雅思写作点评范例
2010年雅思大作文点评
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1月10日
Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to deal with. Others, however, think that each individual should take some actions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
考题分析：本题是一道典型的雅思 (IELTS) 环境类写作考题。在历届雅思 (IELTS) 写作环境类话题中，出题思路主要有以下三个方面：
1.环境保护是谁的责任？考题给出的选项通常会有个人、公司、国家、国际合作等(例如 04 年 5 月 15 日， 0-7 年 2 月 3 日考题) 。
2.如何保护环境？考题通常会给出某个方案问其正确与否(如 06 年 6 月 17 日， 08 年 6 月 14 日考题) 。
3.为什么人们明知环境正在被破坏却不动声色例？(如 08 年 9 月 13 日 A 类议论文)
假如考前对以上三方面的雅思 (IELTS) 写作真题都思考过，相信本题一定会变的很简单，实际上只要把一些理由进行组合就可以了。由于考题的提问形式是“ Discuss both views and give your own opinion. ”所以，既要讨论到个人能够采取何种行动解决一些环境问题，也要讨论为什么有些环境问题个人无法解决(即只有政府或公司才能解决) 。
雅思写作批改范例
Some people think government should pay for public libraries in every town, while others think it is a waste of money because people can access information from the internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is argued that government should invest more money in public libraries; the other people believe that we can search the information from the internet, so government should not cost money in public libraries. I agree with this idea.
Surfing on the internet is the fashion way to search information in modern life, there are a lot of people use computer or mobile phone to find some information on the internet. It is because people believe that internet is the most convenient platform to find the key. People can get all the information they want effectively, rather than go to the library cost a large amount of time to read book.
雅思作文评语英文
雅思作文评语英文
英文：
In my opinion, the IELTS writing evaluation criteria are very important for test takers to understand. The four main criteria are Task Achievement, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resource, and Grammatical Range and Accuracy. Each of these criteria plays a crucial role in determining the overall score for the writing section of the IELTS exam.
Firstly, Task Achievement refers to how well the test taker addresses the task and presents a clear position throughout the essay. It is important to fully answer the question and provide relevant examples to support the arguments. For example, in a discussion essay, it is
crucial to present both sides of the argument and give a clear opinion. Failure to do so may result in a lower score in this criterion.
雅思写作万能模板
说明一物的利弊
1、AAA has improved the quality of our lives and are playing an important role in our daily life. The benefits AAA brings to us are far more than its disadvantages. However, we cannot ignore its problem.
2、On the positive side, AAA has enabled us to (1)此处填入 AAA 的优势之一。For instance, ( 2 )举例说明优势之一。Besides, (3)AAA 的优势之二。Nowadays, (4)举例说明优势之二。In addition, ( 5 ) AAA的优势之三。
3、On the negative side, (6)此处填入 AAA 的劣势之一。For example,(7)举例说明劣势之一。Besides,(8)AAA 的劣势之二。Furthermore,(9)AAA 的劣势之三。
4、All in all, we can not live without AAA for the conveniences it brings to us, but we should also be aware of the negative effects it creates on the modern life.
分析型
1、Recently the...has been brought into focus...Nowhere in history has the issue been more visible. In this essay, I aim to explore this complicated phenomenon from diverse perspectives, identify the relevant contributing factors and bring up some effective measures.
2021雅思写作范文及专家点评- English as a global language
TOPIC English as a global language The discussion about whether English becoming a global language has brought us more benefits than risks is a very controversial one. People can hardly reach a consensus on this issue. Before presenting my view, I would like to explore both sides of the argument.
It is very clear that English as a global language has brought us enormous benefits in all aspects of society, which has greatly promoted our economic development. To begin with，as a tool of cross-cultural communication, English promotes mutual understanding and friendship，removing prejudice and hostility. It is no exaggeration to say that English helps maintain the world peace. Moreover, English offers us a good opportunity to learn from developed countries. For instance, China, a developing country, is in great need of advanced knowledge and technology. English as a global language removes the language barriers for us, so that we can introduce foreign experts to our country more conveniently However, it can not be denied that English also exerts a negative influence on our human civilization. Since English becomes a dominant language, a large number of indigenous languages are on the verge of extinction, which poses potential risks to the cultural diversity. Just imagine, if everyone in the world looks the same, speaks the same, and thinks the same, our world will become a homogenous one. How terrible it is! It is widely accepted that language is the vehicle of culture, so killing language equals killing culture. In doing so, we erase whole histories and bury entire stories, the richness of which the world loses
雅思大作文点评 是否应该禁止动物实验
雅思大作文点评:是否应该禁止动物实验
Some people think we should ban animal experiments. Others think it is necessary for the development of science. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
We all knows（主谓一致错误）that science researches（scientific research 是不是更好呢？！）need experiments. And lots of experiments especially medical and pharmaceutical experiments have the animals, like dogs and monkeys, involved. When coming across the question:” Are animal experiments should be banned （低级错误！！！应该为should animal experiments be banned!!!）?” , people’s opinions differ. (41words)
结构点评：此段没有明确表达作者自己的观点，而是通过最后１句引出下文，写得还比较自然。但是，大家要明白一点，第１段还是明确提出自己观点的好，因为这个常规写法，最主要的是因为考官期望在第１段看到你的观点！！！
雅思雅思教父刘洪波：旅游类雅思作文高分范文及点评
雅思教父刘洪波：旅游类雅思作文高分范文及点评
雅思教父刘洪波2010权威作品
《最简化雅思写作》
8月光芒上市
从零开始，单词、词组、句式、思想
完全应对官方四大评分标准
最新研发最简化15句写作框架模板
涵盖雅思题库各类型高分范文
幽默通俗的语言手把手教出写作高分
中国区前任雅思考官强力推荐
1. 旅游
International travel is becoming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?
