专业外教批改雅思作文范例

TA/TR 5 ♦ addresses the task only partially; the format may be inappropriate in places

♦ expresses a position but the development is not always clear and there may be no conclusions drawn

♦ presents some main ideas but these are limited and not sufficiently developed; there may be irrelevant detail

CC 5 ♦ presents information with some organization but there may be a lack of overall progression ♦ makes inadequate, inaccurate or over-use of cohesive devices

♦may be repetitive because of lack of referencing and substitution

♦ may not write in paragraphs, or paragraphing may be inadequate

LR 6 ♦ uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task

♦ attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy

♦makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication

GRA 6 ♦ uses a variety of complex structures

♦ produces frequent error-free sentences

♦ has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors

Score 22/5.5

Other Items Affecting Score

Under length √No. of words 249 Penalty .5 Off-topic x Memorized ——Illegible ——Overall Band

Score

5.5-.5=5

band range band range

9 [35-36] 4 [15-17)

8.5 [33-35) 3.5 [13-15)

8 [31-33) 3 [11-13)

7.5 [29-31) 2.5 [9-11)

7 [27-29) 2 [7-9)

6.5 [25-27) 1.5 [5-7)

6 [23-25) 1 [3-5)

5.5 [21-23) 0.5 [1-3) 5 [19-21) 0 [0-1) 4.5 [17-19) ————

Hello dear student, it’s time to check your writing. You may notice some minimal or maximal changes in your essay which will help you improve your writing abilities, to meet the standards of IELTS writing.

First we will review the question

This is an argument type of question

Viewpoint Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school Task Discuss if the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

My article:

Now, let us review your introduction

Nowadays, the problem whether children should accept foreign language courses at primary school or secondary school is under debate. People’s point varies from person to person. Personally, I prefer to the former view that children should begin learning foreign language at primary school. Structure You were able to present a social background, a

viewpoint and your opinion

Coherence and Cohesion Coherence and correlation is evident

V ocabulary Adequate vocabulary collocations were utilized Grammar Adequate range of structure was utilized

Notes and Suggestions Modify your introduction with the provided

modifications to make it more profound and clear