浙江省高考英语第三部分写作导练案第二讲读后续写练习

第二讲读后续写

李仕才

典例展示

(2017·浙江6月高考)阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bright，warm July afternoon，Mac Hollan，a primary school teacher，was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends．One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair，but they had encouraged Mac to carry on，and they would catch up with him soon.As Mac pedaled(骑行)along alone，he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home．He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday. Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him.“Man，that’s a big dog！”he thought.But when he looked to the side，he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all，but a wolf，quickly catching up with him.

Mac’s heart jumped．He found out his can of bear spray.With one hand on the bars，he fired the spray at the wolf.A bright red cloud enveloped the animal，and to Mac’s relief，it fell back，shaking its head.But a minute later，it was by his side again.Then it attacked the back of Mac’s bike，tearing open his tent bag.He fired at the wolf a second time，and again，it fell back only to quickly restart the chase(追赶)．Mac was pedaling hard now.He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down.He saw a steep uphill climb before him.He knew that once he hit the hill，he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh. At this moment，Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska.They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road.A bit later，they spotted what they，too，assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike.As they got closer，they realized that the dog was a wolf.Mac heard a large vehicle behind him.He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast，just a dozen yards away now.

注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2．应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：

The car abruptly stopped in front of him.

Paragraph 2：

A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.

思路导航

一、审题

体裁记叙文

人称第三人称

时态一般过去时

所标出的

关键词语表人物的有：Mac，Paul，friends

表事物的有：home，wolf，bicycle，cars 表动作的有：jumped，pedaled，climb

前文大意Mac与好友一起骑行去阿拉斯加，路上同伴因修自行车落后，Mac独自一人前行，遇到狼的突袭，于是他拼命逃，却得不到援助。这时，一辆车停在了他前面……

二、抓住段首句设问

续写段首1：The car abruptly stopped in front of him.

设问：Why did it stop? How did Mac feel? What would Mac/Paul do？... 续写段首2：A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.

设问：After they arrived，what did they see? How did they feel? What would they do？...

三、谋篇

(1)续写材料第一段所给的首句是The car abruptly stopped in front of him.，在行文过程中应抓住关键词语the car stopped，再发挥丰富的想象，把Paul停车后如何在千钧一发之际拯救Mac的过程写得趣味横生又合乎情理。

(2)第二段所给的首句是A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.，起承上启下的作用。朋友到达之后看到、听到并做了什么。最后应该提炼思想性和体现价值观的传递正能量的元素(如珍爱生命，学会合作或感激等)，以提升文章的档次。

(3)在续写时，除了注意原文给出的关键词语，还需要注意以下线索：Why did the wolf chase Mac? What did Paul see when driving the car on the way to Alaska? He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast，just a dozen yards away now.Why did he stop the car?

(4)在确定了思路和内容之后，续写时，要注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性，并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯。

【参考范文】

Paragraph 1：

The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Paul rolled down the window and yelled，“Man，get in the car！” Without any hesitation，Mac jumped off the bicycle and dashed into the back seat of the car.At the same time，the wolf caught up.Luckily，the car’s door was firm enough to stop the wolf.However，they couldn’t just stay there.Because the wolf was under the protection of the law，they couldn’t kill it.So Paul pressed the button of the horn to make an alert.Finally，the wolf left and disappeared.

Paragraph 2：

A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.They were shocked to see that Mac’s tent bag was in poor condition.And they were even more shocked to hear that he met a wolf.After a short rest，Mac was much better.So they thanked Paul and Beeky and decided to continue pedaling to Alaska.Time flew; the sun was hiding its last gold like a miser.Though tired，Mac thought of his wife and lovely children again.He had such a horrible but exciting experience to share!