Air travel combined with early retirement and people with money to spend has meant that more and more people can travel the world. Some countries, especially those with famous historical sights and beautiful natural scenery try to attract this large market. While there are some problems that can be caused with all this travel, generally it is a positive thing.
雅思写作话题解析：父母和孩子
雅思写作话题解析：父母和孩子
父母和孩子之间的关系永远是经久不衰的话题，也可能会被雅思君考到。下面小编给大家带来雅思写作话题解析：父母和孩子。
雅思写作高分范文：父母和孩子之间的年龄差越来越大，这是好事吗?
In some countries; the difference in age between parents and children is general-
ly greater than it was in the past. Do you think the advantages of the development
outweigh the disadvantages?
Sample Answer [295 words]
There is one constant in life, and that is change. This is seen in the widening generation gap between
parents and offspring. | believe this shift is largely negative and has significant ramifications in the
realm of traditional values and senior citizens.
Since the mid-nineties, China has experienced sweeping changes: poltically, industrially and with the
雅思作文批改范例4
2009年7月11日Some people think that companies and individuals, rather than governments, should pay to clean up pollution that they have caused. To what extent do you agree or disagree with statement?
Topics of pollution never fail to arouse people's attention. Many individuals consider it is reasonable for companies and individuals to spend money on deal ing with environment problem that they have made, while other believe that it should be paid by government. Personally, I am in favor of the latter.
Although many individuals consider it the responsibility of companies and individuals to clean up to pollution caused by them, I still believe that this should be the duty of the government.
经典英语范文及点评_英语作文范文
经典英语范文及点评
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题目：
children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to dealwith the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
范文：
some feel that the children of low income families are better equippedto deal with difficulties posed by the ‘real world’ when they grow up and they also believe the privileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with these difficulties . the implications and veracity of this argument seem self-evident, but in fact require closer examination. ( 58words )
点评：1+ 1 ’ 模式，最后 1 句为主题句。此段的主题句稍微有点特殊，它的确否定了前面所提到的观点，从而表达出了自己的观点，此外还引出了下文。特别是最后半句：but in fact require closer examination ，感觉是在抛砖引玉。
关于读书的雅思作文范文及分析
关于读书的雅思作文范文及分析
书中自有黄金屋，你对读书的看法是什么呢？这是雅思写作中常考的教育类话题，下面小编给大家带来关于读书的雅思作文范文及分析。
雅思Simon考官9分大作文范文：读书与工作
题目：Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
范文： When they finish school, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a job or continue their education. While there are some benefits to getting a job straight after school, I would argue that it is better to go to college or university.
The option to start work straight after school is attractive for several reasons. Many young people want to start earning money as soon as possible. In this way, they can become independent, and they will be able to afford their own house or start a family. In terms of their career, young people who decide to find work, rather than continue their studies, may progress more quickly. They will have the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession. This may lead to promotions and a successful career.
雅思写作大作文5分范文评析
雅思写作大作文5分范文评析
Band 5
Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for
its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should
be the main function of a university?
What knowledge and skills should universities provide has been argued for many years. Some people think that the true function of universities provide knowledge for their own purpose, but nowadays, more
and more people point out that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills according to the workplace.
雅思写作批改--小作文范例1
The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main
features, and make comparisons where relevant
The curves illustrate the change of criminal rate in burglary, car theft and robbery in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.
The change of burglary is drastic. The number of incidents increased sharply from around 3400 in 2003 to about 3800 in 2004. From then on, the inner city welcomed a constant four years drop of burglary which reached the lowest point at about 1100 cases in 2008. The number of burglary were increased again from 2008 to 2009 and then remained generally constant at 1400 from 2009 to 2012.
