2014 潍坊二模书面表达阅卷总结

潍坊二模书面表达阅卷总结

要点一：建议他来中国

好词好句：

1. I subscribe to the view that you can come to China to get a job which is of great benefit to you.

2. As far as I’m concerned, it’s a good choice for you to work in China.

3.Y ou asked for my advice about wh ether you come to China for a job or not .It’s my pleasure to give my suggestions as follows.

典型错误：

1.Y ou said you will come China to find a work .As far as I concerned, work in China is good .My advices are following.

2.I suggest you to come to China.

要点二：阐述理由

1）就业机会多

好词好句：

1.When it comes to working in China ,there is no doubt that you will have many alternatives .

2.China is a large country where you won’t find it tough to get a job.

典型错误：

1.China is easy to find a work .

2.There have many works for you to chose.

3.The chances to find a job is very large.

2）专业受欢迎

好词好句：

1,Y ou major in Internet is very popular.

2.Y ou have a good command of English ,which will help a lot in finding a job.

3.What you are majoring in is popular in China, which will benefit you a lot.

典型错误：

1.Y our knowledge is popular with China.

2.Y ou learn English is good .

3）不同的文化体验

好词好句：

1.In terms of developing yourself, you can experience different cultures ,which contributes to broaden your horizons and enrich your knowledge.

2.What is more attractive is that you could enjoy a different culture in China.

典型错误：

1. Y ou can experienced different culture to rich you knowledge.

2.China culture is differ from the England.

要点三：承诺可提供帮助

好词好句：

1.What I’d like to tell you is that I’ll do all I can to help you when you are in trouble.

2.Don’t hesitate to turn to me whenever you get into trouble .

3. Whenever you have trouble in China ,I will spare no efforts to help you out.

典型错误：

1.I promised to help you when you need.

2.I will can try help you if you have trouble.

总体评价

优点：多数作文，要点全，段落结构清晰,让人一看就明确本段写得是哪一个要点。

缺点：1. 部分作文，内容看似充实，但很多句子与题目主题没有太大的联系，特别是要点二阐述理由部分，为什么建议Mike来中国？原因就是与在英国工作相比，在中国工作所具有的的优势，而一些同学用大量篇幅描述中国，这使内容看似充实；

2. 还有一些作文不分段，一段到底，较难辨别要点；

3. 个别还用蓝色笔、铅笔，还有用胶带纸粘的，有用修正带的，有同一字母来回重复画的，这直接造成卷面差；

4. 大小写混乱,特别是在单个的副词或短语之后的单词首字母大写。如：Now, Y ou … ，In my opinion, It …

分要点评价

要点一

好词好句：congratulations.

Congratulate you on your graduation.

The reasons why I advise you to come to China are as follows:

典型错误：as far as you/I concerned,

I heard about you go to China.

I writting you to …

要点二

好词好句：quantities of

There is no doubt that …

As time goes by, …

What’s more, moreover, furthermore, last but not least…

典型错误：at the first

The China is develop quickly.

There are many chance/opportunity.

Y ou will welcome in China.

Y ou could have different culture experience.

要点三

好词好句：in short

I would appreciate it if you accept my advice.

I will spare no effort to help you.

典型错误：I sure I will help you.

Looking forward your reply.

学生优秀句子

信开头

1. I’m writing to give you some suggestions, which I hope might be of some help to you.

2. I could express my happiness on hear that you intend to work in China.

3. Hearing that you will graduate and decide to seek for a job in China, I feel very delighted.

建议部分

1.In my opinion, it’s a good choice to work in China.

2.Considering you are good at Chinese, I strongly recommend you to find a job in China.

3.Y ou may as well make the best of your qualifications to find a job here.

原因部分