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Writing Unit 1: 2008、2009 北京高考情景作文介绍

--- 情景作文的写作要求（考试说明）

z内容要点的完整性

z上下文的连贯

z词汇和句式的多样性及语言的准确性

--- 情景作文的评分原则

z以要点内容定档次

z以语言质量定分数（注重整体语言运用能力）

---情景作文的给分档次和要求

第一档18~20分完全完成了试题规定的任务；完全达到了预期的写作目的z覆盖了所有内容要点

z运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇

z语法或用此有个别错误；体现了较强的语言运用能力

z有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，内容连贯、结构紧凑。

第二档15~17分完全完成了试题规定的任务；基本达到了预期的写作目的z覆盖了所有内容要点；

z运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；

z语法和用词基本准确；

z使用了简单的语句间的连接成分，所写内容连贯。

第三档12~14分基本完成了试题规定的任务；基本达到了预期的写作目的z覆盖了内容要点；

z运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求；

z语法和用词有一些错误，但不影响理解。

第四档6~11分未恰当完成试题规定的任务；未能清楚地传达信息z漏掉或未描述清楚主要内容；

z所用句式和词汇有限；

z语法或用词的错误影响了对所写内容的理解。

第五档1~5分未完成试题规定的任务

z明显遗漏主要内容；

z句式单调、用词贫乏；

z语法或用词错误较多，严重影响了对所写内容的理解。

0分未能传达任何信息；所写内容与要求无关

“在线名师”→答疑室随时随地提问互动2009年北京高考情景作文

假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。

注意：词数不少于60

提示词：郊区 suburbs

Step 1--- 审中文信息

Step 2 ---审图

图1内容要点及细节图2内容要点及细节

要点：要点；

细节：细节；

图3内容要点及细节图4内容要点及细节

要点：要点；

细节：细节；

2008北京高考情景作文

假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为校刊英语园地写一篇题为 “Our Spring Outing” 的英文稿件。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，叙述上周你们班从准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。

注意：词数不少于60。

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提示词：游乐园amusement park 垃圾箱 bin

Step 1--- 审中文信息

Step 2 ---审图

图1内容要点及细节图2内容要点及细节

要点：要点：

细节：细节：

图3内容要点及细节图4内容要点及细节

要点：要点：

细节：细节;

2009情景作文各档范文

1

Green Action in Our Class

I am Li Hua from Class 1 Senior 3 in HongXing middle school. On April 12th our class organized an activity to plant trees in suburbs to make our country more beautiful.

Early in the morning on April 12th, my classmates and I went to the suburbs by bicycle. And there was an awful lot of breath-taking scenery on our way there which could be just appreciated in rural areas, seeing, green mountains, golden wheat field and so on, which brought us great joys.

“在线名师”→答疑室随时随地提问互动When we got there, we went into working at once. Some of us dug holes to plant trees and some of us took the little trees to the holes. What’s more, there were also some careful girls watering the trees which were just planted. Thanks to our great efforts, all the trees were soon planted and two of our classmates even put up a board reading “love and protect the trees” in front of the little forest made by us. After all the hard work, we also took photos of our whole class with tools in our hand in front of the trees.

Exhausted but happy, we had a significant day and I hope our country will be more beautiful because of the decorating of trees!

点评：（覆盖了所有内容要点，有细节描述，句式和词汇较丰富，所写内容连贯，结构清晰，体现较强的语言运用能力。 17~18分）

2

I’m Li Hua a student of Seniro 3 class of Hong Xing Middle School.

In order to respond to the appealation of making our courntry greener, our class decided to go to suburbs to plant trees on April, 12th.

Early in the morning, we went to the destination by bike. There are many trees and rice by the side of the road. On our way to there, we enjoyed the beautiful view and talked happily. As soon as we got there, we began to work. Some of us dug, some burried, some watered and the rest took the trees to places where need them. After planting trees, we chose an obvious place to make a sign read “ Protect treess” stand to prevent people from cutting trees. At last, we took photes in front of the trees. Almost worn out as we were, we extremely excited, for we did a qualification deed.

点评：（基本覆盖了全部内容要点，细节描写不够充分，基本完成规定的写作任务。存在语法和用词等错误。 12 分）

3

Hong Xing middle school had an activity to make the country green than before on April 12nd. Class one greade three students made the action in suburbs. First of all, they met at country road in the morning and went to the suburbs by bike. After the arrived at the suburbs they began to planted the tree and watered the tree. While they finished planting, they made a sign beside the trees. The words in the sign are plase protect the trees. Finally they took some photos and back to the home.

What a meaningful day!

点评：（要点描述不充分；尤其是第二幅图没有展开；所用句式和词汇有限；有语法等表述错误，影响对内容的理解。6分）

4

April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering them. After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.