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Later that evening when Pappy was closing up the shop, he heard a familiar ringing. He couldn’t believe his ears. The girl stood in the doorway, ringing the bell happily. Then Pappy got close to her and asked, “Have you changed your mind, Miss?” “ No. My Momma says the present is for you.” said the child. Before Pappy had time to say another word, a young woman walked in. She said to Pappy, “Hello, Dad.”


Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心
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Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心
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Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心

One day, the Brother, who had become a Monk, forced himself on the same road where he found accommodation years ago. ① He decided to visit the family. ②But the shabby cottage was nowhere to be found. He only found a splendid house. ③He thought the family might die. Suddenly, a man came out. The monk recognized him. It was the father of the family. So he asked, “ Have you lived here?”
How to polish your story?
润色文章的技巧
1. 使用较高级的词汇 advanced words and phrases
技 巧
2. 使用较丰富的句式 abundant sentence patterns
3. 使用恰当的连接词 proper conjunctions
How to polish your words?
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With a giant tear in her eye, the little girl looked up at him. She forced a smile, saying“Thank you” and walked towards the door.Pappy thought of his daughter and said to the girl loudly, “How much have you got to spend?” Hearing this, the little girl counted money in her purse---two dollars. After thinking for a few seconds, Pappy said,“Today is Christmas Day and this is your lucky day. The bell costs two dollars.” The child went out, holding the special bell in her hand.
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Tip1：“小”心思——丰满人物内心

One day, the Brother, who had become a Monk, forced himself on the same road where he found accommodation years ago. ① Driven by a sense of regret, he decided to visit the family. ②To his great surprise, the shabby cottage was nowhere to be found. He only found a splendid house. ③Upon thinking the family might have starved to death, he sighed with guilt. Suddenly, a man came out. The monk recognized him. It was the father of the family. So he asked, “ Have you lived here?”

“小”心思——丰满人物内心 Inner thoughts to portray the figures “小”词汇——增加表达效果 Detailed verbs to make expressions powerful
“小”细节——丰富故事情节 Proper adv to enrich your story