将情绪形容词放在句首，使用了非谓语动词的语法，表达精练。

此外，“There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief.一句中，使用了”几个

短句，却包含了两处非谓语动词语法，同时活用了“wear一”词，把两个人相见时的场景生动地描绘了出来。

总体来说，这篇文章反映出该考生课外阅读较多，平时应有较多练笔。

范例二

But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Clusters of stars decorated the vast sky, weakly

shining in the moon-eclipsed darkness. Rages and apprehension calmed down and exhaustions came

dominating Jane as she hopelessly fell down into the soft grass. The transparent stream sounded amusing and was no

longer as infuriated as the stream of her mind hours ago. She thought about Tom, memories flooding out as she closed

her eyes and recalled the kindness of him. Regretfully, she fell asleep, flower singing adhering to her ears (flowers

singing adhering to her ears).

It was daybreak when Jane woke up . Sunshine embraced the forest plain, reflecting to bloom her yellow

blouse to be an attractive“ flower” . In her sleepyhelicoptereys, was right in the sky. Wild with joy, she jumped up,

grabbing the blouse and flourishing it while crying. The helicopter spotted her and began to land on the grass.

“ It Tom’s! I know he will, he will come!” A pair of astounded hand reached Jane’ s cheek.“ Where did yo something happened to you, I’ ll always have it on my conscience.” They hugged more tightly.“ I ’ m 【点评】

这篇文章最大的特色就是语言能力非常突出。

首先，全文使用了非常多的高级词汇，如“cluster, rage, dominate, infuriated 等等。这”些词汇不仅准确地描

绘出人物的动作，而且对环境描写也更为生动。不过，其词汇的使用也有一些只求大、不注意词义搭配自然程

度的嫌疑，甚至有误用，如“adhere, flourish, astound 等。在”修辞方面，文章多处使用拟人修辞手法，如“Clusters

of stars decorated the vast sky, weakly shining in the moon-eclipsed darkness. 以及”“ Sunshine embraced the forest

plain. 两”句中，两个动词“ decorate，“” embrace使”用了拟人。在语法上，全文主要使用非谓语动词，力

求用最精练的语言表达出最生动的画面。

值得一提的是，文章虽然没有使用许多句式，但却从没给读者句子重复、单调的感觉，究其原因，是作

者巧妙地给每句话设置了不同的主语。另外，本文每句话采用的写作切入角度也值得研究。例如，第一段中，

作者从远景（stars, sky ）到近景（ stream），再到细节特写（ears），勾勒出了故事发生的不同场景，让故事显

得有血有肉，情节丰满，这也成为了文章逻辑上的出彩点。

范例三

But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again . Desperate and hopeless, Jane knelt down, tears

streaming down her face. Never in her wildest dream had she thought that she would run into such serious trouble.

However, she had no alternative but pace back and forth in the forest. It suddenly occurred to her that she had a family

and Tom to attend to, anyway, she should try her best to find the lake. After seemingly a long time, Jane felt tired

and lay down in the darkness.

It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She picked up the confidence and slowly walked along the stream. To her

great joy, she eventually arrived at an open area. Praying that the helicopter would come back again, Jane sat down.

After what seemed a long time, she could hear a voice somewhere at a distance. With her eyes sparkling, she struggled

to her fe et and shouted, “ I ’ m here! ” To her surprise, it was Tom. Upon seeing Jane, Tom immediately rushed out to her, folding his arms around her.

【点评】

首先，在逻辑上，文章前半段对剧情的合理拓展非常符合情境：主人公从悔恨到无奈，最终鼓起勇气寻

在语言方面，文章使用了多种句型，如“Never in her wildest dream had she thought that she would run into

such serious trouble. 一句使”用了倒装句；“ It suddenly occurred to her that she had a family and Tom to attend to.一

句用了主语从句；“Praying that the helicopter will come back again, Jane sat down.一句使用了”非谓语动词。句型

的多变避免了句子的单调乏味，使文章更有灵性。同时，一些词汇的使用也使文章比较生动，例如“Desperate and hopeless, Jane knelt down, tear streaming down her face.一句中，“ stream”的”使用非常贴切。

范例四

But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again . Feeling unbearably cold and extremely exhausted,

Jane was quite at a loss as to how to cope with the terrible situation. She could do nothing but keep on going to find an

open place, praying that the helicopter would come again. Nevertheless, there was not a soul in sight

and everything was so dead-looking. Being in the depth of despair, Jane tried in vain to keep back her tears and

promised herself that she would by no means quarrel with Tom again. So weak was Jane that she lay on the

ground and fell asleep again.

