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As can be seen from the two charts, we are able to know the numbers of visits to and from the UK from 1969 to 1989 as well as the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1989.（替换词转述，替换词语不够高级）

In the first chart, it was indicated that both visits to and from the UK were maintaining growth during this twenty years and they shared a sharp increase in the year of 1975. By contrast, the total amount of visits from the UK all this time was larger than that of visits to the UK and especially in 1989, the number is 52 million and 28 million respectively, reaching the biggest gap in two decades.（重点图表解释的不够详细）

According to the second chart, the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1989 was France with nearly 11.5 million visitors, while Spain was in the second place with nearly 10 million visitors. Others, were USA, Greece and Turkey from high to low sequence. Each number of these countries’ visitors did not reach 5 million.（略写图表不够简洁）

Overall, the tourism industry was booming from 1969 to 1989 and UK residents were keen on travelling to romantic countries like France and Spain. (没有解释原因！)

The two charts respectively illustrate the figures of UK citizens travelling abroad and foreign tourists visiting the UK from 1969 to 1989, and the preferred countries for UK residents in 1989. (替换词转述)

From the graph，apparently，we can access the fact that the number of UK residents going abroad was always more than that of people visiting the UK in two decades. In detail, from 1969 to about 1975 the number of UK residents increased gradually, but from 1975 to 1989 it jumped sharply. In 1969 the number hit a trough at about 12 million while the peak 52 million in 1989. Similarly, from 1969 to 1989 the number of people to the UK was always on the increase, and compared with the first line, it was more stable. Furthermore, the bar chart presented detailed information of UK travelers’ most popular destinations in 1989. France and Spain were similar in popularity with 12 and 9 million, whereas Turkey, Greece and USA were less attractive.

Based on the statistics, perhaps more holidays and higher pays promote UK people to enjoy more travelling.

Unfolds the fact that…

The chart provides some interesting data regarding the proportion of spending of people from the five different countries in 2002.

From the graph , apparently, expenditure on eating had the highest percentage among all the categories. In particular, with the percentage of 28.91% and 32.14% respectively, people from Ireland and Turkey would like to spend more money on food, drinks or tobacco than people from other countries whose percentage stayed between 15% and 19%. Furthermore, clothing or footwear expenditure ranked No.2 among all the categories. In terms of clothing items, the proportion of spending of Italians ranked No.1 at 9% while others were around 6%. Lastly, when it comes to leisure or education expenditure, the percentage jumped tremendously to less than 5%. Spain accounted for 1.98% which is the lowest, whereas Turkey got the highest 4.35%.

All in all, since eating is our everyday need there is no doubt that the expenditure on eating accounted for the most percentage. Other spending, say clothing, leisure and education, are less frequently consumed compared to eating. These differences may be a result of In the rest of cities,