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独立5-现象证明P21 2010.10.31NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier to become educated than in the past.

Education is the foundation of a country. People today have a stronger concept（搭配不当，改为sense）of being educated than in the past. I agree with the statement that people gain an easier access to all kinds of educations at current times.

Firstly, there are much more schools available today than in the past. No matter where you live, in big cities or in the countryside, the local government spends a large amount of money on the constructions of various types of schools, such as primary schools, middle schools, high schools and even schools for adults. More and more universities and colleges have been built to ensure higher education for top students. If you want to study in schools, you will always find a proper one to attend.

Secondly, the teaching approach diversifies（there are diversified teaching approaches）. Except for（In addition to包括在内）blackboard and chalks, many advanced teaching devices are being used today in most schools, including computers, multi-media and some other instruments. Moreover, labs and libraries have also come into use for students to study deeper and

wider (who want to make a deeper and wider study on the fields they are interested in).What is more, the teachers' teaching levels are greatly improved by communicating with other educators from all over the world. The technology becomes more developed than in the past, so it is easier now to study.

Thirdly, people have equal rights to receive education. As we all know, people in the past were in terrible discrimination because of their sex and race(many people such as women and the black people were denied the right to education because they were discriminated against in the society because of their sex and race. 两句合起来)For example, women and black people were used to be considered as people in lower classes or even slaves and weren't allowed to go to school.However, they have equal rights to study in schools nowadays. （要回到主题，和更容易接受教育要直接联系起来，所以再加一句）Obviously, these people surly have easier access to education.

To sum up, almost everyone today has equal rights to go to all kinds of schools with diversified teaching approaches. So people do have an easier way to receive education now than in past times. The reasons above firmly support my opinion(最后一句话不够有力，可以将三点简明扼要的用一句话概括).(Word Count: 294)

独立8-包含因果关系P15 2010.3.20NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today can solve many important problems so they do not need help from the government.

With the development of the society, people can do more things by themselves nowadays （于什么时候比较？）than in the past.But I disagree with the statement that people can solve many important problems, therefore the government does not need to help them（therefore they need not depend on the government for any support）. There (are) three reasons as follows:

Firstly, People today still cannot solve many important problems by themselves in fact in terms of education, unemployment, war, starvation, poverty and so on. These are international problems all over the world, so a single person or even a group of people may not have the abilities to solve (be capable of solving) them. For example, if a man wants to stop a war between two countries, even he is powerful or wealthy, he (he, however wealthy and powerful,) cannot prevent them from fighting with each other without the help of others.

Secondly, people today need more help from the government. As the life standards are getting higher, people have more requirements than before.