It was daybreak when Jane woke up . To her great joy, a helicopter was just right over her head. She yelled with

all her strength in a desperate attempt to free herself. This time, luckily, Jane was spotted and ultimately saved by the

people in the helicopter. Then she was sent to the local police station. At the front door stood her dear husband who

suffered great anxiety when Jane was nowhere to be found. Tears of joy and relief welled up as they finally held each

other tightly. Jane yellow’s blouse was badly worn out but that ’ s no big deal. What was more significant wastheythat started to know that toleration would always be the best policy.

【点评】

out

该作文最大的亮点在于其语言的地道性。

”等词。同时，该考生的组句能力也非常出色。

从文中使用了“at a loss，“”in a desperate attempt，“”spot，”“worn

文章中出现了多个长句、复杂句，例如“ Feeling unbearably cold

and extremely exhausted, Jane was quite at a loss as to how to cope with the terrible situation. 一句中，非谓语动词是”其中的亮点语法，表达了人物当时的身体状况。

值得一提的是，该篇作文中没有一处出现人物对话，但仍然保证了故事的可读性与真实感。为何？因为

作者对故事的各个情境、人物的动作、心理活动等方面都进行了细致入微的描绘，代替了语言相对简单的对话，反而让文章的语言显得更书面化。这一点，值得各位考生借鉴——人物对话写得越多，意味着作文的口语程度

越高，往往不太容易得分，如果犯错，却容易失分，所以不太建议用大量对话。

考场写作注意三点

审题：逻辑与情节的碰撞

读后续写作为新题型，对学生的审题在量与质两方面提出了前所未有的复杂要求。面对长篇文章，许多

考生第一想法是直接下手阅读，但是，我们在分析叙事篇章时，应该先追本溯源，明确其写作六要素。不论故

事多么复杂，都可以把其中的主要事件用六要素串联成单句。

再来谈谈情节。根据情节逻辑的发展，在合理合情的范围内发散故事情节，用短句或关键词写下故事剩

余部分的大事件：转折点、高潮、结局。这样一来，故事的骨架就设立起来了，在之后的写作过程中，考生能

避免写偏写怪。例如：

第一段：“No more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. 可以理解”成作者的述，也可以当成 Jane 形的判断，故接下来写 :a) Jane 如何吃如何找到安全的地方休息，如何心失望与后悔并鼓励自己

持下去。b) Jane 放弃直升机救，在月光等条件允下沿着stream 走，走到lake。

无 a 是 b， Jane 都在不安与期待中入睡。

第二段： a)Jane 救，可以是直升机方式，也可以是走到lake 到 Tom,可以半路上到Tom 所在的救援；当然，最好的方式是直升机救。b）救的表情、作与心情也重点描。c）尾可作短的点

。

如果是摔倒，体力不支昏迷，可以第二段写人在医院或家里。

后写中有一个新、重要的要求：五个及以上下划。我可以按照以下方法下划

：⑴将每个下划与六要素一一；⑵ 找出 who, what, how 的下划，些就是文章的主干信息点，考生尽量多些，

易于后文的故事。

写作：持信、达、雅

“信、达、雅”分指准确、句正确、言美。方面，我已在上文深入分析。那么如何做到句正确、言美？

⑴句正确：性形不可乱

典型的性形有：与名混用，形容与副混用，数形式用，用，名复数形式用。

例如：① because she want to?②; Jane want to wait;③ But she succeed;④ She flag her yellow blouse at a distance ;⑤ She hold him and tell him how much she loved him.;⑥ Ehausted, she fall asleep.

正确版：①because she wanted to?②; Jane wanted to wait;③ But she succeeded;④ She flagged her yellow blouse at a distance;⑤She held him and told him how much she loved him;⑥ Exhausted, she fell asleep.

⑵言美：大用、小用活

例如“Clusters of stars decorated the vast sky, weakly shining in the moon -eclipsed darkness.一”眼看去，

句非常出色。法上使用了非；言上使用了多大，如“cluster, eclipse 。不” ，大好，

注意正确性，小普通，却也能画点睛。如“weakly 就”是点睛之笔。“weakly本”意“虚弱地”，在

句中表达的是星星的景象。

复：言、、范

写后复是作文的保杠，复主要关注、句型、、点等。句型，考生重句子的法与气，一定要分析

句子主干是否完整，同，句子的肯定、否定等气也需要仔。

的也是必不可少的。要注意在上下文中用合适的。需要指出的是，的

也是的表。如果在短短的上下文中大量采用，反而可能生硬。点的正确写也很容易被忽。逗号与句号的清晰写也

是需要考生关注的。

另外，需要仔其他的一致性，如人称的一致性、复数的一致性。

最后需要下划的用、字数控制和卷面整等.