作文专题公开课

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我们提倡文章表达要简洁，但并不是简 单，文章要想上档次，还应避免句子 类型单一，用词简单呆板，通篇简单 句、陈述句等，还应力求句式多变， 长短相间，用词丰富、讲究。如： important 可有不同的表达，vital/of great importance/significant/of great significance/essential 等。
趁热打铁 假如你是李华。最近你收到了你在美国的朋 友Bill给你寄来的生日礼物，同时他还为地 震灾区的孩子们捐赠了很多的钱物。请你给 他写一封电子邮件，对他表示感谢，并询问 他近期的学习情况。(50字左右) 提示：震区 quake-stricken area
1.It's a great pleasure /honour to have received from the presents which you sent. 2.I'm writing this letter to convey my .. 3.You have donated some money and belongings to the children in the quake-stricken area, which is very kind and generous of you.
话题一：感谢
亮点表达仿写
1.It was generous and considerate of you to put me up when I was in need. 1.你真是太慷慨大方太善解人意了，在我困 2.Thank you so much for putting me up when 难的时候给我提供了膳宿。 I was in need .It was so generous and considerate of you to do so. 2. 我谨代表我们学校全体同学对你们给我们 On behalf of all the students in our shool, 送来如此多的图书表示真挚的感谢。 I’d like to express my sincere 3. 询问补考时间及课外作业 appreciation/gratitude for so(如阅读书目、作 many books you’ve sent to us. 业要求）
话题一：感谢，询问
范文赏析 话题一：感谢 Dear Bill, It’s such a pleasant surprise to hear from you. I'm writing to express my sincere thanks to you for the nice gift you sent me. I like it in the meanwhile, very much.And at the same time I truly appreciate what you have done for the children in the quake-stricken area.it’s so kind and generous of you to do this.How are you getting along with your study recently? Would you please ring me up if you have trouble in studying Chinese? Wish you all the best. And looking forward to
keep on helping
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单词拼写 1.During the past several years, we have recived received lots of clothes, books and menoy money which you provided. 2.Moved by your virtue virtul, I have determined to contribute to our social/sociaty. society kind 3.I hope that I could become a kindness people like you. I must help others who needs assistent. assistance 4.What I want to say most is that I'm more than appreciate grateful foryour assistance from my bottom of my heart.
应用了较多 的语法结构 和词汇
光荣榜
吴晨25 李玲 25 代金磊24周轩羽 23 杜维兴23刘恩琪23 孙忠艳 25 葛学风 24 王林23李宗法24 王阳 23（进 步很大）岳文娟 23 闫明星23
卷面整洁者
孙晓婷（两处涂改）尹鹏 管佩煜（三处改 动）李慧（两处涂改） 逄惠 王晶 张烽萍
优美句子展示
1.All words fail to express how grateful we are to you（王瑞雪） 2.But for /without your help ,We couldn’t have enjoyed our school life so much.（马凯文） 3.What worried us most is your health. （马凯文） 4.I will devote my life to helping others who are in trouble. （孙腾） 5.It is you who do us a favour without hesitation when we are in trouble.(代金磊) 6.Considering the fact that you are so old, we are eager to know if your body is strong enough to lead a normal life. (代 金磊) 7.Your deed has moved me so much that I made up my mind to devote myself to serving our society. (代金磊) 8.I hope you can live as healthy and peaceful a life as we do.(李玲)
书面表达 之 赢取高分策略 ----话题（感谢，道歉，遗憾，询 问）
(09)假设你是李华，曾在美国学校，现现已回国。你想联系你的美国老师 Mr.Smith.但没有其联系方式，请根据以下几点给你的美国同学Tom写一封信： 1． 感谢Tom对你英语学习的帮助； 2． 询问Mr. Smith的近况并索要其联系方式； 3． 邀请Tom在春节期间来中国感受中国文化。 (10)假设你是新华中学的学生李华，你和在上海上学的英国朋友Tom约好下周末 去北京旅游，但你因故不能赴约。请根据以下要点用英语给他写一封电子邮件： 1. 表示道歉 2. 解释原因 3. 另约时间 (11)假设你是李华，你的美国朋友Tom上个月来到北京学习。七月份你将去北京 参加暑期中学生英语演讲比赛(speech contest)，你在资料搜集、语言运用等方 面遇到了困难。请根据以下要点给Tom写一封电子邮件： 1．询问Tom的生活和学习情况；2．谈谈你的困难并请Tom帮忙； 3．告诉Tom你打算赛后去看他。 (2013)假如你是新华中学的学生李华，你的美国朋友Tom一周前给你发电子邮件， 询问你暑假里的打算，但你因准备期末考试未能及时回复。请根据双下要点给他 回封邮件： 1.未及时回信的原因 2.你假期的打算（如做兼职、旅行、做志愿者等） (2014潍坊一模)假设你是新华中学的学生李华，你周末滑冰时不慎将胳膊摔折， 因而未能参加英语考试。请根据以下要点给你的外籍教师Mrs．Clemens写一封 电子邮件： 1．表达歉意并解释缺考原因； 2．询问补考时间及课外作业(如阅读书目、作业要求等)。
语法用错 1.Considering you are old, everyone who what you help wants to give you some presents. 2.But for /without your help,I couldn’t finish my education. couldn't have finished 词性错误 1.I ’ m behalf of all students you ever on behalf of .....,I convey ourwho appreciation helped to you convey our appreciate to you. 2.Above all , we all form a habit of help others and set up self-confident. helping confidene 3.I hope you have a healthy health body. 4.You must attach important importance to your healthy. health
锦上添花改为高级词汇句型
1.if possible ,I will try my best to make you happy
If possible, I will do what I can to make you delighted.
2.I received so much help from you ,so I decided to help others in return.
Having received so much help from you , I decided to help others in return.
3.I will study hard to help others in need
I will make great efforts to put my heart into study so that I can help others in need .
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用词不当 1.Although you were still sticked to help so many children on your old age, your life was not very well. 2.I can’t appreciate you more. thank 3.Here I stand for the whole I'm writing this letter to you on students behalf of the you ever assisted this letter to whole students you writing ever assisted represent you. touched/affected/struck/moved 4.Influenced by your kindness, I make up my mind to take action to help others who need help.
Learning Aims
1.点评周末考试的作文，背诵优美 词汇段落。 2.掌握道歉，感谢，遗憾的常用句 型，形成自己固定的模式。 3.实战练习。
覆盖所有内 容要点源自文库
高分法宝： 内容要点齐全； 词汇和语法的数量和准确性； 上下文的连贯； 有效地使 语言的得体性。 语言地道， 用了语句
间的连接 成分 规范
话题一：感谢,询问 提分句型背诵
1.I’m writing to express my gratitude/ thanks for your help.（感谢） 2.I would like to convey my heartfelt thanks to you for your selfless help.（感谢） 3.It’s very kind and generous of you to do this for me,and I appreciate it more than I can say. 4.I am wondering if you are going on well with everything.（询问） 5.I would like to know whether you can tell me what books I should read and the requirements of the homework. （询问） 6.How are getting along with your study