汉译英

2011-10-12
• “一只泪流满面的猴子”----走兽和佛教的文化与语言 一只泪流满面的猴子” 一只泪流满面的猴子 • 一只泪流满面的猴子 • 这只猴子没有父亲和亲人，缺乏管教成了他最大的缺 这只猴子没有父亲和亲人， 当他日益强大的时候， 点。当他日益强大的时候，这个缺点给了他一个终生难忘 的教训，他被一个叫释迦的和尚用一座大山压了五百年。 的教训，他被一个叫释迦的和尚用一座大山压了五百年。 • 我在一本名叫《西游记》 我在一本名叫《西游记》的书里读到关于这只猴子的 故事。他后来被另外一个姓唐的和尚救了， 故事。他后来被另外一个姓唐的和尚救了，保护姓唐的和 尚去取一本据说要经过很多艰险才能取到的经书。 尚去取一本据说要经过很多艰险才能取到的经书。经书当 然取到了，而他据说也成了正果。 然取到了，而他据说也成了正果。 • 这个故事具有很强的趣味性，几乎欺骗了我整个童年。 这个故事具有很强的趣味性，几乎欺骗了我整个童年。 • 多年后，我给我的孩子又讲这只猴子的故事， 多年后，我给我的孩子又讲这只猴子的故事，讲到他 被救了之后，保护师父历尽艰险去西天取经。 被救了之后，保护师父历尽艰险去西天取经。孩子忽然对 我说： 孙悟空真可怜。 我说：“孙悟空真可怜。” •
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• “照旧为人服务”：“为人服务”：serve 可做及物动词： serve sb.coffee…;serve 加介词：They serve as a model;I serve for 2 years as the monitor of the class…; • 译例：”照旧”：1.as usual(没吃透原文)2.silently(走样， 与原文不符); “为人服务”：serve for people(见上); • 4语态错误： • “饿成皮骨”:They are greatly starving.(starved) • 5.大概式翻译： “饿成皮骨”:greatly ；“无肉即去”： leave if there is no good. • 6.拼写错误：“不忠诚”:unloyalty; “主人穷”master’s poorness;hitted • 7.语法错误：“或者是因为狗的脾气好，不像猫那样傲慢， 所以中国人不说“走猫”而说“走狗？”标题“dog” • Perhaps it is because dogs have better temper than cants, they are not as arrogant as cats, Chinese people don’t say “zou gou”, instead, they say…
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他泪流满面。
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This story is so interesting that it almost beguiled thewhole of my childhood. • Many, many years later, I started to amuse my kid with the same story. One day, when I came to the formidable ordeals the monkey underwent while performing his duty, my son suddenly murmured “Monkey King is really very pitiable!” • Surprised, I asked why. He replied. “What’s the point of accompanying a good-for-nothing master on his trip to get those worthless sciptures? He should have rebelled again.” • This answer kept me awake the whole of that night. As day was breaking, I seemed to see again the face which often appeared in my dream while I myself was a kid, the face of that monkey of course. 2011-10-12 • The monkey is weeping! • 学生译文中常见的错误：
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我有些不解， 我有些不解，问孩子 为什么。孩子说， 为什么。孩子说，他干吗 要跟一个什么都不会的笨 师父去取一本不知道拿来 做什么的破经呢？ 做什么的破经呢？他应该 再大闹天宫。 再大闹天宫。 • 那一夜，我整夜都不 能入睡，黎明的时候，我 似乎又看到那张小时侯经 常出现在梦中的脸，他当 然还是一张猴脸。
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Dogs always remain man’s faithful servants though they are underfed and kicked and beaten without any reason. A dog continues to perform with loyal devotion the duty of guarding the door and keeping watch at night though he has been starved to a skeleton and kicked at by his master. He never minds how poor his master is. Such an animal deserves our high praise. We should attribute to them such laudatory epithets as “devotion”, “loyalty”, “content with poverty”, “courage”, etc. But I wonder why we have been undiscriminatingly calling traitors and villains “running dogs”, as if dogs were disloyal and unfaithful animals. I should voice grievances for them! • Cats, however, are greedy and lazy. They come to you when you have meat to offer, but otherwise leave you. Flunkeys of imperialism and 2011-10-12 mean persons should have been called “running cats”.
• 我就又觉得:”觉得”would think(have an opinion but not sure) • 译例：could think;could feel;I think;I will think;I will say… • “喊冤叫屈”:voice grievances:plead grievances • 译例：cry the justice;I am unfair for them… • “不分黑白”distinguishing good and wrong • 4.用词不准确： • “洋奴”：flunkeys of imperialism • 译例：slaves of the foreigners;lackey of foreigners（ok） • 5.意思错误：“猫才是好吃懒作，有肉即来，无食即去的 东西”Cats are truly animals who eat their own flesh,(走样，与原文不符)
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学生译文错误分析： 学生译文错误分析： 1.“异”调处中的错误：形象、模糊与写实精准 “狗虽那么摸不着吃”：汉语生动形象 “they are underfed” 舍去形象，却准确传达意思 译例：can’t seek for food;get nothing to eat;(顶字)they are hungry;can’t find food;they are starved(不准确) • 2.对号入座： • “随便就被人踢两脚”：kicked without any reason • 译例：“随便”at random; “被人”by people; “踢两 at “ by “ 脚”kicked by people；“好字眼”：good words; • 3. 惯用法和句型错误： • “狗永远不嫌主人穷。”：He never minds how poor his master is. • 译例：Dogs never mind their master’s poverty. “not mind” （无此表达法）；“would not care if …is poor”(走样，歪 曲原文) • “mind”(v.)加副词：I don’t mind a bit;加介词：Never mind about that;加从句：Mind if I come in?;I don’t mind when 2011-10-12 you come home;加doing：Would you mind helping me?
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还有：狗虽那么摸不着吃，那么随便就被人踢两脚，打 两棍，可是它们还是照旧的替人们服务。尽管饿成皮骨， 尽管它们刚刚被主人踹了两脚，它们还是极忠诚的去尽 看门守夜的责任。狗永远不嫌主人穷。这样的动物理应得 到人们的赞美，而忠诚、义气、安贫、勇敢，等等好字眼 都该归之于狗。可是，我不晓得为什么中国人不分黑白的 把汉奸与小人叫作走狗，倒仿佛是不忠诚不义气的动物。 我为狗喊冤叫屈！ • 猫才是好吃懒作，有肉即来，无食即去的东西。洋奴与 小人理应被叫作“走猫”。 • 或者是因为狗的脾气好，不像猫那样傲慢，所以中国人 不说“走猫”而说“走狗”？假若真是那样，我就又觉得 人们未免有点“软的欺，硬的怕”了！ • 不过，也许有一种狗，学名叫“走狗”；那我还不大清 楚。