2011年雅思大作文真题及点评
2011年雅思大作文真题及点评
2011-1-8 (科技类)
Some people think that robots are very important for humans' future development. Others, however, think that robots are a dangerous invention that could have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
本次写作考试点评：大作文是关于机器人的问题，属于旧题，难度不大，而且讨论类的提问方式，考生可以清晰地写出文章的结构框架，考生应注意科技类信息和词汇的补充，并从社会角度探讨科技进步带来的利弊。
2011-1-15 （社会类）
The workplace nowadays is trying to employ the equal number of females and males. Do you think it is a positive or negative trend?
本次写作考试点评：大作文工作类的辩论题目，这一趋势在2010年下半年已经凸显，考生应在今后考试中重视此类题目的准备。本题可根据具体情况进行两面分析：如这样做保证了男女在就业方面的平等，是社会进步的体现；但不考虑到具体岗位设置及性别差异，也会带来一些弊端。
2011-1-22（社会类）
Today there is a great increase in anti-social behaviors and lack of respect to others. What are the causes of this? Who should take responsibility for dealing with it?
雅思作文评语英文
雅思作文评语英文
1. This essay demonstrates a strong grasp of the English language and uses a wide range of vocabulary to express ideas.
2. The writer effectively conveys their opinions and supports them with relevant examples and evidence.
3. The essay is well-organized and each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the topic, making it easy for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought.
4. The writer shows a good understanding of the topic and presents a balanced argument, considering different perspectives before reaching a conclusion.
5. The essay shows a high level of critical thinking and analysis, as the writer evaluates the strengths and weaknesses of different viewpoints.
雅思写作话题精讲：素食主义
雅思写作话题精讲：素食主义
现代以一群人是素食主义者，你觉得这是一种健康的生活方式吗？下面小编给大家带来雅思写作话题精讲：素食主义。
雅思写作大作文高分范文：素食主义真的健康吗?
Some people think everyone should be a vegetarian, because we do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
题目讲解
题目的类型属于单一观点的讨论。话题类型属于生活方式与健康。这道题虽然是一个观点，但是包含了两方面①人人应该成为素食主义者②我们不需要吃肉去保持健康。根据雅思论文相对化VS绝对化的选择，这道题在论述上选择不同意会更容易写些
范文主体思路分析：
主体部分反驳理由一：并不是每个人都要成为素食者，有些特殊人群必定不能只吃素食，比如生长发育期的孩子，对蔬菜过敏的人以及孕妇
主体部分反驳理由二：肉类中的营养不是蔬菜能够代替的，平衡膳食最重要
雅思写作参考范文
People have different views about whether being vegetarians or vegans is more beneficial for human beings. Some people believe that being a vegetarian is better since meat is helpless for people to stay healthy. I doubt this statement as people have right to choose whether to be a vegetarian or not and meat is a regular part of our diet.
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雅思写作点评范例
It is true that a lot of children, from below 3 to high school, would like to spend time in watching a range of TV programs and videos. One of the most obvious reasons for this is that these are so attractive, vivid and touching our lives that the children who are curious cannot resist their temptation at all.
Some people, especially the parents, argue that this is very damaging. They probably begin by pointing out that their children who are limited in
self-control and self-principle will easily take too much time in watching instead of being back to study after doing for a short while. In addition to this, it is well aware that the amount of violence and unhealthy pictures are filled with videos for some reasons. When children who are still simple watch too much amount without any correct guidance, some of them will easily break the laws in the realistic world by imitating the details of crimes.
However, others who disbelieve watching TV or video is bad claim that TV programs and the amount of videos can fully help children understand outside world or relax their stressful brains after intense study. Obviously, those who often watch TV have a wider range of knowledge and better understandings to our society than those who do not. All of this is beneficial to children’s growth and their future social life.
Overall, I would like to say that watching TV or videos are necessary for children who need knowledge and information, but the point is that parents must ensure their children not to watch too much or too long, and at the same time the Government should give a harsh warning to media with overuse of unhealthy contents.
1. This/these之类的词明显不会用，指代不清；
attractive, vivid and touching our lives：明显的并列结构出错；
开头段没有点明作者的观点或者作者要在文中的所做所为。只是简单的改写题目。
2. self-principle??? self-discipline?
take too much time in watching: 主语是人的时候，花费多少时间做某事，不能用take；
instead of being back to study after doing for a short while.：being back to study? 非常别扭的表达方式。
unhealthy pictures？中文化的表达方式（不健康的图片）pornographic ?
'G3`6N)f'e WY4wit is well aware that the amount of violence and unhealthy pictures are filled with videos for some reasons.: 这个句子中谁充满了谁啊？
realistic world：real world？non-virtue world？建议改成daily life
3. better understandings to our society：understanding 之类的词从来不用复数；better understanding to our society？or "of" our society?
All of this：all of what?
4. 结尾段中watching TV or videos are ...明显的第三人称单数错误；
ensure 后面最好用ensure that ... 从句；
and at the same time: 建议前面用句号；
government为什么要大写？只有一个government？
全文没有给出自己的观点，属于跑题！