Chapter 8_Week8

RTQ Read The Question!
• In china, it is a common scene that every
students should take part in gaokao test. Because it is a necessary way that everyone goes to the university.
How to Show
1. Create Images
2. Use Active verbs 3. Use concrete nouns
4. Use figures of speech
5. Use dialogue
1: Images
• Images are effective when they activate
• No ‗consequence‘ included here
RTQ Read The Question
• Gaokao testing is an most important
competition for Chinese students.
• No consequence included,
Mid-term Exams
• Average score: 74
• Median score: 77 • Most points were lost on the paragraphs
• Unclear topic sentences
Question 7, good topic sentences
your senses!
• Sight • Sound • Smell • Touch • Taste
• Including these descriptions will ‗bring the
page to life‘
Imagery
• ―As we walked around
the corner we were suddenly hit in the face by a putrid, rotten smell. It was as if we had walked into a wall, and we stood there, tottering, unable to continue. The cause was a smelly Tofu stand a few feet away, that Chinese delicacy that always made my nose shrivel up uncontrollably.‖
• Gaokao testing makes the majority of Chinese
students feel that they are under much pressure all the time. • Gaokao testing brings China more and more students who can study the book knowledge very well but can not put them into practice. • Lack of exercises is one of the consequences of gaokao testing on Chinese students. • Gaokao testing makes Chinese students bookish
unicycle--a gift I received last Christmas from a close friend. The clown's short yellow hair, made of yarn, covers its ears but is parted above the eyes. The blue eyes are outlined in black with thin, dark lashes flowing from the brows. It has cherry-red cheeks, nose, and lips, and its broad grin disappears into the wide, white ruffle around its neck. The clown wears a fluffy, twotone nylon costume. The left side of the outfit is light blue, and the right side is red. The two colors merge in a dark line that runs down the center of the small outfit. Surrounding its ankles and disguising its long black shoes are big pink bows. The white spokes on the wheels of the unicycle gather in the center and expand to the black tire so that the wheel somewhat resembles the inner half of a grapefruit. The clown and unicycle together stand about a foot high. As a cherished gift from my good friend Tran, this colorful figure greets me with a smile every time I enter my room.
3: Concrete nouns
Abstract nouns Concrete Nouns
What is Descriptive Essay Writing?
• Descriptive writing creates a picture:
• Of a person • A place • An object • States of mind, etc.
• The closest analogy of descriptive writing is
2: Use Action Verbs that create movement
Improve these sentences by changing the underlined verbs: 1.Mike was in his chair during math class. 2.The Ford Taurus went down Elm Street. 3.Tony left the room. 4.I said, ―no‖. 5.Thunder was heard. 6.The petulant child made no―It is early morning and Huang Xiaoqiang is making chaoshou.
He sits in front of the ingredients: a bowl of pork filling, a plate of small square dough wrappers, a bowl of water, a pan. He holds a chopstick. He picks up a wrapper in one hand. With the chopstick he draws out a pinch of pork filling and places it in the square of dough. Then he dips the chopstick in the water, and uses it to fold the corners of the wrapper around the meat. The finished dumpling extends in two points, one crossing on top of the other. He drops the dumpling in the pan. Elsewhere in China this food is called hundun, but the Sichuanese have their own way of speaking, and they call it chaoshou—‖crossed hands‖—because of the way the corners of the dumpling overlap. In most parts of Sichuan, you can walk into a restaurant and order chaoshou without making a sound. Cross your arms and they will understand exactly what you want.‖ • --Peter Hessler, River Town, p. 268
to a painter.
• Instead of paint, the writer has words, phrases, and
sentences.
Example ―A friendly clown‖
• On one corner of my dresser sits a smiling toy clown on a tiny
• ―We went to Guilin for my birthday and had a great
time.‖ • ―We got on the train on time.‖
Show, don‘t tell!
• ―When we arrived in
Guilin for my birthday, we took a bamboo boat across the Lijiang river, and marveled at the endless Karst rock formations that poked up the city from like giant stone eggs covered in mossy vegetation.‖