2016专四作文讲评及写作指导

一、2016年专业四级写作题目概况

（一）测试要求：写一篇200个单词左右的作文，考试时间45分钟，计20分。

（二）2016年专四作文评分标准：

1.summary（6分）

ments （12分）

A.思想与表达（ideas and arguments）7分（满分7分，其中6-7分优秀，4-5分良好，3分一般，1-2分较差。）

（1）思想内容（content）

内容切题；内容充实；观点明确；论据支持论点；有独到见解。

（2）表达效果（effectiveness）

表达清晰；有说服力。

（3）篇章组织结构（rhetorical organization）

每段有主题句；句间衔接自然；段间过渡自然；第一部分明确提出观点；最后一部分自然得出结论；段落排列合理。

B.语言运用能力（language use）5分（满分5分，其中5分优秀，3-4分良好，2分一般，1分较差。）

（1）准确性（correctness）

语法正确；句子结构正确；固定搭配正确；用词准确。

（2）丰富性（richness）

词汇丰富；句子形式多样。

（3）得体性（appropriateness）

语气恰当；语言地道。

3.写作规范mechanics（2分）（满分2分，其中2分优秀，1.5分良好，1分一般，0.5分较差）

单词拼写正确；标点符号正确；大小写正确；书写美观；卷面整洁。

范文1

When it comes to whether parents should take their children to spend holidays during term-time, views on the issue vary from person to person.（引入话题） Parents claim that by doing so, they can save a lot of money born of busy school holidays. Educational officials strongly oppose this tendency on the ground that it encourages truancy, which in turn damages a child’s education.（两种观点）As a result, UK’s education authorities are now banning parents from taking their children for holidays during term-time to save money.（概括材料）

From my perspective, the merits of banning term-time holidays outweigh its demerits.（陈述观点）To begin with, taking tough measures on this kind of truancy is conducive to the normal teaching process, one of the key elements to guarantee kid’s academic performance.（理由一）As we know, currently, teachers have the discretion to approve a certain time of absence from school for each child. By definitely abolishing the right of head teachers to “authorize absence” from the classroom, those teachers can rarely be pestered by parents who want to take children to go on a holiday just to save money, which severely disrupts teaching process.（具体论证一）What ’s more, without strict penalties imposed on the parents who lead to their kid’s playing truant, those parents can gradually view asking for holiday leave as a right.（理由二）Once this cultural expectation is formed, the level of truancy will dramatically increase.（假设论证二）

Accordingly, the growing trend of term-time holidays should be banned with no delay.（重申论点）In this way, teachers can impart knowledge without disturbance and parents will be deterred from saving money at the expense of sacrificing their kid’s education.

范文2

New research has shown that almost four out of ten parents in the UK have taken their children out of school to go on holidays.（描述背景）Cost is the main reason given by parents for sacrificing their children’s education. Parents are to be banned,